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Totentanz
Her wounds were sealed with a ruby wax
that bled open when the sun shone
her lips were sewn shut with threads
spun from the entrails of memories
she wore the night for a cloak
and danced with the bones of old ghosts
who’d carved their names on her skin
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Re: Totentanz
Anonymous
3rd Dec 2014 8:56pm
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3rd Dec 2014 9:04pm
Gabriel, good fellow
delighted you dropped in and left your thoughts, thanks most much
delighted you dropped in and left your thoughts, thanks most much
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3rd Dec 2014 9:22pm
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3rd Dec 2014 11:18pm
Crims
you flatter me with your aching, dear Lady
thanks for that and for stopping by and leaving your thoughts
you flatter me with your aching, dear Lady
thanks for that and for stopping by and leaving your thoughts
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3rd Dec 2014 10:42pm
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3rd Dec 2014 11:47pm
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4th Dec 2014 00:36am
cheers, Miss Virgin
thanks for dropping in and leaving your thought print. much appreciated
thanks for dropping in and leaving your thought print. much appreciated
Re: Totentanz
4th Dec 2014 00:58am
Quite the composer in Your own Write Lepp!!!
Never know what one may find strolling in Your Fine mind...Loved the punch styled delivery!!!
Never know what one may find strolling in Your Fine mind...Loved the punch styled delivery!!!
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4th Dec 2014 12:29pm
no more than you are, Soulteaser
lucky for the members here I have a filter or there would be a mass scarring for life happening
thanks most much for dropping by, good sir. I rarely see you logging on much of late
lucky for the members here I have a filter or there would be a mass scarring for life happening
thanks most much for dropping by, good sir. I rarely see you logging on much of late
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4th Dec 2014 2:09pm
:)
(its been one o those "trial by fire" in life the past cpl mo's....this will pass (please say it will)
(its been one o those "trial by fire" in life the past cpl mo's....this will pass (please say it will)
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Re: Totentanz
4th Dec 2014 2:39am
the full circle of sun rays, and the night's influence makes a mark on the brain that wont be soon forgotten
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4th Dec 2014 12:31pm
Jazz man
delighted to have you drop by, good fellow . thank you for reading and leaving your thoughts
delighted to have you drop by, good fellow . thank you for reading and leaving your thoughts
Re: Totentanz
6th Dec 2014 9:25pm
Mo Chara,
Through this long, dark absence of mine...it's as if you have--somehow--gazed into my very soul, and creatively crafted the findings into words.
i have so surely identified with the hauntingly beautiful depths of this unique piece...with the wistfully bitter-sweet, yet lovely lines.
Through this long, dark absence of mine...it's as if you have--somehow--gazed into my very soul, and creatively crafted the findings into words.
i have so surely identified with the hauntingly beautiful depths of this unique piece...with the wistfully bitter-sweet, yet lovely lines.
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7th Dec 2014 2:51am
ahh, Enchanted one
I was wondering where you'd got to. sorry to hear that, Lady. hopefully it'll get better for you soon.
it's great to see you knocking about again, Mis. thanks for dropping in here and leaving your footprint
I was wondering where you'd got to. sorry to hear that, Lady. hopefully it'll get better for you soon.
it's great to see you knocking about again, Mis. thanks for dropping in here and leaving your footprint
Re: Totentanz
8th Dec 2014 9:15am
am i green with envy that i didn't think of those opening lines [?] yes, yes i feckin am damnit
this is both eerie & achingly-ethereal, Eamonn
i have much appreciation for the juxtaposition of grisly imagery to an observation that might once have been beautiful & that's coalesced flawlessly in this piece
all in all a great write, Mister
this is both eerie & achingly-ethereal, Eamonn
i have much appreciation for the juxtaposition of grisly imagery to an observation that might once have been beautiful & that's coalesced flawlessly in this piece
all in all a great write, Mister
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8th Dec 2014 1:06pm
ah, Miss Mikhailov
green with the envy, I like that. I'd call that karma ...the good kind
yeah, this was a tough one, as you know. so it pleases me that the reception has been so favorable
delighted to have you prowl my humbles, Kitten. thanks most much for leaving your thoughts
green with the envy, I like that. I'd call that karma ...the good kind
yeah, this was a tough one, as you know. so it pleases me that the reception has been so favorable
delighted to have you prowl my humbles, Kitten. thanks most much for leaving your thoughts
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8th Dec 2014 6:56pm
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9th Dec 2014 1:03am
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8th Dec 2014 11:17pm
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9th Dec 2014 1:02am
Thank you, Miss
It's good to see you back, thank you for stopping by and leaving your thoughts.
