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Only a Best Friend
He stares in her eyes as she writes her response on the paper. "Eyes were always my weakness", he thinks to himself as he looks to admire the rest of her face. she hands him the note with a smile on her face. He takes it, opens it up:
"Grapefruit"
"There's no way you got that on your first try!" he says to her.
"Maybe I'm just that good!" she says with a little sass and a smile big enough to light the world. He can't but feel like this is the moment. How can it not be? She only acts this way with me, not any other guy. I'm the only guy she said she really trust. That has to mean something doesn't it? He thinks as he contemplates whether to ask her.
"Ok, your turn" he says. She writes her riddle and folds up the paper.
"You know you don't have to fold the paper right? We're the only two here."She giggles as she hands him the note and says,
"I Know",
their hands touch as she takes the note. Her face reddens a little. He opens the paper:
"Whats checkered and was once
used for war strategies?"
Chess! he immediately thinks to himself.
He writes his answer, hands her back the paper.
She smiles and says "Yup, your turn."
He takes the paper and begins to write:
"Whats beautiful and has one of the greatest
personalities? Has a smile that can light up
the world and eyes you can get lost in. That
deserves nothing but the best and to be
treated right?"
He folds the paper in half. Hands it to her thinking what has he done. She begins reading it. His heart races in nervousness. She starts to blush. He thinks "GOOD!".
She looks up at him with a smile of disappointment.
"Thats the sweetest thing any guy has ever said to me."
"Well it's true, because the answer is you."
She looks him in the eyes and says,
"That's real nice but I'm sorry because I only like you as a best friend."
"Grapefruit"
"There's no way you got that on your first try!" he says to her.
"Maybe I'm just that good!" she says with a little sass and a smile big enough to light the world. He can't but feel like this is the moment. How can it not be? She only acts this way with me, not any other guy. I'm the only guy she said she really trust. That has to mean something doesn't it? He thinks as he contemplates whether to ask her.
"Ok, your turn" he says. She writes her riddle and folds up the paper.
"You know you don't have to fold the paper right? We're the only two here."She giggles as she hands him the note and says,
"I Know",
their hands touch as she takes the note. Her face reddens a little. He opens the paper:
"Whats checkered and was once
used for war strategies?"
Chess! he immediately thinks to himself.
He writes his answer, hands her back the paper.
She smiles and says "Yup, your turn."
He takes the paper and begins to write:
"Whats beautiful and has one of the greatest
personalities? Has a smile that can light up
the world and eyes you can get lost in. That
deserves nothing but the best and to be
treated right?"
He folds the paper in half. Hands it to her thinking what has he done. She begins reading it. His heart races in nervousness. She starts to blush. He thinks "GOOD!".
She looks up at him with a smile of disappointment.
"Thats the sweetest thing any guy has ever said to me."
"Well it's true, because the answer is you."
She looks him in the eyes and says,
"That's real nice but I'm sorry because I only like you as a best friend."
Published 25th Apr 2011
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25th Apr 2011 8:10am
ahh doh!!
i was right there with that guy looking at the smile that lights up the world,i felt his nerves,his hope.
thats how deep you had me immersed in this poem.
from reading the title i had a fair idea of the ending,but i was hoping she wrote some other guys name as the answer to his riddle.
i loved the poem but i thought the end was curt or too short or something.
nice one!!
i was right there with that guy looking at the smile that lights up the world,i felt his nerves,his hope.
thats how deep you had me immersed in this poem.
from reading the title i had a fair idea of the ending,but i was hoping she wrote some other guys name as the answer to his riddle.
i loved the poem but i thought the end was curt or too short or something.
nice one!!
25th Apr 2011 4:25pm
Your the 1st person to give me some actual critique. Thanks. I think its because this isn't my usual rhyming poem so I didn't know how to end it very well. But thanks I'll write a second version asap
