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As It Is
Pull down the Moon tonight.
Peel back its strawberry crust
like a freshly picked orange;
don't wash it off first.
Borrow the bow of Sagittarius;
offer your deepest intentions
into the present moment of it,
without gleaning them first.
When Life breaks around you,
and only change exists, accept
the dusty bowl of passage;
don't be too quick to polish it.
~
Peel back its strawberry crust
like a freshly picked orange;
don't wash it off first.
Borrow the bow of Sagittarius;
offer your deepest intentions
into the present moment of it,
without gleaning them first.
When Life breaks around you,
and only change exists, accept
the dusty bowl of passage;
don't be too quick to polish it.
~
Published 2nd Jun 2015
| Edited 18th Feb 2016
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2nd Jun 2015 10:22pm
Your words really tickled my imagination, & yes deeply enjoyable. Bowing
3rd Jun 2015 00:29am
You are some kind of special Ahavati!
I just love the way you think and write and this poem is perfect in everyway!!!
pull down the bow of sagittarius just brilliant!!
love
Zazzles xoxox
I just love the way you think and write and this poem is perfect in everyway!!!
pull down the bow of sagittarius just brilliant!!
love
Zazzles xoxox
Anonymous
3rd Jun 2015 00:36am
on the last line, did you consider "too quick" and "quick"? i'm listening to cadence here and i'm wondering if saying too quick doesn't move a bit better, maybe not. but i hear the wise one saying to the younging 'don't be too quick to...' like how we grew up with grandpa's advice. make sense? there must be a full moon tonight. things are weird. like this. gonna sonder with it a while.
I actually did consider that. I had 'And don't be quick' initially but didn't like the way it read. I decided to delete and insert too. I obviously didn't after deleting 'And'. Probably got a phone call or something at work and then forgot what I was doing. I'm getting pretty good at that lately.
It's a full Strawberry Moon in Sagittarius tonight. Set your intentions high and hold on for the whirlwind.
Thank you for catching that 'too', and thank you, everyone, for your kind comments. They are always appreciated. Full moon blessings to all.
It's a full Strawberry Moon in Sagittarius tonight. Set your intentions high and hold on for the whirlwind.
Thank you for catching that 'too', and thank you, everyone, for your kind comments. They are always appreciated. Full moon blessings to all.
3rd Jun 2015 2:00am
poetics of wisdom & experience. life is a gamble you pick up in a used car lot: as is, no warranty...
I’m not getting to see the strawberry moon. But when the clouds are like this the atmosphere of night is gorgeous anyhow. The celestial dome tonight is radiant. Such as the moon, I love the deeper wisdom here. Really beautiful writing, Ahavati.
"..Peel back its strawberry crust
like a freshly picked orange;
don't wash it off first.."
~gorgeous hues of orange and pink wash through my mind with this ;)
(and making me crave cool sorbet under the moon)
Love your acceptance- of our filmy outer layer of aura, that we collect as an erring being.
Simply lovely, lady!~d
like a freshly picked orange;
don't wash it off first.."
~gorgeous hues of orange and pink wash through my mind with this ;)
(and making me crave cool sorbet under the moon)
Love your acceptance- of our filmy outer layer of aura, that we collect as an erring being.
Simply lovely, lady!~d
3rd Jun 2015 11:22pm
5th Jun 2015 9:50am
Ahavati, luv ~ :-*
Simply soul-soothingly sublime. Thank you for this divine gift of writing to us.
I so very much needed this, luv:
When Life breaks around you
and only change exists, accept
the dusty bowl of passage;
don't be too quick to polish it.
:-* :-* :-*
Simply soul-soothingly sublime. Thank you for this divine gift of writing to us.
I so very much needed this, luv:
When Life breaks around you
and only change exists, accept
the dusty bowl of passage;
don't be too quick to polish it.
:-* :-* :-*
Anonymous
5th Jun 2015 3:52pm
yes..it even soothes my hangover today..soft and flowing..and great picture accompanying. And love the part about not being too quick to polish the dusty bowl of passage when change is ever present..great poem..
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28th Dec 2015 10:00pm
31st Oct 2018 6:55pm
Simply delightful, well penned. stanza 1 & 3 dazzles and leaves us in stardust.