It's good to see you back, thank you for stopping by and leaving your thoughts.
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12th Dec 2014 2:12pm
Whew, this is absolutely beautiful, Eamonn. The first two lines and the last two lines were my favorites with details brimming with character insight. Awesome !
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12th Dec 2014 7:12pm
Cheers Tony
huge compliment, man. thanks for dropping by and leaving your footprint
huge compliment, man. thanks for dropping by and leaving your footprint
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5th Jan 2015 6:18pm
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Anonymous
5th Jan 2015 11:24am
I know this woman..too well.
I love everything about this one, it works perfectly.
The way you chose your words conveys a strong dark, sadistic, image.
I'm always humbled by your work
I love everything about this one, it works perfectly.
The way you chose your words conveys a strong dark, sadistic, image.
I'm always humbled by your work
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5th Jan 2015 6:40pm
MIki
I simply get lucky sometimes, where an idea or thought transfers to the page. this thought or momentary vision (which would be a closer definition) kinda gripped me with a couple of emotions. it took a couple of days of bouncing it off a soul to work it out. I had no idea it would resonate with so many people.
thanks most much for your continued support, dear lady :)'
I simply get lucky sometimes, where an idea or thought transfers to the page. this thought or momentary vision (which would be a closer definition) kinda gripped me with a couple of emotions. it took a couple of days of bouncing it off a soul to work it out. I had no idea it would resonate with so many people.
thanks most much for your continued support, dear lady :)'
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6th Jan 2015 8:41am
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6th Jan 2015 4:37pm
Cheers, al
very kind of you to say, thanks muchly for dropping by and leaving your foot print
very kind of you to say, thanks muchly for dropping by and leaving your foot print
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9th Jun 2015 00:08am
Must confess, I am wholly in love with this piece, So vivid in my mind do I see her, makes me want waltz with & yes classical suits best.
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9th Jun 2015 3:38am
I see you gots a taste for the darkness that resides within us. good show. I must thank you for having me revisit these scribbles
and also for visiting and leaving your thoughts
and also for visiting and leaving your thoughts
Re: Totentanz
7th Jul 2015 8:32am
Power in every layer of this dark dance..
poppin' phrases.. perfect lil descriptors in place..
enjoyed the haunted sanguine fend uve painted,
makin' rooms in m'list misters, ty!
curtsies,
~d
poppin' phrases.. perfect lil descriptors in place..
enjoyed the haunted sanguine fend uve painted,
makin' rooms in m'list misters, ty!
curtsies,
~d
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7th Jul 2015 12:04pm
ah, Lady Sighs
cheer most lots for the kind words and visit, Miss.
much appreciated
cheer most lots for the kind words and visit, Miss.
much appreciated
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27th Sep 2015 5:14am
I was just going to tiptoe through your garden, but fuck me...this was spectacular. Now I may just stomp through...<3
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27th Sep 2015 11:46am
Hullo, Mysterious one
stomp or tip-toe, you're very welcome, and thank you for dropping by and leaving your thoughts
stomp or tip-toe, you're very welcome, and thank you for dropping by and leaving your thoughts
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I am speechless from where this has taken me...
and mesmerized by its title. May I ask its meaning?
and mesmerized by its title. May I ask its meaning?
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23rd Dec 2015 12:40pm
Jade, hullo
thanks, speechless is as good a reaction as one could hope for
title means Dance of the dead. if I remember correct its German speak
thanks, speechless is as good a reaction as one could hope for
title means Dance of the dead. if I remember correct its German speak
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Anonymous
7th Nov 2019 10:52pm
I suppose I cannot add much that has not already been said, but I really loved this.
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8th Nov 2019 9:34pm
Hullo, Lady
you have good taste :) funny enough I'd been here a few days ago reading over it and liked it too
but more than that, much thanks to you for droppin by and leaving your thoughts
you have good taste :) funny enough I'd been here a few days ago reading over it and liked it too
but more than that, much thanks to you for droppin by and leaving your thoughts