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Come-'See-Me-N...'
Come, 'See-Me-N...'
Eye-can sense
this ink's scent
like thy stink
Cannabis is as it's...
Plungin' protrudin'
seepin' deeper in
relentless in flux,
influencin' thee
mental's confine
meant to 'mess wit'
instead it just meshes
with the flexin' mind
whenever fluid flows
thru this poetical mine
landin' like Donavan
it's 'verse first goal time'
the poetics given is
word driven, drivin'
it's point, insanely fast
like Nascar-
lane stayin' swayin'
true to what I feel
I do...
I'm 'read-hot'
yet not til I'm done
forever n' always
simply moved by
the Greatest One...
the Father's son!
Eye-can sense
this ink's scent
like thy stink
Cannabis is as it's...
Plungin' protrudin'
seepin' deeper in
relentless in flux,
influencin' thee
mental's confine
meant to 'mess wit'
instead it just meshes
with the flexin' mind
whenever fluid flows
thru this poetical mine
landin' like Donavan
it's 'verse first goal time'
the poetics given is
word driven, drivin'
it's point, insanely fast
like Nascar-
lane stayin' swayin'
true to what I feel
I do...
I'm 'read-hot'
yet not til I'm done
forever n' always
simply moved by
the Greatest One...
the Father's son!
Published 27th Jun 2014
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28th Jun 2014 6:37am
...loved the last stanza, it framed the ending nicely! Couldn't quite vibe with the majority of this ink, Poe! Don't know what it was. I think it's just me, I'm mentally drained. Xo Pen Love~
29th Jun 2014 12:24pm
The message is simple if you think about it
I'm saying that what moves my pen is NOT
me, it's God using me...thank you for the support
as always, appreciate ur honesty n respect :)
I'm saying that what moves my pen is NOT
me, it's God using me...thank you for the support
as always, appreciate ur honesty n respect :)
28th Jun 2014 5:51pm
29th Jun 2014 12:29pm
I can see what you mean, BUT if I do anything
else to this piece it maybe eliminating a few lines here n there
becuz the point I tried to make has to stay intact...
Thank you for your thoughts n support sweetheart :)
else to this piece it maybe eliminating a few lines here n there
becuz the point I tried to make has to stay intact...
Thank you for your thoughts n support sweetheart :)
29th Jun 2014 3:21pm
Nice soccer analogy. I would say I am warming up to it a bit, but I am going to wait until they get rid of the biter! :)
Very much like the opposite of one of Al Jarreau's great ad-libs/improvisations, "You Don't See Me"
Very much like the opposite of one of Al Jarreau's great ad-libs/improvisations, "You Don't See Me"
30th Jun 2014 6:17am
Damn bro I got a feeling if u n I were to vibe together, we'd spend hours jamming ole school music! I'm a big time lover of AL J's unique renditions! :)... Ty for all ur support always :)
30th Jun 2014 9:39am
yeah I have a brother who is 11 years younger so there were lots of car rides where I was exposed to stuff I wasn't necessarily into at the time.
30th Jun 2014 12:23pm
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2nd Jul 2014 1:07am
Thank you Crim, good to hear from you
again :) n appreciate the support always :)
again :) n appreciate the support always :)
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21st Aug 2014 5:28pm
Brilliant ink Bro. PK!!
Was smoking a fat one when I read it!!
Great write Man!!
Sir Lancelott
Was smoking a fat one when I read it!!
Great write Man!!
Sir Lancelott
22nd Aug 2014 00:10am
Oh so you just gotta brag bout ur burning huh!? Lol
jk... Truly, I'm happy you enjoyed bro.
Grateful as always n hey...puff puff give!!lol
jk... Truly, I'm happy you enjoyed bro.
Grateful as always n hey...puff puff give!!lol
