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Showtime On A Summer Night
He takes a seat firmly on the curb
Shoulder-to-shoulder with the locals
And drifters contained on Central Avenue
A faded beauty offers him a sandwich
But he declines with a nod of gratitude
Having just dined at Midnight Mission
She just smiles and strokes his arm
Saying "Don't look now, but I love you"
He's never noticed her before
But accepts this at face value
His options having narrowed in recent years
Something he chooses not to dwell on
Plus it's show time, no curtains parted
But cardboard residences fold open
And two semi-retired mimes emerge
Their gestures lacking precision
But close enough to kick ass in jest
They glare at each other, circling like panthers
Then shrug, blow a few mutual kisses
While stepping into their ultimate gypsy dance
And the audience springs to their feet
Clapping, whistling, thrilled
Privileged to bear witness
To this, the finest performance in town.
Shoulder-to-shoulder with the locals
And drifters contained on Central Avenue
A faded beauty offers him a sandwich
But he declines with a nod of gratitude
Having just dined at Midnight Mission
She just smiles and strokes his arm
Saying "Don't look now, but I love you"
He's never noticed her before
But accepts this at face value
His options having narrowed in recent years
Something he chooses not to dwell on
Plus it's show time, no curtains parted
But cardboard residences fold open
And two semi-retired mimes emerge
Their gestures lacking precision
But close enough to kick ass in jest
They glare at each other, circling like panthers
Then shrug, blow a few mutual kisses
While stepping into their ultimate gypsy dance
And the audience springs to their feet
Clapping, whistling, thrilled
Privileged to bear witness
To this, the finest performance in town.
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19th Aug 2015 5:17pm
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19th Aug 2015 8:23pm
Re. Showtime On A Summer Night
19th Aug 2015 5:54pm
something about this reminds me so much of being back home, absolutely love it
xoxox
xoxox
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19th Aug 2015 8:26pm
I'm glad Katja! This scene is actually set in downtown L.A., but in some ways it could be anywhere. I'm delighted you enjoyed, and thanks for the listing!
Re. Showtime On A Summer Night
19th Aug 2015 8:43pm
Omfg.. *flashed me back*.. several years ago walking in the financial district/ Spring st/ LA..
unholy crap!.. you are *goood sir Crow! skyscrapers & overpriced [not so great] coffee. lol & a sigh. don't miss the crowds much, but the grub is a lamentable loss near here. lol. thankies fer the trip bk in time minus gas prices! ;)
"..She just smiles and strokes his arm
Saying "Don't look now, but I love you".. "
~beauty in ur lines darlin.. this shines as a soft spot midst your spring st. procession..be well ;)
lil curtsies,
~d
unholy crap!.. you are *goood sir Crow! skyscrapers & overpriced [not so great] coffee. lol & a sigh. don't miss the crowds much, but the grub is a lamentable loss near here. lol. thankies fer the trip bk in time minus gas prices! ;)
"..She just smiles and strokes his arm
Saying "Don't look now, but I love you".. "
~beauty in ur lines darlin.. this shines as a soft spot midst your spring st. procession..be well ;)
lil curtsies,
~d
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Darksighs, I might have to change the street name here, because Spring Street, now that memory serves, is too far west from this specific area. This is more like Central Avenue in the vicinity of Skid Row. I'll see what I can do. Meanwhile, thanks for the comment, fine lady!
Re. Showtime On A Summer Night
20th Aug 2015 1:07am
Mo Chara,
A very vivid scene so perfectly presented in your uniquely special style! For some reason, this stirred nostalgic childhood memories of a couple of summers spent in a rural community that catered to traveling carnivals/circuses. Prior to 'opening day', residents lined the streets to watch the parade of performers, and small demonstrations of some featured acts. This piece brought these fond recollections to mind! (Thank you! xo)
......and next time, could you plz save me a spot?
A very vivid scene so perfectly presented in your uniquely special style! For some reason, this stirred nostalgic childhood memories of a couple of summers spent in a rural community that catered to traveling carnivals/circuses. Prior to 'opening day', residents lined the streets to watch the parade of performers, and small demonstrations of some featured acts. This piece brought these fond recollections to mind! (Thank you! xo)
......and next time, could you plz save me a spot?
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20th Aug 2015 4:51pm
I'd be glad to save you that spot, Enchantress. This poem's about people finding some entertainment but also making the most of their lives, whatever their situation. Who needs season tickets to the Dorothy Chandler Pavilion?
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20th Aug 2015 6:57pm
EXACTLY!! Soo much to be said for Life's simple pleasures :))
(...and thanks for holding that spot for me, mo Chara! xo)
(...and thanks for holding that spot for me, mo Chara! xo)
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Re. Showtime On A Summer Night
20th Aug 2015 2:26am
Wow... there are many ways this can be read, and none of them bad by any measure... some deep and thought provoking. Last line is a zinger! Great piece of writing here.
Michael
Michael
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Re: Re. Showtime On A Summer Night
20th Aug 2015 4:54pm
Thank you Michael! I was trying for some ambiguity. Locking in one interpretation is often a mistake deep underground.
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Crow, for me this piece evokes memories of working in San Francisco and enjoying the many characters that one sees on the streets there...especially in the Haight/Ashbury area that still maintains a 60's Summer of love atmosphere. I am also reminded of the talented Gypsy musicians that I would see on the streets of Spain when I lived there for a time.
I also thought it was an interesting glimpse into the lives of the homeless and those down on their luck...that even in their desperate circumstances they can still derive pleasure and escape from a simple street performance. Bravo Sir!
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20th Aug 2015 8:46pm
The scene is the homeless district in Downtown L.A., Gahdess. Those cardboard containers are the residences of the "semi-retired mimes" I mentioned here. My intent was, as you say, to present their ability to enjoy life despite dire circumstances. Other interpretations are fine. It could also be Haight-Ashbury, which didn't occur to me. I paid a visit there with my father in 1968 and it blew my mind. Almost a performance on every corner. Thanks for the comment!
Re. Showtime On A Summer Night
20th Aug 2015 10:48pm
pictureques scene crowfly somehow made me feel like i was eavesdropping ...like i was watching my neighbors argue across the street trying to figure out what they were saying lol ...especially this part
"Their gestures lacking precision
But close enough to kick ass in jest
They glare at each other, circling like panthers
Then shrug, blow a few mutual kisses "
truly enjoyed this
"Their gestures lacking precision
But close enough to kick ass in jest
They glare at each other, circling like panthers
Then shrug, blow a few mutual kisses "
truly enjoyed this
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20th Aug 2015 11:07pm
Thanks poeticDesire. It's almost impossible to resist observing stormy behavior, especially if those involved aren't inclined to keep it private. Even a violent argument is sometimes a performance, or spectator sport. The "semi-retired mimes" in this might be drawing on past personal experience and offering a parody, sardonic as it might be. And it might be a thrill and reassurance to see them blowing those kisses. Far better than a blood bath. Thanks for attending the show!
Re. Showtime On A Summer Night
21st Aug 2015 7:07pm
entertainment & compassion on Skid Row. enjoyed the communal quality...
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21st Aug 2015 7:20pm