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Register 9
Playing the waiting game at Generic Depot
At the end of the late afternoon line
Growing more disgruntled by the minute
But the checker's a model of cool efficiency
More beautiful the nearer this local god gets
She finally whisks his few items over the scanner
Gazing at him with turquoise eyes
Her smile more radiant than the lights overhead
"Miranda," he whispers, reading her tag
"Forget about this travesty, pure drudgery
And accompany me to Paradise
There we'll experience endless pleasure
The entire spectrum of sensual experience
Your every desire, and mine, fulfilled"
Miranda's eyes widen in wonder
Filled with some nameless passion
Her full lips parting as they approach the mike
To murmur "Security, Register 9..."
At the end of the late afternoon line
Growing more disgruntled by the minute
But the checker's a model of cool efficiency
More beautiful the nearer this local god gets
She finally whisks his few items over the scanner
Gazing at him with turquoise eyes
Her smile more radiant than the lights overhead
"Miranda," he whispers, reading her tag
"Forget about this travesty, pure drudgery
And accompany me to Paradise
There we'll experience endless pleasure
The entire spectrum of sensual experience
Your every desire, and mine, fulfilled"
Miranda's eyes widen in wonder
Filled with some nameless passion
Her full lips parting as they approach the mike
To murmur "Security, Register 9..."
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Re. Register 9
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15th Aug 2015 9:31pm
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16th Aug 2015 00:33am
That didn't occur to me about "District 9," but I see your point. I love that movie! Thanks Gabriel!
Re. Register 9
15th Aug 2015 9:32pm
Sir Crow you reeled me in with this captivating tale and giggling at the end :)
thank you for the laugh..
with love Crim
thank you for the laugh..
with love Crim
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Re: Re. Register 9
16th Aug 2015 00:34am
Re. Register 9
Anonymous
15th Aug 2015 9:34pm
"Her full lips parting as they approach the mike
To murmur "Security, Register 9..." "
Perhaps she was calling 'Security' on herself to help restrain herself from jumping over the register's counter and ravishing you to death!. . .Ooh, I'm getting goosebumps, CrowFly. . .an erotically comical write. . .well done!. . .
To murmur "Security, Register 9..." "
Perhaps she was calling 'Security' on herself to help restrain herself from jumping over the register's counter and ravishing you to death!. . .Ooh, I'm getting goosebumps, CrowFly. . .an erotically comical write. . .well done!. . .
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16th Aug 2015 00:31am
Re. Register 9
16th Aug 2015 1:10am
Ahhhh....grins and giggles, mo Chara! (From just one aisle over), could sooo clearly 'picture' this Saturday scenario of sensuality!
Clearly...Miss Miranda simply didn't appreciate the awesome experience awaiting her...( or the sexy shopper willing to battle the crowd, just to offer her such a passionate escape into paradise!!)
Another memorable piece, to be sure! xo
Clearly...Miss Miranda simply didn't appreciate the awesome experience awaiting her...( or the sexy shopper willing to battle the crowd, just to offer her such a passionate escape into paradise!!)
Another memorable piece, to be sure! xo
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Re: Re. Register 9
16th Aug 2015 1:26am
She clearly didn't follow the axiom that "the customer's always right," and store policy forbade being swept away by a crowfly. Thanks Enchantress!
Re. Register 9
16th Aug 2015 1:14am
Oh damn sir Crow.. you sooo had me goin there w/the smooth pickup-line jazz & was all *swoon-like &
am reading on &..then..wait- !!.. Wha-? Security?! So funny, ty fer the giggle.*lmsao
y'know, she was prolly just playing hard to get.. [yep,] OR- did she maaaybe call security cuz she got so *excited? ;)
just seein the wicked positives here. winx.
"Miranda's eyes widen in wonder
Filled with some nameless passion" <~sneaky gorgeous lines..
Sweet hellz.. this is great misters, enjoyed the Non-Love-Potion #9 at Register#9 tale!..good evenin' to you hun'!
~d
am reading on &..then..wait- !!.. Wha-? Security?! So funny, ty fer the giggle.*lmsao
y'know, she was prolly just playing hard to get.. [yep,] OR- did she maaaybe call security cuz she got so *excited? ;)
just seein the wicked positives here. winx.
"Miranda's eyes widen in wonder
Filled with some nameless passion" <~sneaky gorgeous lines..
Sweet hellz.. this is great misters, enjoyed the Non-Love-Potion #9 at Register#9 tale!..good evenin' to you hun'!
~d
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Re: Re. Register 9
16th Aug 2015 1:31am
We seem to be out of that potion. Hmmm..... Maybe a lust lotion, shelved under "aphrodisiacs." Thanks Darksighs. You have a fine evening yourself!
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16th Aug 2015 3:49am
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16th Aug 2015 8:47pm
Re. Register 9
16th Aug 2015 4:20am
no lovelorn poets allowed. the real world is such a blight on the artist...
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Re: Re. Register 9
16th Aug 2015 8:51pm
It can be a grind, but the real world can be twisted to suit our purposes. There's always hope! Thanks John!
Re. Register 9
18th Aug 2015 12:13pm
crowman, i'm in fits of giggles over here. you had me hook, line & sinker throughout. exceptional story telling xo
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