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Uma you are very in tune with the spirits wise advise thank you with love Crim

Tq Crim fr understanding n de feedback. Light n luv dear:)xx

I love the first stanza.  The spacing creates tension, a nice bridge connecting the poem.  The  lasst line is anti-climatic compared to the opening, and it works really well.

Tq Matt fr your feedback, ur seasoned words help my spirits n writes a lot:)

I detect a sense of randomness in this, birth that is mereley coincidental (scriptless).

stimulative verse...

Yes, the randomness, the awakening. Tq JF:)

Thanks for the advice Uma, You are a sTaR! The first stanza has that beautiful Uma [discontent] to it. yet the lessons in the last are hard hitting and on point. But I'll star this as meaningful and filled with value "feel (in), the very above
before spirits stare blank from familiarities in use "

Nice put and perfectly poetic again ;)

Thanks for the read!

Al -x-

Ahh, Al!:) grt to hear frm u,  n you feeling this write n getting something frm this. Had been experimenting with spacings of late, n it holds more when mixed with those type of discontent(as u rightly put it) n more effective wen along with minimal word verses. Glad u got both its rigour n vigour.
Its so gud u dropped in here n u inspire.hope to see u busy agn at du.
tq :) xx

Dream forever.

Ahh, yes wud do so;) its my lifeline.
Tq LL.

You're a veritable phoenix, Uma.  Thanks for the inspiration.

You are an inspiration urself, crowfly. Had read ur well analysed comments on varous poets n its grt to have u here on my pages. Would love to read ur pages sooner. Tq:)