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The Tree
I wanted to scream from the porch, kick dirt in their face
say something about injustice, idiocy, nonconformity;
or all, or some, or nothing at all if they'd just stop. STOP!
Nope, because there has to be direction; a plan; a reverse
change of wind after the tree is gang-raped by four men,
wooden-dress ripped, exposed vertebrae saw-dust-spread.
It's a loudness, a soul stomping pain, a wail plowing
the field of faith kicking loose the gate. It's the audacity
of progress when you're gnawing on that last bite of hope;
the dinosaur coming alive only to smell the death of all
he once roamed. It's soured, spoilt, curdled, some thing
beyond words. Nope, why stop now, let's find out. It's done,
nature shamed, dust and sand fill the eyes and everything
smells like choke, but not dry choke from burning leaves,
nope. It's the slow gurgle of life, the last burst of struggling
air from sludge before the upward rise. What did I really
believe? Inspiration would plummet into my marbled mind,
splintering like a chandelier giving birth to a billion bits
of channeled poem with morning coffee and birds simply
because it had always been there? Look at this very moment;
Nope. I gather flakes of its white ashes, still warm in my palm.
Neighbors shocked by the crime struggle hard to console as I
conjure a ritual to pay homage to all that its Life once was.
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say something about injustice, idiocy, nonconformity;
or all, or some, or nothing at all if they'd just stop. STOP!
Nope, because there has to be direction; a plan; a reverse
change of wind after the tree is gang-raped by four men,
wooden-dress ripped, exposed vertebrae saw-dust-spread.
It's a loudness, a soul stomping pain, a wail plowing
the field of faith kicking loose the gate. It's the audacity
of progress when you're gnawing on that last bite of hope;
the dinosaur coming alive only to smell the death of all
he once roamed. It's soured, spoilt, curdled, some thing
beyond words. Nope, why stop now, let's find out. It's done,
nature shamed, dust and sand fill the eyes and everything
smells like choke, but not dry choke from burning leaves,
nope. It's the slow gurgle of life, the last burst of struggling
air from sludge before the upward rise. What did I really
believe? Inspiration would plummet into my marbled mind,
splintering like a chandelier giving birth to a billion bits
of channeled poem with morning coffee and birds simply
because it had always been there? Look at this very moment;
Nope. I gather flakes of its white ashes, still warm in my palm.
Neighbors shocked by the crime struggle hard to console as I
conjure a ritual to pay homage to all that its Life once was.
~
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Re: The Tree
12th Jun 2015 7:22pm
the anger certainly comes through -
and the killing of a tree is reason
enough, since who can profit (the
mot juste, I think) from its death...
and the killing of a tree is reason
enough, since who can profit (the
mot juste, I think) from its death...
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Re: The Tree
12th Jun 2015 8:52pm
as children, we walked barefoot in the creek, down by the woods, where a tree stood with limb low enough for us to climb. during hot, hot summer, afternoon showers on parched Georgia clay was nose ambrosia. summer nights were filled with "lightening bugs", cricket chirps and croaking frogs; I remember those clear nights under sparkling stars we tried to count; it reminds me now of midnight blue velvet, sparking with tiny diamonds. in winter, mom scooped snow from porch bannister and top of the car, add sugar, milk and vanilla, shake!
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today, the creek is a nearly dry bed of trash and smelly unmentionables; one would probably contract a flesh-eating disease if they touched it.
the tree, and all those around it are now some form of commercial or residential property. haven't seen a peach tree here in the peach state, in at least 30 yrs.; fig tree even longer. there are still some apple trees, but they underproduce, if at all.
when my kids were small, I told them of mom's snow shakes. when they asked Gramma to make them one, she replied, sadly, lack of green life and pollutants have made the snow unsafe, dirty and unhealthy. We can't eat it anymore.
too foggy and smoggy to see the night sky as often, and the wildlife orchestra doesn't play as loudly, if at all.
I fear my great, great, great grandkids will never know the true joy and beauty of pure all things nature. and, that, makes me sad . . .
great write!
Green
the tree, and all those around it are now some form of commercial or residential property. haven't seen a peach tree here in the peach state, in at least 30 yrs.; fig tree even longer. there are still some apple trees, but they underproduce, if at all.
when my kids were small, I told them of mom's snow shakes. when they asked Gramma to make them one, she replied, sadly, lack of green life and pollutants have made the snow unsafe, dirty and unhealthy. We can't eat it anymore.
too foggy and smoggy to see the night sky as often, and the wildlife orchestra doesn't play as loudly, if at all.
