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Requiem
There are moments of clarity
But they pass so quickly…
I am brittle bone and aching flesh
And I know too well
That your demons are stronger than me.
They
Make me run
For the darkest corner
I can find
And sometimes
There are no corners.
I dreamt you were dying.
I found you on your bed
Lying with your eyes wide open
Red rimmed fear
Terrorized blue
Peering into a gutted
Eternity.
I held you fierce
When you took your last breath
But you were already gone
Dissolved by fear and isolation….
Just you
And those hulking demons
Safeguarding your imminent release.
I don’t know,
Even now,
If that dream was
A longing for your freedom
Or a longing for mine.
But they pass so quickly…
I am brittle bone and aching flesh
And I know too well
That your demons are stronger than me.
They
Make me run
For the darkest corner
I can find
And sometimes
There are no corners.
I dreamt you were dying.
I found you on your bed
Lying with your eyes wide open
Red rimmed fear
Terrorized blue
Peering into a gutted
Eternity.
I held you fierce
When you took your last breath
But you were already gone
Dissolved by fear and isolation….
Just you
And those hulking demons
Safeguarding your imminent release.
I don’t know,
Even now,
If that dream was
A longing for your freedom
Or a longing for mine.
Published 5th Aug 2015
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5th Aug 2015 7:35pm
I can feel the despair and underlying fear so prominent in this eloquent write may this person be permanently vanquished with love Crim
5th Aug 2015 9:09pm
"That your demons are stronger than me. " This is tough to handle. As odd as it may sound, my education on how to fight demons come from the Exorcist. "Especially important is the warning to avoid conversations with the demon. We may ask what is relevant but anything beyond that is dangerous. He is a liar. The demon is a liar. He will lie to confuse us. But he will also mix lies with the truth to attack us. The attack is psychological, Damien, and powerful. So don't listen to him. Remember that - do not listen." - Father Merris.
Your poem is actually touching and tender towards the end. There is sadness in those last lines, but a bit of hope behind it. Its like, you will be satisfied for his freedom, but your own...well, that is something you dream of.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sccU4xjPmtY
(don't worry, it's not porn... hahaha)
Your poem is actually touching and tender towards the end. There is sadness in those last lines, but a bit of hope behind it. Its like, you will be satisfied for his freedom, but your own...well, that is something you dream of.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sccU4xjPmtY
(don't worry, it's not porn... hahaha)
Anonymous
5th Aug 2015 9:09pm
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5th Aug 2015 9:24pm
For those we love that suffer addictions, mental illness or both...a roller coaster of pain. Understand this piece. All too well. Great structure and flow though.
Sometimes the fine lines between dreams and reality are difficult to distinguish. Soulfully conveyed reflection.
6th Aug 2015 8:31pm
"I don’t know,
Even now,
If that dream was
A longing for your freedom
Or a longing for mine."
It seems that the outcome would benefit everybody involved.
Beautifully written, and tragically felt. Dark and full of supple chills. It sounds like you know what you want.
Even now,
If that dream was
A longing for your freedom
Or a longing for mine."
It seems that the outcome would benefit everybody involved.
Beautifully written, and tragically felt. Dark and full of supple chills. It sounds like you know what you want.
10th Aug 2015 7:45am
6th Sep 2015 00:58am
Petal... Ur imagery in this poem is spot on...
I wish you didn't have to feel this way..
Sadly until those chains are broken you may never really know,
although i suspect it's both...
Loves you Gurly...
In the list.
Love
Always
Zazzles xoxoxoxox
I wish you didn't have to feel this way..
Sadly until those chains are broken you may never really know,
although i suspect it's both...
Loves you Gurly...
In the list.
Love
Always
Zazzles xoxoxoxox
