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On Love
Love is not a poem drinking coffee at dusk
calculating distance of space to close between us;
It's a ratio of silence at the gallery opening;
the dark-cornered guest with an understanding
we fail to emulate.
It mingles like an impaled olive, cemented
in glassine. Its grief outshines
beautiful lichen munching satiated on stone
when taken for granted, or aroused.
The reminder hurts, so we close its orange-red eye
with the sharp fingers of our mouth.
We reason its truth until shrunken to a memory
of a memory. It's not about our need, though;
not the climb, the thrill, the release of salt
and oil across our lips. It's about the stomach, peeling
from the burn of heart. Or, becoming soggy, stale—
our wordless mouths wide as epitaphs, sealed
in a burning envelope of flesh.
Love is not an Arbitrator mitigating gravity
of circumstance with the warmth of absolution
between us. Nor is it all wine at dawn, reflecting
its burgundy omen. It's a bite: raw cacao; pine
needles and bare feet; spoon of ice cream;
swallowing a shard of ice.
It's not a bookie on the bench with a pigeon
in the race. But the very coop where we hatched,
innated with a return tracking device;
but, all our educated-ignorance doesn't know how
to finish this poem, so we can get back home once again.
The End?
(too cliché)
Blessed be?
(you're kidding?)
Namaste?
(too "new age-y")
Sincerely?
(too blasé)
Cordially --
Best, or Kind regards?
(too distant or formal)
Your Friend?
(too "pamphlet-y")
Always?
(maybe...)
Love?
Yes. Love.
~
calculating distance of space to close between us;
It's a ratio of silence at the gallery opening;
the dark-cornered guest with an understanding
we fail to emulate.
It mingles like an impaled olive, cemented
in glassine. Its grief outshines
beautiful lichen munching satiated on stone
when taken for granted, or aroused.
The reminder hurts, so we close its orange-red eye
with the sharp fingers of our mouth.
We reason its truth until shrunken to a memory
of a memory. It's not about our need, though;
not the climb, the thrill, the release of salt
and oil across our lips. It's about the stomach, peeling
from the burn of heart. Or, becoming soggy, stale—
our wordless mouths wide as epitaphs, sealed
in a burning envelope of flesh.
Love is not an Arbitrator mitigating gravity
of circumstance with the warmth of absolution
between us. Nor is it all wine at dawn, reflecting
its burgundy omen. It's a bite: raw cacao; pine
needles and bare feet; spoon of ice cream;
swallowing a shard of ice.
It's not a bookie on the bench with a pigeon
in the race. But the very coop where we hatched,
innated with a return tracking device;
but, all our educated-ignorance doesn't know how
to finish this poem, so we can get back home once again.
The End?
(too cliché)
Blessed be?
(you're kidding?)
Namaste?
(too "new age-y")
Sincerely?
(too blasé)
Cordially --
Best, or Kind regards?
(too distant or formal)
Your Friend?
(too "pamphlet-y")
Always?
(maybe...)
Love?
Yes. Love.
~
Written by
Ahavati
(Tams)
Published 17th Apr 2015
| Edited 28th Mar 2021
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Re: On Love
17th Apr 2015 5:52pm
You define love with a flourish. "It's a ratio of silence at the gallery opening; / The dark-cornered guest with an understanding." Beautifully said!
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17th Apr 2015 5:52pm
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22nd Apr 2015 2:27am
Excellent write, well put together. Especially love the ending series--creative idea!
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28th Apr 2015 11:40pm
OMFG! ... this is phenomenal! A cascade of one great line after another ... Just beautiful.
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29th Apr 2015 11:05am
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14th May 2015 00:48am
stunning perceptions. love is unique to each lover. it's an eternity of poems...
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Re: On Love
31st May 2015 2:37am
No superficiality here Ahavati, no skimming of the waters like a tern scooping up random fish this is the soaring of a sea eagle plunging to the depths.
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31st Aug 2015 7:04am
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Re. On Love
3rd Sep 2016 5:13pm
"We reason its truth until shrunken to a memory
of a memory."
pretty much
"educated-ignorance"
uh-huh..
how do we end something that's infinite in origin?
of a memory."
pretty much
"educated-ignorance"
uh-huh..
how do we end something that's infinite in origin?
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27th Nov 2016 4:08am
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Re. On Love
23rd Jan 2019 1:56am
"The reminder hurts so we
close its orange-red eye with the sharp fingers
of our mouth. "
NICE
close its orange-red eye with the sharp fingers
of our mouth. "
NICE
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Re. On Love
22nd Jul 2019 2:56am
For me, a great poem is one where every words add to a picture - color, detail, shadow. This piece is simply wonderful - it appears simple, but one needs to read it, think, then read it at least once more. I was able to 'be' in the piece from start to finish. Thank you.
Blessings, Silence
Blessings, Silence
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12th Nov 2019 2:01am
Re. On Love
12th Nov 2019 2:25am
My hope is to write like you someday, and your poem is beautiful, that is all
- fairy
- fairy
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12th Nov 2019 2:38am
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12th Nov 2019 2:50am
Love is a little out of bounds for me, however, the message was not entirely lost. Great endings thinking about endings.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
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Anonymous
- Edited 12th Nov 2019 5:06pm
12th Nov 2019 4:44pm
The lack of ambiguity and efficiency found in your poetry these days is not as prevalant, but this still carries your distinct voice and often 2nd person perspective; I would recognize you even if it was an anonymous comp entry!
Along with the playful, unique ending, I especially enjoy Stanza 5. We are all essentially flying blind, following whatever instintcts we allow our ourselves to be guided by - bringing us into alignment with Source as we get lost in earthbound realities of our own creation. We have to get lost in order to find our way back and truly appreciate everything made possible through and with Love.
📝❤🌌
Along with the playful, unique ending, I especially enjoy Stanza 5. We are all essentially flying blind, following whatever instintcts we allow our ourselves to be guided by - bringing us into alignment with Source as we get lost in earthbound realities of our own creation. We have to get lost in order to find our way back and truly appreciate everything made possible through and with Love.
📝❤🌌
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Re. On Love
4th Sep 2020 1:43am
I have to say, this poem is wonderful. Reminding me of a certain time in my life. One of foraging for reindeer moss and morels for people to dine on taking instagrams of earthly and beautiful plates of food. People forget that the truth is just about a mile down that dirt road the passed by. It tastes better when you find it for yourself.
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Re. On Love
6th Apr 2021 5:20am
This is so eclectic and avante garde a love poem, really descriptive in a different way with tastes and textures, really outside the box, congrats, I just thought of Alice Fulton a bit :)
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Re. On Love
6th Jun 2021 1:41am
Your first stanza really pulled me in. You guided me beautiful through every description.
Love! Awesome end.
Love! Awesome end.
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Re. On Love
7th Sep 2021 9:11pm
The imagery in this poem is fantastic. It’s precise and evocative and gives a panoramic landscape of people and places. The call-and-response close is brilliant as well, reflecting a cast iron voice and wise humour. Namaste.
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Re: Re. On Love
8th Sep 2021 00:35am
Boy you're digging through the archives! This was within that muse period I shared with you. Liked to almost killed me that week.