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Desperate Measure (Part One)
Business has been slow, a grind
Just another P.I. becoming bored
The hint of vodka on my breath
The smell of smoke rising from the L.A. streets
But there's a whiff of something more
When she walks through the door
The scent of musk and Chanel
She's an expensive fox
The mink on her shoulders a mute witness
Raven hair, flashing eyes, full lips
And a body to drop dead for
The entire, sweet package in other words
Checking me out like I am her
"It's time for desperate measures," she sighs,
"And it looks like you're as desperate as they come."
"But I don't come cheap," I snap
"Of course not, babe," she breaths
"Let's put it this way:
"Indiscretions haunt me, someone who needs removing,
And it looks like you're the hero for the job..."
Just another P.I. becoming bored
The hint of vodka on my breath
The smell of smoke rising from the L.A. streets
But there's a whiff of something more
When she walks through the door
The scent of musk and Chanel
She's an expensive fox
The mink on her shoulders a mute witness
Raven hair, flashing eyes, full lips
And a body to drop dead for
The entire, sweet package in other words
Checking me out like I am her
"It's time for desperate measures," she sighs,
"And it looks like you're as desperate as they come."
"But I don't come cheap," I snap
"Of course not, babe," she breaths
"Let's put it this way:
"Indiscretions haunt me, someone who needs removing,
And it looks like you're the hero for the job..."
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Re. Desperate Measure (Part One)
Anonymous
15th Oct 2015 8:08pm
I'm sure this is bound to take me somewhere. . .to be continued. . .intrigued, I am, Sir Fly;). . .xo, Devlin.
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Re: Re. Desperate Measure (Part One)
16th Oct 2015 8:17pm
I'm honestly not sure where this is going if anywhere at all. Just taking it one chapter at a time. An outline might help, no doubt, a little planning. But we shall see.... Thanks Devlin!
Re. Desperate Measure (Part One)
15th Oct 2015 8:32pm
100% behind miss dev, can't wait to see where this goes...
... a fantastic teaser crowfly
xoxox
... a fantastic teaser crowfly
xoxox
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16th Oct 2015 8:18pm
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16th Oct 2015 8:21pm
Thanks Crim! You're kind of a femme fatale yourself, a demonic seductress with style.
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15th Oct 2015 8:54pm
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16th Oct 2015 8:22pm
Re. Desperate Measure (Part One)
15th Oct 2015 10:00pm
Wan it...all..now..but that anticipation. Bites but foreplay!
But I don't come cheap," I snap
"Of course not, babe," she breaths
"Let's put it this way:
"Indiscretions haunt me, someone who needs removing,
And it looks like you're the hero for the job..."
Wearing big gold "C" cross your chest? Under your button up hmm..denim?
What is T Crowflies er day attire..? ...got me stirred, this curiois miss.
Places..
Jennifer
But I don't come cheap," I snap
"Of course not, babe," she breaths
"Let's put it this way:
"Indiscretions haunt me, someone who needs removing,
And it looks like you're the hero for the job..."
Wearing big gold "C" cross your chest? Under your button up hmm..denim?
What is T Crowflies er day attire..? ...got me stirred, this curiois miss.
Places..
Jennifer
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16th Oct 2015 8:26pm
Gotta keep your curiosity burning, Jennifer. Gonna keep a little something for your imagination. Or maybe a medium size something. Thanks baby!
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Re. Desperate Measure (Part One)
16th Oct 2015 1:18am
Ahhhh....Mo Chara.....most compelling!!!
The drop dead gorgeous, femme fatale....the rugged PI down on his luck....bound to form a very fascinating--if not somewhat dangerous..(.maybe even lethal)-- relationship!
I simply cannot wait to see what your amazing talent has in store for these two ! xo
Please don't keep us waiting too long! :)
The drop dead gorgeous, femme fatale....the rugged PI down on his luck....bound to form a very fascinating--if not somewhat dangerous..(.maybe even lethal)-- relationship!
I simply cannot wait to see what your amazing talent has in store for these two ! xo
Please don't keep us waiting too long! :)
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16th Oct 2015 7:56am
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16th Oct 2015 12:32pm
Re. Desperate Measure (Part One)
16th Oct 2015 11:55pm
Oh yes! .. this is a rich classic plus killer Crow commentary.. & series?!..
equals a suspenseful dark *swoon..
" "But I don't come cheap," I snap"..
~this near knocked me over misters.. great clear but snitty cuteness brought giggle fits..tyty.
cannot wait to see where your glorious mind twists this one.. lucky fer me I can go right to next one..;)
[hugs to pardon my tardy]
lovin' this start of shady tale, sweetie!
~T
equals a suspenseful dark *swoon..
" "But I don't come cheap," I snap"..
~this near knocked me over misters.. great clear but snitty cuteness brought giggle fits..tyty.
cannot wait to see where your glorious mind twists this one.. lucky fer me I can go right to next one..;)
[hugs to pardon my tardy]
lovin' this start of shady tale, sweetie!
~T
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Re. Desperate Measure (Part One)
22nd Oct 2015 6:58pm
Ok now Mr. hero for the job...lol..
Had to read your first two, in order to understand your last one...
Love that you stimulate our sense of smell in this one.... ~ I'm a Chanel type of girl.
Had to read your first two, in order to understand your last one...
Love that you stimulate our sense of smell in this one.... ~ I'm a Chanel type of girl.
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Re. Desperate Measure (Part One)
22nd Nov 2015 8:40am
You have suuuuuch a handle on atmosphere and dialogue. No wonder readers get lost in your fog. Somehow the guiding pull of the story always carries itself and I envy that sense of panache. Fine start crowfly!
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