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Trim the candle's wick.
Against the spiralling darkness
become a lamp's haloing glow.
Light the candle quick,
for when even night is starless,
it will make a golden light grow.
Let firelight flick
for the dark is farthest,
longing after cock crow;
so keep the light lit
for the guiding dark is heartless.
Against the spiralling darkness
become a lamp's haloing glow.
Light the candle quick,
for when even night is starless,
it will make a golden light grow.
Let firelight flick
for the dark is farthest,
longing after cock crow;
so keep the light lit
for the guiding dark is heartless.
Published 18th May 2015
| Edited 12th May 2017
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19th May 2015 00:10am
it's one of those poems
where I like both the
looseness and the
structure of it, the line and
the rhyme, so to speak..:)
where I like both the
looseness and the
structure of it, the line and
the rhyme, so to speak..:)
19th May 2015 7:20am
Thanks Dartford - that's cool that you felt the structure - I wasn't sure anyone would - I was experimenting with Fibonacci, duality and a 3 part invention
Anonymous
19th May 2015 9:15am
Love this poem, like a spell....
19th May 2015 11:01am
:) thought you'd see this :)
Chanting it out loud may well portal you to another dimension- but one things for sure if you repeat it out loud long enough it will blow or fuse a synapse or two
Chanting it out loud may well portal you to another dimension- but one things for sure if you repeat it out loud long enough it will blow or fuse a synapse or two
19th May 2015 2:35pm
19th May 2015 4:02pm
20th May 2015 8:48pm
Spiraling into the depths of Darkness, sometimes we all need to hold onto what little light we can carry....
Exhilarating....enlightening....inspiring ink, mo Chara! :)
Exhilarating....enlightening....inspiring ink, mo Chara! :)
20th May 2015 10:58pm
Much appreciated thoughts Enchanted One - the unknown is our guide - where the only light to see by is the one we carry :)
23rd May 2015 8:38am
the rhythm, the cantering of your select phrases as we parade thru, soft in the shadows & light...
23rd May 2015 3:15pm
23rd May 2015 2:13pm
The battle between light and darkness is eternal. And though the candle may keep the dark at bay, the dark surrounds and waits not too far away...
Easy on the eye. A thriller. Good pen whale
Easy on the eye. A thriller. Good pen whale
23rd May 2015 3:15pm
Anonymous
29th May 2015 5:00pm
This is the exact kind of thing that inspires me to learn more of this wonderful craft. Many of you have these pictured words to an art form. Very nice
31st May 2015 00:12am
Sunk in anti-darkness, this is! Love the portent of "what might come" without sweet flame.
Warm emotion plied within your words, hun!
enjoyed!
~d
Warm emotion plied within your words, hun!
enjoyed!
~d
8th Jun 2015 6:00am
