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A Brief Madness
A hobo his head in the trash
looking for tidbits
snuffling down discards
from a nearby cafe
looking up and smiling toothlessly
Yellowish eyes crusted
smelling like a dumpster
shivering like a wet cat
For a brief moment
I saw a machete through his head
smashing the ugliness
in bits of bones and brain
A club smashing his twisted body
beating his gangrenous flesh
into the dirt where it belonged
stamping on it with glee
I stared at him and flinched
as he spoke in a gravelly whisper
not all you see are what they are
beauteous countenance can hide most evil
The hobo walked away
holding a half eaten burger
a tinkling bell sounded
briefly, and I knew he knew
my brief madness
visiting angels
often do.
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Re: A Brief Madness
Anonymous
10th Oct 2014 4:20am
Grace,
Nice take on it! Some day we'll all earn those wings. :-)
tornado
Nice take on it! Some day we'll all earn those wings. :-)
tornado
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re: Re: A Brief Madness
10th Oct 2014 4:43am
Lets be Hobos! Hehe...thank you for visiting and reading me Tornado. Appreciate you always.
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Anonymous
10th Oct 2014 4:50am
I've got a stick and a checkered bandana :-)
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10th Oct 2014 5:13am
Re: A Brief Madness
Anonymous
10th Oct 2014 7:58am
Sup G,
I really enjoyed the first 4 verses but I have some questions on the rest -
"I stared at him and flinched
as he spoke in a gravelly whisper
not all you see are what they are
beauteous countenance can hide most evil"
-did he speak the last two lines of this, or did you?
"The hobo walked away
holding a half eaten burger
a tinkling bell sounded
briefly, and I knew he knew"
-confused where the bell is coming from
"my brief madness
visiting angels
often do."
-I'm kinda lost on this ending, can you explain?
I really enjoyed the first 4 verses but I have some questions on the rest -
"I stared at him and flinched
as he spoke in a gravelly whisper
not all you see are what they are
beauteous countenance can hide most evil"
-did he speak the last two lines of this, or did you?
"The hobo walked away
holding a half eaten burger
a tinkling bell sounded
briefly, and I knew he knew"
-confused where the bell is coming from
"my brief madness
visiting angels
often do."
-I'm kinda lost on this ending, can you explain?
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re: Re: A Brief Madness
10th Oct 2014 8:15am
Hi...It has been said that beautiful tinkling bells sounds when an angel passes by.
Actually its using poetic licence...
"and I know he knew my brief madness...visiting angels often do." Thank you Sugarskull for reading and commenting. Very kind of you.:)
Actually its using poetic licence...
"and I know he knew my brief madness...visiting angels often do." Thank you Sugarskull for reading and commenting. Very kind of you.:)
Re: A Brief Madness
Anonymous
11th Oct 2014 11:59am
Beauty can hide evil and on the same note, good can be hidden by what some would consider repulsive or in attractive. Great piece Grace
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re: Re: A Brief Madness
12th Oct 2014 6:19am
Oh yes Donovan...good and evil can be disguised by opposites. Thanks for reading me.
Re: A Brief Madness
11th Oct 2014 12:45pm
A great message within this outstanding piece my friend!
loved the imagery in it as well :)
loved the imagery in it as well :)
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re: Re: A Brief Madness
12th Oct 2014 6:21am
Re: A Brief Madness
11th Oct 2014 6:18pm
A very vivid description of what a hobo looks like. It's sad to see a lot of them here in the good old USA, which is ironic because this is the land of milk and honey. You clearly depicted their miserable conditions...good read as always, Grace!
@EngrVV
@EngrVV
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re: Re: A Brief Madness
12th Oct 2014 6:24am
Thank you EngrVV...they are everywhere. .on God's earth...by a different name. Thank you for your constant encouragement. :)
Re: A Brief Madness
11th Oct 2014 6:46pm
I was mesmerized. You have a way in making every minds playful. It's like you really wanted to quit but can never escape the addiction. Very nice poem, so intoxicating.
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re: Re: A Brief Madness
12th Oct 2014 6:26am
Hi napnau...addiction, yes indeed. To writing. And this poem is a result of a mind compelled. Thanks so much for reading. :)
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12th Oct 2014 00:35am
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