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Our Eden
Step into my private garden
Explore my trails
So full of natural delights
Delicacies within abound
Wrap yourself up
Engulfed in the unmistakable fragrance
Of lust and love
Buried deep in my secret place
Peel back pink petals
Revealing unto you
Wildflowers pollinated
Through our mutual arousal
Less than love
Yet more than lust
Whatever is forming between us
Is built upon a trelis of trust
Once you pass through my gate
Leave your past behind
Plant new seeds here with me
Locked away in OUR personal Eden
Explore my trails
So full of natural delights
Delicacies within abound
Wrap yourself up
Engulfed in the unmistakable fragrance
Of lust and love
Buried deep in my secret place
Peel back pink petals
Revealing unto you
Wildflowers pollinated
Through our mutual arousal
Less than love
Yet more than lust
Whatever is forming between us
Is built upon a trelis of trust
Once you pass through my gate
Leave your past behind
Plant new seeds here with me
Locked away in OUR personal Eden
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Re: Our Eden
7th Oct 2014 3:46pm
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9th Oct 2014 3:46pm
Thank you for the comparison Speak
Coming from you my friend thats the ultimate compliment
Coming from you my friend thats the ultimate compliment
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9th Oct 2014 5:02pm
:)
my first year was love, lust and kink
my second year is the human condition
looking forward to see where your writing takes you as time marches on
my first year was love, lust and kink
my second year is the human condition
looking forward to see where your writing takes you as time marches on
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9th Oct 2014 5:34pm
The way my brain is wired it could be quite a trip if i truly open these flood gates up hun
Re: Our Eden
LSB, this is magnificent. Your beautiful word usage is classy and very sensual. I love this stanza:
"Less than love
Yet more than lust
Whatever is forming between us
Is built upon a trellis of trust "
So true and heartfelt.
"Less than love
Yet more than lust
Whatever is forming between us
Is built upon a trellis of trust "
So true and heartfelt.
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re: Re: Our Eden
9th Oct 2014 3:47pm
Re: Our Eden
Anonymous
7th Oct 2014 4:34pm
Belle,
Everything's left at gate, except for this sack full of seeds. Instructions say: bury deep in secret place below trellis. :-)
Very seductive write and love the word play!
tornado
Everything's left at gate, except for this sack full of seeds. Instructions say: bury deep in secret place below trellis. :-)
Very seductive write and love the word play!
tornado
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re: Re: Our Eden
9th Oct 2014 3:49pm
Well Mr Tornado sounds like ur entering the garden well prepared hun
Glad u enjoyed my lil write
Glad u enjoyed my lil write
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9th Oct 2014 3:50pm
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9th Oct 2014 3:51pm
Re: Our Eden
7th Oct 2014 8:48pm
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9th Oct 2014 3:52pm
Oh RG thats so sweet of u to say
But that r much more talented writers on here than me
But that r much more talented writers on here than me
Re: Our Eden
7th Oct 2014 9:22pm
Love the wordplay, the garden imagery reminiscent of the Song of Songs.
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9th Oct 2014 3:53pm
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7th Oct 2014 11:09pm
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9th Oct 2014 4:50pm
Well Mr Feddeler welcome to Belle's Garden of Good n Plenty
Glad u liked my lil write darlin
Glad u liked my lil write darlin
Re: Our Eden
8th Oct 2014 9:13pm
i loved it and i was full of imagery when i read it.happy cemetary's and ferry's and gardens.
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9th Oct 2014 4:52pm
Re: Our Eden
9th Oct 2014 1:27am
Sounds like heaven on earth. A place to start anew with a beautiful goddess by my side. You are a true temptress Belle.
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9th Oct 2014 4:54pm
Heaven is where ever we can find true happiness darlin
Glad u enjoyed it
Glad u enjoyed it
Re: Our Eden
9th Oct 2014 9:29am
Amazing poem. The words say so much both obvious & hidden. One very lucky person you're inviting into your Eden.
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9th Oct 2014 4:55pm