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I Love You
shattered crystals a wide arch
on crinkled clear paper
a skating rink on double circles
shooting clear in lemony tongue
freedom struggled behind her eyes
loving the air encircled in euphoria
seeing beyond the exploding galaxies
ice crushed and sparkled in second sights
I love you hold me don't leave me
hold me within in the honeycomb
in your brain plant me in your mind
she danced on within the ice storm
She stared out
a prisoner
of her desire
even as she craved freedom.
on crinkled clear paper
a skating rink on double circles
shooting clear in lemony tongue
freedom struggled behind her eyes
loving the air encircled in euphoria
seeing beyond the exploding galaxies
ice crushed and sparkled in second sights
I love you hold me don't leave me
hold me within in the honeycomb
in your brain plant me in your mind
she danced on within the ice storm
She stared out
a prisoner
of her desire
even as she craved freedom.
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Re: I Love You
Anonymous
1st Sep 2014 12:18pm
sometimes we crave ideas of realities more than the actualities of them...this is a lovely read with an almost fairy-tale magic woven in
nice work, Grace
nice work, Grace
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1st Sep 2014 2:32pm
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Beautiful Dear Grace!!!
On the journey to progression we take what we can get and be highly thankful for getting anywhere.
constant struggles-Frustrating times
Excellent Write!!!
On the journey to progression we take what we can get and be highly thankful for getting anywhere.
constant struggles-Frustrating times
Excellent Write!!!
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12th Sep 2014 2:37am
she stared out a prisoner of her desire, even as she craved freedom. I'm going to remember that line for a while. Nice poem:)
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20th Feb 2015 4:15am
Adore this poem! Beautifully said, a woman caught in the web of craving. I love the imagery. I was this woman in past and you have captured the war within beautifully! Thank you!
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20th Feb 2015 8:46am