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Over the Limit
Would-be cowboy in his car
Stepping on the gas
Wondering if he'll make it far
As he spots the overpass
Mustang approaching two-oh-8
Begins to feel it rise
Noting that the hour grows late
Within the starlit skies
"Major Tom to ground control
Did you track that fucking thing?
I saw it rock and saw it roll
And swear I heard some cowboy sing..."
Stepping on the gas
Wondering if he'll make it far
As he spots the overpass
Mustang approaching two-oh-8
Begins to feel it rise
Noting that the hour grows late
Within the starlit skies
"Major Tom to ground control
Did you track that fucking thing?
I saw it rock and saw it roll
And swear I heard some cowboy sing..."
Published 4th May 2015
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- Edited 4th May 2015 5:22pm
4th May 2015 5:20pm
there's something open ended [for want of a better term] about this... i've reached several of my own conclusions, albeit none were pleasant...
... and on a completely unrelated note, i'll be singing space oddity for days now lol
a curious write, crowfly, gets the creative juices flowing
... and on a completely unrelated note, i'll be singing space oddity for days now lol
a curious write, crowfly, gets the creative juices flowing
4th May 2015 5:26pm
Major Tom isn't quite alone now. Maybe too many protein pills. He's seeing things. Didn't mean this to be a downer but I can see how this might be taken as dark.
4th May 2015 6:20pm
A little visual, brought on by some visuals, in your periphery. I had fun with this one Mr.C, could start a script..
4th May 2015 7:36pm
Scripts are hard to sell unless you have an agent. Still worth a try! And yeah, could maybe put "Limit" on the screen. "201 Minutes of Space Idiocy", to cop a title from Mad Magazine. Thanks Lookie!
4th May 2015 9:09pm
4th May 2015 11:46pm
Fuck yeah! This felt like it was going airborne by the end! You'd be a fun cat to take a long drive with, crowfly.
5th May 2015 3:29pm
I'd like to make it up the California coast. Always enjoyed that route. Thanks Loki.
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