I fear my great, great, great grandkids will never know the true joy and beauty of pure all things nature. and, that, makes me sad . . .
great write!
Green
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Re: The Tree
sorry for going over the deep end. i'm sure you can tell you touched a nerve that's been aching for a very, very long time.
that's what happens when you write feelings well. thanks for letting an old woman rant!
G
that's what happens when you write feelings well. thanks for letting an old woman rant!
G
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Green, ramble on. Not many remember the south in the way that we do. I lived in Mississippi post desegregation and traveled back about a decade or so ago. I literally cried to see the demise of all I had known transformed into trash dumps and abandoned homes. It hurts to see your childhood and big part of your life gone.
Re: The Tree
13th Jun 2015 00:05am
Ahavati, luv ~ :-*
Please, please, please, please, please let this not be your gorgeous, glorious Sondering tree. The loss of any tree would be horrid; the loss of That tree; unbearable.
You've written this with your inimitable style and then some...it wrenches at the heart, luv. :-*
Please, please, please, please, please let this not be your gorgeous, glorious Sondering tree. The loss of any tree would be horrid; the loss of That tree; unbearable.
You've written this with your inimitable style and then some...it wrenches at the heart, luv. :-*
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Nooo. It wasn't that one, but you know they're all connected. I felt so helpless. Thank you for your kind words. The Sondering Tree is fine. Thank God. I would've been arrested for interferring with that.
Re: The Tree
13th Jun 2015 00:23am
"change of wind after the tree is gang-raped by four men,
wooden-dress ripped, exposed vertebrae saw-dust-spread."
~biggest *impress ever! luv this til tears hit in cry.
If I need an advocate? you have my vote lady,
greatly presented. eye to eye on *this
be well ;)
~d
wooden-dress ripped, exposed vertebrae saw-dust-spread."
~biggest *impress ever! luv this til tears hit in cry.
If I need an advocate? you have my vote lady,
greatly presented. eye to eye on *this
be well ;)
~d
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Re: The Tree
13th Jun 2015 3:07am
Re: The Tree
13th Jun 2015 6:32am
deeply affecting write. laborers that needed to be kept busy, to justify their paychecks...
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Re: The Tree
13th Jun 2015 1:36pm
Oof! Power placed firmly behind the words of anger. A strong write and for good cause. This piece, whether you meant it to or not, hides a story of a changing world where we tear down nature to make room for silence, where we push over the "old" to make room for cheap buildings, parking lots, and landfills. This is a work that describes how we heartlessly consume in exchange for loss of beauty.
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"heartlessly" is right.
Thank you, everyone, for your comments. They are appreciated.
Thank you, everyone, for your comments. They are appreciated.
Re: The Tree
Anonymous
14th Jun 2015 12:54pm
"I gather flakes of its white
ashes, still warm in my palm"
heartbreaking. i have a fondness of trees, ones with a story, i'm just happy it's not your beloved sondering tree
ashes, still warm in my palm"
heartbreaking. i have a fondness of trees, ones with a story, i'm just happy it's not your beloved sondering tree
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Re: The Tree
15th Jun 2015 3:00am
hi, a really well written poem, which is igniting many flames of reminiscence. mine is when I lived in the countryside in north wales (uk) at night I could simply step onto my doorstep and look skywards and was ablaze with a millions winkings and if lucky the passing shooting star, whilst the only this to break this silence of the universe, were the gentle tinklings of a gently flowing stream....thank you ahavati, you helped ignite some shooting star memories with your poem, all the best, JEM
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Re: The Tree
2nd Jul 2016 1:00pm
Re. The Tree
1st Jul 2016 11:46pm
I really like this poem. The anger and all of the other feelings are showing (and once again you are painting a vivid image). Thank you for sharing! I really enjoyed this poem.
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Re. The Tree
Anonymous
18th Jan 2019 7:07pm
The moment of now always undergoing change, never staying the same and lamenting of what was once a joy to experience.
We must recreate the experience by revisiting that joy, even though the tree is gone, in order for the tree to return or another to manifest in it's place.
'💜💏💋
We must recreate the experience by revisiting that joy, even though the tree is gone, in order for the tree to return or another to manifest in it's place.
'💜💏💋
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