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I Remember When
I thought you were interesting
Thought your poetry was so deep and sensual
Thought you had as much mind between your ears
As bush between your legs
When you knew I thought it was the sexiest damned thing
Warm and womanly like your momma-toos
From the baby that stretched your tummy
Leaving behind your tiger stripes
But lke all the rest of the plastic personality
That used to look so cool on you
The darkness you put on for show
Has taken your talent to the toilet
And flushed your art away
Into a gutter of dirt and disparaging remarks
About the man who loved you and would have given everything
To be a part of your color-filled world of creativity
Until you turned it into shades of gray and Smokey haze
I remember when
I thought you were beautiful
Ahh, but I was just a fool
Thought your poetry was so deep and sensual
Thought you had as much mind between your ears
As bush between your legs
When you knew I thought it was the sexiest damned thing
Warm and womanly like your momma-toos
From the baby that stretched your tummy
Leaving behind your tiger stripes
But lke all the rest of the plastic personality
That used to look so cool on you
The darkness you put on for show
Has taken your talent to the toilet
And flushed your art away
Into a gutter of dirt and disparaging remarks
About the man who loved you and would have given everything
To be a part of your color-filled world of creativity
Until you turned it into shades of gray and Smokey haze
I remember when
I thought you were beautiful
Ahh, but I was just a fool
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Re: I Remember When
26th Aug 2014 1:08pm
I know that feeling well. Thinking something of another and discovering something else, but we live we learn. :) Poetryman.
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re: Re: I Remember When
26th Aug 2014 5:50pm
Re: I Remember When
26th Aug 2014 1:52pm
Oh, Poetryman, luv :-* ~
This one is so redolent with pain. My heart aches for I feel as though this person gave up something quite precious, someone real...
Alas, what fools we mortals be, luv. :-*
This one is so redolent with pain. My heart aches for I feel as though this person gave up something quite precious, someone real...
Alas, what fools we mortals be, luv. :-*
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re: Re: I Remember When
26th Aug 2014 5:51pm
Re: I Remember When
26th Aug 2014 2:59pm
"Only fools fall in love." A very sentimental write, full of passion...CHEERS, JJ.
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re: Re: I Remember When
1st Sep 2014 9:50pm
Re: I Remember When
Anonymous
26th Sep 2014 7:09pm
I'm sorry you feel this pain. I know it well. Life can change a person to be who they never thought. I have become that person. Thank you for the impact you've had on my heart and soul. Xo :)
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re: Re: I Remember When
27th Sep 2014 10:13am
You are someone I care for very deeply and to be a part of your heart means a lot to me. Thank you for all the comments and warm feelings you give to me Gail!
re: Re: I Remember When
22nd Nov 2014 2:45pm
Re: I Remember When
Anonymous
4th Dec 2014 9:52am
The sadness in this is unbearable..such a waste...such a shame..on the plus side it made a beautiful poem
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re: Re: I Remember When
4th Dec 2014 9:06pm
Thank you for commenting! The nature of creativity often leads to funneling our deepest pain into a tornado of words.., jJ