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growing knowlege but lacking wisdom
Knowledge or wisdom which is the best,to think your the smartest because you ace every test or to learn from all mistakes made by you and the rest
We find new ways to create and destroy but if we learned from war we would have peace and joy
We all play a part in corrupting young minds but still we can't read our own signs and we've lived through it thousands of times
We started out bad and kept getting worse but its our fault we live in a world so cursed
What will it take before we reach the brink ,to finally give the people anew perspective to think.
We find new ways to create and destroy but if we learned from war we would have peace and joy
We all play a part in corrupting young minds but still we can't read our own signs and we've lived through it thousands of times
We started out bad and kept getting worse but its our fault we live in a world so cursed
What will it take before we reach the brink ,to finally give the people anew perspective to think.
Published 30th Jul 2014
| Edited 4th Sep 2015
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9th Aug 2014 3:07am
This poem has great potential, Dakotaguygemini, luv :-*.
The line I feel falters somewhat is:
but finally man learned to fly
Somehow that line right there is incongruent to me. I was with you until then.
There are minor editorial changes to be made, but I think this poem has incredible potential, luv. Keep working on it. You've a way with words, a lyricism and intensity that serve you well... :-*
The line I feel falters somewhat is:
but finally man learned to fly
Somehow that line right there is incongruent to me. I was with you until then.
There are minor editorial changes to be made, but I think this poem has incredible potential, luv. Keep working on it. You've a way with words, a lyricism and intensity that serve you well... :-*
