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Yakuza
The yakuza peels off his shirt
His skin ripples, activating tattoos
Impossible colors
Dreams and nightmares
Dragons uncurl and preen
They disconnect from skin's gravity
Lifting off in triumph
Circling an enemy's head
A foe fatally flawed
No noticing the katana
This blade the yakuza leisurely unsheathes
The edge whistling towards a major artery.
His skin ripples, activating tattoos
Impossible colors
Dreams and nightmares
Dragons uncurl and preen
They disconnect from skin's gravity
Lifting off in triumph
Circling an enemy's head
A foe fatally flawed
No noticing the katana
This blade the yakuza leisurely unsheathes
The edge whistling towards a major artery.
Published 23rd Apr 2015
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23rd Apr 2015 11:25pm
there's something so heady about these words, crowfly. the imagery of tattoos & impending violence feel as light & intoxicating as opium vapours...
... it's a keeper, absolutely loved!
... it's a keeper, absolutely loved!
23rd Apr 2015 11:32pm
Thanks Katja. I'm not completely sure a Japanese gangster or yakuza would be carrying a katana or samurai sword, but what the hell. Poetic license? That's a beautifully worded comment by the way.
24th Apr 2015 2:41am
24th Apr 2015 4:17pm
Yes, they are vicious. The yakuza and the triads make groups like the mafia and assorted street gangs look like boy scouts.
24th Apr 2015 2:48am
You are...a word wizard. Love your writes Mr.C, single object becomes many!
24th Apr 2015 4:20pm
Thanks Lookie. This is particularly true of the tattoos, which can become many and subject to interpretation in the eye of the beholder. I've got one myself, just an innocent bystander on my right shoulder.
Anonymous
24th Apr 2015 2:53am
i love the image of a blade whistling! such a great way to describe that.
well done, crow.
well done, crow.
24th Apr 2015 4:21pm
Thanks Minerva. Blades can whistle as well as sing, depending on the occasion.
24th Apr 2015 4:22am
This creates such an action packed scene, almost instantly. Well written, such vivid descriptions and scenario development.
24th Apr 2015 4:25pm
Thanks Sammy. I love Japanese movies and other sources of information dealing with the samurai and yakuza. I saw a samurai flick last night called "Unforgiven," a remake of the Clint Eastwood movie, that I think surpasses the original. It's available on Youtube if you're interested.
24th Apr 2015 8:38pm
Oh nice! That sounds like something I would enjoy watching. And if it is free online...even better! haha
24th Apr 2015 5:49am
24th Apr 2015 2:30pm
Yes, artwork. I've tried supplying art a few times but the pictures didn't take, probably because I couldn't figure it out. Thanks for the reminder, Survi. I'll work on this and see what I can come up with.
Anonymous
24th Apr 2015 7:53am
I love the intense discriptions putting the reader right there in the scene. Excellent work my friend!
24th Apr 2015 4:26pm
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24th Apr 2015 4:29pm
Thanks Grace. I'd love to pick up a katana. The real ones are hard to come by and are razor sharp. The one's available are just for show, and tend to be dull. Not much for home security.
24th Apr 2015 9:42am
24th Apr 2015 4:30pm
Yes, it's kind of a flashback. Way back when I took more than my share of lysergic acid. Just goes to show... Thanks Bayoukid.
Anonymous
24th Apr 2015 2:30pm
You have some skill with a blade. Giving so much free license to the reader, this really comes alive in the imagination.
24th Apr 2015 4:32pm
Thanks Johnny. I've never studied kendo. That could really make this come alive. So far I'm just an observer.
24th Apr 2015 3:58pm
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Anonymous
24th Apr 2015 5:22pm
*Brilliant*. . .Devlin.
28th Apr 2015 11:55pm
Anonymous
25th Apr 2015 2:10am
Wow Crow...awesome visual in this one......enjoyed xo :)
28th Apr 2015 11:57pm
Thanks Flower. Your visuals are a lot softer, which I appreciate. A gentle touch rather than a hard edge.
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