Eyes for Me

The last 4 lines were incredibly powerful and chilling. These 4 lines could stand alone as one piece. Good job!

Thank you so much! I really appreciate your feedback<3

Very good write.. You're words are strong.. nice flow.. great wordplay.. Well written.. You have a gift..


Dave

Well write, valsatiger! I love this poem, really and your style!
Hope to read more in a few days! And welcome in DUO, valsatiger!

A unique read. Great job. Can't wait to see more.

Wonderful ink

Great poem and welcome to DUP :)

"A runaway child
Looking for escape
Needs not a home
But somewhere new to hate"
Loved these four lines, just such a punch, very powerful stuff here valsatiger! I will follow you as I wish to read more of your work, I look forward to that very much.

I enjoy you style of writing. It's quirky yet grabs you, usually at the end from these two poems I've read.

Enjoyed...

Love the way you structure your stanzas. It is as if each one has an epic line that the eye can't forget

A runaway child
Looking for escape
Needs not a home
But somewhere new to hate

the whole poem is great - but this is really, really great

This is fantastic. At first I had to re-read the last part of the first stanza but I think it flows. There is a lot of depth here. Keep it coming.

"And hail to the beast" I liked that. Your themes are dark and it leaves a lot of questioning about what drives you to write, what's your story, is the darkness a reflection of self or a projection of hurt?

Thank you!
I would have to say that this is more a poem in which I am sharing what I have learned from my past relationships and their pattern...yes, it sounds relatively dark because I have not been in a relationship that has made me a better person quite yet.

I am partially describing what I have been doing. I have been longing not to be lonely, so much, that I have pushed aside the fact that each relationship is still leaving me empty and not filling me up.

I am glad you enjoy my writing. It is a very large part of who I am.

A very interesting mix of metaphors and rhyme. You are obviously a gifted wordsmith. Enjoyed and look forward to more.

Keep that ink flowing. Fantastic read. Come check me out and comment.