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T-Town
bus stopped in T-Town
I needed coffee. a hot meal
crossed the road to the diner
cute waitress. real cute
polished prettyness, like an angel
I figured a devil lurked inside
her nametag said Kitten
tattoos. fairies & gardens
butterflys. beckoned me to stroll
linger. ease my weariness, maybe
she asked what’s my pleasure
I grinned my moody grin
my pleasure’s not on the menu
she smiled, sorta
better start with coffee, stranger
eggs & hash browns are on special
she brought coffee & touched my hand
I warned her. be careful, Kitten
you’ll get your pretty fur tangled
she flashed her killer eyes
I’m not afraid of you, mister
we talked a little
we talked a lot
her road had been tough
bumps & ruts
littered with tears, broken hearts
snakebit dreams
men who held her. then walked away
the bus pulled out
she warmed my coffee
touched my hand again
smiled her Kitten smile
all of a sudden we’re lovers…
Published 11th Jun 2015
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11th Jun 2015 8:14pm
John you are the master of setting the scene with beautiful dangerous details laced throughout this ink.. brilliant with love Crim
11th Jun 2015 8:19pm
Hello John
This write restored my faith
restored my faith in
-chance meetings
-love
-happy endings (even as, it's a start)
-poetry
Thank you for that.
The ending here, is perfectly sudden in a lovely tight setting. Your imagery is masterful.
Al .
This write restored my faith
restored my faith in
-chance meetings
-love
-happy endings (even as, it's a start)
-poetry
Thank you for that.
The ending here, is perfectly sudden in a lovely tight setting. Your imagery is masterful.
Al .
11th Jun 2015 9:10pm
Something tells me Kitten is going to be singing "What's a Woman" by Vaya con dios again very soon!
Two planets colliding in a galaxy of need. Gotta love synchronicity.
Two planets colliding in a galaxy of need. Gotta love synchronicity.
11th Jun 2015 8:45pm
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11th Jun 2015 8:45pm
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Anonymous
11th Jun 2015 9:27pm
somehow find myself smirking by the end of this... i adore your slick delivery, Mister Feddeler
11th Jun 2015 10:35pm
11th Jun 2015 11:37pm
Kitten sounds like a dreamboat, and she'd more than earn my tip. Excellent drop by at the diner. Could I have fries with this?
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12th Jun 2015 00:06am
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12th Jun 2015 00:39am
JohnFeddeler, luv ~ :-*
Damn you, man. Oh, you got to me with this one. ;-*
I'll be adding it to my list as soon as I have room, you wickedly skillful creature, you.
You play us all so well... I see you, you know. ;-p
Damn you, man. Oh, you got to me with this one. ;-*
I'll be adding it to my list as soon as I have room, you wickedly skillful creature, you.
You play us all so well... I see you, you know. ;-p
Anonymous
12th Jun 2015 1:34am
"polished prettyness, like an angel
I figured a devil lurked inside"
JFeddeler, absolutely enjoyed the dark twist you added here at the beginning and not at the end - hats off to you. Secondly, and IMO, waitresses are to be envied as they have seen it all and heard it all which makes them valuable creatures in all aspects of a relationship. . .xoxo, Devlin;)
I figured a devil lurked inside"
JFeddeler, absolutely enjoyed the dark twist you added here at the beginning and not at the end - hats off to you. Secondly, and IMO, waitresses are to be envied as they have seen it all and heard it all which makes them valuable creatures in all aspects of a relationship. . .xoxo, Devlin;)
12th Jun 2015 4:03am
sometimes i say fuck this writing shit cuz i feel can't write anything worth reading or find it...
but sometimes you find it and than you can do it again too....
thanx man.......
but sometimes you find it and than you can do it again too....
thanx man.......
12th Jun 2015 1:20pm
The diners near me have craggy women who in need of a smoke break. Where did you say this was? I think I need to visit.
12th Jun 2015 5:21pm
"I warned her. be careful, Kitten
you’ll get your pretty fur tangled"
~smooth hawt play there!
Enjoyed your heated break-fasting story..
a bit peeved *I didn't know you cud order
off-menu..
great lightly-left ending SirJ, adore ur worx
~d
you’ll get your pretty fur tangled"
~smooth hawt play there!
Enjoyed your heated break-fasting story..
a bit peeved *I didn't know you cud order
off-menu..
great lightly-left ending SirJ, adore ur worx
~d
26th Jun 2015 5:38pm
