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Desdemona
Each word she writes a gentle explosion
Rage, sorrow and laughter in equal measure
The fear does appear there and here
But its creeping aspect strapped to the table
And dissected
It's components discussed, losing their secrecy
Later, her ire appears in metaphoric fire
Those flames leaping, shadows cornered on the walls
Tragedy to those she scrutinizes
Traitors exposed to the naked, dangling bulb
Embarrassed to be still alive
As for the melancholy, a veil, finally lifted
This lady in black placing a rose
Then departing through the wrought iron gate
Which then swings shut with a kiss
She returns to the chateau
Where laughter can be heard in every chamber
Mad delight whirling out of control
Selected guests in their erotic element
Paying her tribute with each crescendo
Their laughter rising to the rafters
And echoing down the hall
Where she lays down in luxury
Listening in the dark.
Rage, sorrow and laughter in equal measure
The fear does appear there and here
But its creeping aspect strapped to the table
And dissected
It's components discussed, losing their secrecy
Later, her ire appears in metaphoric fire
Those flames leaping, shadows cornered on the walls
Tragedy to those she scrutinizes
Traitors exposed to the naked, dangling bulb
Embarrassed to be still alive
As for the melancholy, a veil, finally lifted
This lady in black placing a rose
Then departing through the wrought iron gate
Which then swings shut with a kiss
She returns to the chateau
Where laughter can be heard in every chamber
Mad delight whirling out of control
Selected guests in their erotic element
Paying her tribute with each crescendo
Their laughter rising to the rafters
And echoing down the hall
Where she lays down in luxury
Listening in the dark.
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27th Feb 2015 5:00pm
Thanks so much, Schiitaryn! I'm glad it holds up to repeated reads. It took a few rewrites.
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27th Feb 2015 5:16pm
The dark and lovely Desdemona leaves a potent image of veiled desires fed by a deep hunger for the caresses of the woman who haunts your dreams, who you reach for, but always remains just out of your touch.
Great Write Crow!
Cheers! Scot.
Great Write Crow!
Cheers! Scot.
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27th Feb 2015 5:22pm
Thanks Scot. She does remain elusive. Hope I'll catch her one of these days. Or nights.
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27th Feb 2015 11:14pm
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Brilliant Crowfly - you can certainly see the painstaking labour and subsequent fruit of your craft in this piece - some very clever lines in here.
This invokes gothic high-society, intermingled with a dash of Bram Stoker's dark occult and of course Shaekspeare's cutting word play, which is the kind of place you seem very comfortable dwelling in.
Awesome poetry mate.
This invokes gothic high-society, intermingled with a dash of Bram Stoker's dark occult and of course Shaekspeare's cutting word play, which is the kind of place you seem very comfortable dwelling in.
Awesome poetry mate.
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27th Feb 2015 11:16pm
Thanks so much, Frank. I just kind of settled on the name Desdemona because I liked the sound of it, forgetting that she was Othello's love. There's no connection to the Bard. Closer to Bram Stoker, if anything.
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28th Feb 2015 00:48am
The reference to flames and cornered shadows - professional poetry Crowfly, just wow.
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27th Feb 2015 11:57pm
The way you define debauchery is elegant T.
RSVP. Black Tie. Fine Wine. Hmm... the chateau holds many tales.
RSVP. Black Tie. Fine Wine. Hmm... the chateau holds many tales.
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28th Feb 2015 7:19am
Lovely serenade,paints an alluring picture,Crow,much enjoyed
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decadence & a little depravity flirt along the edges of this intricate piece....
... much enjoyed crowfly
... much enjoyed crowfly
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