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Baggage
And with a sigh,
granting momentary lift,
I glance at dirty laundry,
hung and left to dry.
This too will add to the luggage, already weighing heavy.
It is mine, and mine alone to carry.
I packed it all away,
then set out on my way.
granting momentary lift,
I glance at dirty laundry,
hung and left to dry.
This too will add to the luggage, already weighing heavy.
It is mine, and mine alone to carry.
I packed it all away,
then set out on my way.
Published 12th Sep 2015
| Edited 4th Feb 2016
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19th Sep 2015 7:42am
Cool and satisfying write Preston
Like the structure and placement of "already weighing heavy"
Like the structure and placement of "already weighing heavy"
25th Jan 2016 3:12am
Odd yet playful. No comma before and or but. Also, no need for punctuation with shortened format. Less is more. Keep Grindin CAOS737
3rd Feb 2016 8:07am
Thank you so much for the helpful feedback. This flawed little poem has a special place in my heart. Thanks for bringing me back to it.
