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Shine Bright My Young Child
My mother once told me “Shine Bright My Young Child”
And every day when I was young I strived for greatness
I always smiled whenever I saw myself in a mirror
And helped as many people as I could help
But then adolescence and school set in
And I soon became cold and callous to the world
I lost my personal message and succumbed to hate
And slowly become hollow and vengeful inside
Lost all sense of hope and happiness that I used to have
My heart was filled with feelings of hopelessness
Didn’t strive to be the person I once wanted to be
Rather I let myself wallow in despair and self-pity
But then something bright and warm shined through
And I remembered who I used to be when I was young
I remembered all the ideas and hope filled dreams
The way I used to smile on a bright sunny day
I realized in that single moment how much I have lost
All the warmth, happiness, youthfulness, and hope
And every day when I was young I strived for greatness
I always smiled whenever I saw myself in a mirror
And helped as many people as I could help
But then adolescence and school set in
And I soon became cold and callous to the world
I lost my personal message and succumbed to hate
And slowly become hollow and vengeful inside
Lost all sense of hope and happiness that I used to have
My heart was filled with feelings of hopelessness
Didn’t strive to be the person I once wanted to be
Rather I let myself wallow in despair and self-pity
But then something bright and warm shined through
And I remembered who I used to be when I was young
I remembered all the ideas and hope filled dreams
The way I used to smile on a bright sunny day
I realized in that single moment how much I have lost
All the warmth, happiness, youthfulness, and hope
Published 3rd Jun 2014
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3rd Jun 2014 1:13pm
3rd Jun 2014 7:18pm
I love this!... "And I remembered" - that's the good stuff. :) Nicely written personal truth.
3rd Jun 2014 7:21pm
4th Jun 2014 8:05am
23rd Jul 2014 3:06am
Very touching poem, it's easy to relate to what you might have felt.
As far as honest critique goes, I see this more as a diary entry than a poem, and personally I would've gone for a less prose-like approach. But to each their own, right? Great write regardless (:
As far as honest critique goes, I see this more as a diary entry than a poem, and personally I would've gone for a less prose-like approach. But to each their own, right? Great write regardless (:
