SWAN

no ugly ducklings,
just swans, in
your song..:)

Mate very much appreciated comment

Beautiful! Luv the imagery here. Nature is so inspirational. :)

Thank you Flowergirl - where are we without luv

Swans are like rays of light, like hope, like the silver linings of the darkened clouds.
A heartfelt write

Thanks Mourganna - sometimes all we have are silver linings

a very beautiful write Whale :) with love Crim

So glad you're here Crim :)

lovely piece on the simple beauty of life and it's creation ...

Thank you.

Hey Lobo - thanks - I have to constantly remind myself right now that it's a  beautiful world

there is beauty even among the weeds. you write w/a shining heart...

Quite right in it all - there is always above

whale, I really enjoyed this piece, especially the flow in stanzas in 2 and 3, the words rolled off the tongue. Great technique and nice rhyming. I felt the opening stanza could use a little tweaking with a couple of word changes to give that opening line a bit more meat and to tie it in with the second line. I thought associating the word "broken" with the "egg" metaphor could be one way of linking the lines. This just a suggestion for you to consider.

"When hope was broken from less,
A swan nurtures an egg into the sun.
It is simpleness when two become one."

Overall it is a beautifully written poem.

Great comments - wrestled with and in part surrendered to - for the better

To grow and change is inevitable, to grow in love blessed. Deep write. Enjoyed whale.

Thanks for getting this write Xmar