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Turning the Table
I just drowned
in the deep pool
of your eyes
please give me
mouth to mouth
resuscitation
Your voice sounds
like a rhapsody
that only I can hear
come closer and sing
all the words
into my ear
Did you know
its my lucky day
write my lucky number
on this napkin
your cellphone contact
will do just fine.
in the deep pool
of your eyes
please give me
mouth to mouth
resuscitation
Your voice sounds
like a rhapsody
that only I can hear
come closer and sing
all the words
into my ear
Did you know
its my lucky day
write my lucky number
on this napkin
your cellphone contact
will do just fine.
Published 21st Mar 2014
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21st Mar 2014 2:06am
21st Mar 2014 3:17am
It's different for you this piece. I don't think it suits you at all. You have that smooth reading style and on this piece it's just lacking everything .
21st Mar 2014 3:51am
Thanks so much Gg78, for reading and for the observation. It was for the competition "pick up lines' ...somehow I knew I will go home alone...with this piece...lol...
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21st Mar 2014 11:55pm
Idryad - We live in an age where love and technology seem to collide everyday and indeed turn the tables for all of us. Thanks for the reminder Grace. I enjoyed. Namyh
22nd Mar 2014 00:19am
