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So You Say You Love Me
You finally give them to me,
The words I waited and ached for
So long…
Spears of hurt thrown
Into the frigid, deep of an ocean
That no longer belongs to you
A place of secrets and sly, slippery
Fish, bottom feeders
And forlorn creatures
That your words miss
This time
Because I’ve learned
That a hunter of your caliber
Only aims for the kill.
I’ve learned to survive
And outlived your lies
Now you
Weep; melancholy whimpers
Penetrating the ocean
Like the moans
of a stranded whale.
The words I waited and ached for
So long…
Spears of hurt thrown
Into the frigid, deep of an ocean
That no longer belongs to you
A place of secrets and sly, slippery
Fish, bottom feeders
And forlorn creatures
That your words miss
This time
Because I’ve learned
That a hunter of your caliber
Only aims for the kill.
I’ve learned to survive
And outlived your lies
Now you
Weep; melancholy whimpers
Penetrating the ocean
Like the moans
of a stranded whale.
Published 10th Mar 2015
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10th Mar 2015 6:10am
sounds like a case of too little, too late. barbed words lost in the murk.
wonderful write...
wonderful write...
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10th Mar 2015 2:34pm
Honestly, D, I feel bad too. But I shouldn't. And I don't want to feel bad...but I do. Sigh.
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10th Mar 2015 1:42pm
too bad for him. get on with your life. :)
nicely written. concise with good imagery. which is sometimes hard to do. well done.
nicely written. concise with good imagery. which is sometimes hard to do. well done.
10th Mar 2015 2:36pm
10th Mar 2015 2:51pm
The ocean imagery works really well. "The moans of a stranded whale." But possibly the teeth of a shark. His reluctance to say "I love you" perplexes me, but that's beside the point. He could still be duplicitous. You say he's a hunter and repeat offender with his lies, so he set a precedent. It's when I hear those words too quickly that I become suspicious. At least you had time to think and get his measure, which might have been a mistake on his part but beneficial for you. He probably got a sense that you're too intelligent to buy emotional deception of that magnitude. This is very fine work, Virginia. Hope you find the right man.
10th Mar 2015 3:38pm
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