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she conjures, like destiny
you can’t stop running.
if you do, you’ll go up in flames.
& you can’t stop drinking.
it’s the whiskey’s fire that will one day burn
her memory out of your skull, & her ashes
will drift on a carrion wind. when it happens,
you’ll be free, you can stop.
but you never get close to that final drink…
I remember that dangerous night,
moonlight leaking through lacy curtains, like madness.
a night when the moon put stars in her eyes,
& I fell into her deeply, all of her mystery.
she was annihilation; she was God’s sultry
weapon for the punishment of men.
I bit her lip when I kissed her, to taste her blood.
I gripped her ivory throat, to show her I could
strangle the life out of her with the force of my hand.
& she smiled, hoping that I would;
& she laughed, knowing that I could not.
maybe it was the desire to solicit a twisted, surreal
heaven, a castle in the air that love builds…
but there ain’t no heaven for sinners like us.
Published 10th Jun 2014
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10th Jun 2014 4:08am
"moonlight leaking through lacy curtains, like madness"
"& she smiled, hoping that I would;
& she laughed, knowing that I could not."
Loved those lines..
Enjoyed...
"& she smiled, hoping that I would;
& she laughed, knowing that I could not."
Loved those lines..
Enjoyed...
10th Jun 2014 4:52am
10th Jun 2014 5:56am
Yep love those same lines as fenom
You never get close to that final drink - cool writings John
You never get close to that final drink - cool writings John
10th Jun 2014 6:43am
ditto on Ed and whale's quotes.
always a pleasure reading you Mister Feddeler
always a pleasure reading you Mister Feddeler
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10th Jun 2014 12:24pm
oh the teasing, the testing
trying, pushing..
this is intense
nicely penned ;-)
trying, pushing..
this is intense
nicely penned ;-)
10th Jun 2014 2:59pm
Many of your poems send me reminiscing of Spillane and Miller; they bite with grit. You're Sin City with a twist of the poet who's lived most of your poems; it shows. You're the Conjurer with your pen.. keep 'em coming John.
10th Jun 2014 4:34pm
The kiss to taste her blood....hands around her throat...her wanting and knowing sound familiar to me....lol
Dark, twisted and erotic
Dark, twisted and erotic
10th Jun 2014 6:57pm
Funny, the color of her top put me in mind of blood right away, then I read your bit lip line.
"she was annihilation; she was God’s sultry
weapon for the punishment of men."
She holds power in her vulnerability.
Beautiful lines, Feddeler, dark and delicious.
"she was annihilation; she was God’s sultry
weapon for the punishment of men."
She holds power in her vulnerability.
Beautiful lines, Feddeler, dark and delicious.
10th Jun 2014 9:11pm
striking literature, and photo. I'm rapt by your words without fail. You have such a divine nature of seeing the magnificent significance of these encounters.
10th Jun 2014 11:30pm
11th Jun 2014 2:40am
Dang, that pic is rattling the invisible cage that imprisons the lesbian I think I have in me. o_O
I always inhale heaven when I visit your ink, John! Xo
I always inhale heaven when I visit your ink, John! Xo
12th Jun 2014 5:14am
"a twisted, surreal heaven"
that line just lingers, bouncing around in my head...captivating ink..enjoyed!!!
that line just lingers, bouncing around in my head...captivating ink..enjoyed!!!
13th Jun 2014 3:55am
John, this recollection of an encounter still carries much impact, and it is beautifully presented. The third stanza is wonderful, in particular.
29th Jun 2014 3:04am
Ok you got me hooked on that first stanza, so much so that I become stuck on it, reading it over and over and then simply just wanting more...sigh..flowed over me, thru me...sigh..
2nd Jul 2014 8:27pm
Enthralled "moonlight leaking through lacy curtains, like madness.
a night when the moon put stars in her eyes,
& I fell into her deeply, all of her mystery."
with such a sad end- loved everything about it <3
a night when the moon put stars in her eyes,
& I fell into her deeply, all of her mystery."
with such a sad end- loved everything about it <3
3rd Jul 2014 00:42am
