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New Ride
Abandoned inside to thoughts
of you
ingrained firmly in my mind;
your rumble
your voice sinks your spikes
deep, you
make me wonder, explore, demand
more
Air kisses for passion - key
fingers trace
release speed's temptation, dissecting sensation
to base
and root the smoke lacing, transcendent.
Once more.
Sound escapes, drawn flames from flint:
Ignition
-Purr
of you
ingrained firmly in my mind;
your rumble
your voice sinks your spikes
deep, you
make me wonder, explore, demand
more
Air kisses for passion - key
fingers trace
release speed's temptation, dissecting sensation
to base
and root the smoke lacing, transcendent.
Once more.
Sound escapes, drawn flames from flint:
Ignition
-Purr
Published 27th Mar 2011
| Edited 30th Mar 2011
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27th Mar 2011 9:12pm
27th Mar 2011 9:14pm
28th Mar 2011 00:33am
Ha. What a perfect write for this weekend! Love the way you explained the bike, cryptic but open. Easy and evaluated, it's clever, J, and it keeps me interested from beginning to end.
28th Mar 2011 1:47am
28th Mar 2011 5:50am
Great concept executed with great fluidity. So much that is has a wonderful feminane/masculine duality
Anonymous
28th Mar 2011 4:08pm
I love the way you take a new means of getting around and turn it into a Dante-esque snapshot epic. It creates a certain sly humour which is a joy to behold. Also, I may be looking too deeply into this - in fact I'm pretty sure I am - but it also seems like a comment on consumerism and shallowness, how romantic love has been replaced with material love, the love of people with the love of things.
28th Mar 2011 6:23pm
ah, thank you, Jack! i didn't see the consumerism but i had kind of hoped to mix the aspect of blurred lines in 'love' between material and humans into the pot. [:
26th Jan 2012 5:32pm
unlike that old worn out clunker
the new ride has better safety than a bunker
upon ignition then engine revs so very loud
people awe at how im driving making me so very proud
protected by the safety belt with the biggest smile upon my face
finally stability has found my heart & im so in Love with this place....
the new ride has better safety than a bunker
upon ignition then engine revs so very loud
people awe at how im driving making me so very proud
protected by the safety belt with the biggest smile upon my face
finally stability has found my heart & im so in Love with this place....
