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"Tea"
Late, but gotta have her, I call
A midnight drive-by
She jumps in
Soon, she will cry
Out in euphoric moans
Deafening, ending with a sigh
She slides close, as we drive
I whisper desires in her ear
Her head between my legs
Firmly shifts me into gear
Very aware of my intention
As the destination draws near
Park by the lake, sit on a picnic table
Kiss and grope, so damn good
I crave more, uncontrollable, this
Desire to lick under her hood
Breasts exposed, shorts on the ground
Wet my lips, not misunderstood
Smiles all around
Salty sweet tea awaits in the south
She squirms, giggles at first
While I kiss more than her lovely mouth
The delectable delight is delicious, juicy
I anticipate, the best drink ever will soon come pouring out
Fingers clamped around my head
Her glass about to empty, from the intensity I deduce
Rhythm and vocals reveal how close she is, then
Fantastic groans and jerks precede what is now produced
Consuming it all as if sipped through a straw
This most precious beverage is seduced
*June 7, 2014*
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Re: "Tea"
10th Jun 2014 3:53am
This is an interesting poem. I rarely use that overworked adjective, but this poem is interesting because 1) It celebrates the joys of drinking a girl's piss (a subject rarely broached in most erotic poetry) and 2) Though well written as usual, it seems slightly unfocused--as if this was a rushed write. This poem brought back many memories, all happy and perfect. The act itself could be described as being exactly that: happy, perfect and gratifying for both celebrants!
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re: Re: "Tea"
10th Jun 2014 6:13am
candycrier, thank you for taking the time to read and share your structured comments.
I am certain you are aware, a substantial portion of poetry is open to interpretation, subject to the readers perspective.
The piece is not about drinking this gals urine. She isn't even a squirter. She does secrete heavily at orgasm, thus the verb, "pouring."
Her juices prior to climax are the, "delectable delight .... juicy."
The rhythm is intended to be fast, rushed, as in a "drive-by." My choice of words and rhyme follow this intention.
If it reads as being, 'unfocused,' I think most of my works are. :)
It was extreme good fortune that she answered my call just after midnight, Saturday morning, and accepted the offer to, "caress our stress."
Yes, the act was gratifying, satisfying and de-stress-ifying. :)
Always appreciate you stopping by.
I am certain you are aware, a substantial portion of poetry is open to interpretation, subject to the readers perspective.
The piece is not about drinking this gals urine. She isn't even a squirter. She does secrete heavily at orgasm, thus the verb, "pouring."
Her juices prior to climax are the, "delectable delight .... juicy."
The rhythm is intended to be fast, rushed, as in a "drive-by." My choice of words and rhyme follow this intention.
If it reads as being, 'unfocused,' I think most of my works are. :)
It was extreme good fortune that she answered my call just after midnight, Saturday morning, and accepted the offer to, "caress our stress."
Yes, the act was gratifying, satisfying and de-stress-ifying. :)
Always appreciate you stopping by.
re: re: Re:
10th Jun 2014 7:10am
What locked in my interpretation was the title ( a lot of teas are urine colored) plus the setting "picnic table" and the reference to a "beverage" etc., seemed a classic tableau for water-sports. Also some girls can cum at the same time they pee. Then that tea (or whatever you want to call it) is as precious as liquid gold!
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re: re: re: Re:
10th Jun 2014 7:16am
Add a tablespoon of sea salt to sweet tea
tastes like the typical coochie
Cheers!
tastes like the typical coochie
Cheers!
Re: "Tea"
10th Jun 2014 6:46am
"I whisper desires in her ear
Her head between my legs
Firmly shifts me into gear"
well damn...
Her head between my legs
Firmly shifts me into gear"
well damn...
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re: Re: "Tea"
10th Jun 2014 7:09am
Well, little kitten, you have a most pleasing way of purring your words. Damn! :)
Re: "Tea"
10th Jun 2014 7:01am
Sweet EV......nothing like that soothing beverage in the summertime. Oh.....or anytime. Hot & SEXY write. Glad your night ended so......um......hydrated. Enjoyed! Xo :)
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re: Re: "Tea"
10th Jun 2014 7:13am
ES, you are spot on. Mmmmm, soothing hydration. Methinks you could use these words in the near future. :)
Always grateful for your insight and encouragement.
XO
Always grateful for your insight and encouragement.
XO
Re: "Tea"
10th Jun 2014 4:12pm
Be it squirting or pouring, it all feels good.
Your writing is HOT because you described how much you wanted her and enjoyed her.....that is the best Erotic description......you took the chance to call her instead of just pleasuring yourself to porn.....not that there is anything wrong with that...lol
Muy caliente!
Your writing is HOT because you described how much you wanted her and enjoyed her.....that is the best Erotic description......you took the chance to call her instead of just pleasuring yourself to porn.....not that there is anything wrong with that...lol
Muy caliente!
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re: Re: "Tea"
10th Jun 2014 10:17pm
"... it all feels good"
Agreed, Ms Lena. :)
Thank you for sharing your depth of understanding. The foundation of this is based upon a simple premise, 'call' or ask.
Even if it is late and chances are slim, I've nothing to lose and much to gain.
Choosing to perform solo is, just that, lonesome. But, as you say, "not that there is anything wrong with that."
Muchas gracias!
Agreed, Ms Lena. :)
Thank you for sharing your depth of understanding. The foundation of this is based upon a simple premise, 'call' or ask.
Even if it is late and chances are slim, I've nothing to lose and much to gain.
Choosing to perform solo is, just that, lonesome. But, as you say, "not that there is anything wrong with that."
Muchas gracias!
Re: "Tea"
10th Jun 2014 9:41pm
I actually LOL @ your comment:
"Add a tablespoon of sea salt to sweet tea
tastes like the typical coochie" <-funny!
'Tea anyone?! ;) Xo
Enjoyed this Vegas!
"Add a tablespoon of sea salt to sweet tea
tastes like the typical coochie" <-funny!
'Tea anyone?! ;) Xo
Enjoyed this Vegas!
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re: Re: "Tea"
10th Jun 2014 10:27pm
Pleased to know you enjoyed this, Ms Rain.
Thank you for sharing your entertaining remarks. :)
Though I partake of the occasional adult drink, I believe this beverage qualifies within the limits of a teatotaler.
This being said, I eagerly accept your invitation! ;) lol
XO
Thank you for sharing your entertaining remarks. :)
Though I partake of the occasional adult drink, I believe this beverage qualifies within the limits of a teatotaler.
This being said, I eagerly accept your invitation! ;) lol
XO
Re: "Tea"
11th Jun 2014 00:22am
"salty sweet tea awaits in the south"
always worth the drive :)
great stuff, Vegas
always worth the drive :)
great stuff, Vegas
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re: Re: "Tea"
11th Jun 2014 7:22am