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The Demons Dance at Night
The Demons Dance at Night
While the normal folk are at rest,
I'm awakened by a pest.
It has pricked me with a bloody lance,
and dragged my ass to the dance.
My body has some vicious guests,
when they're here there is no rest.
They like to party when I need to sleep.
They dance all through the night, they love to see me weep.
They dance with knives and they dance with fire,
On and on, they never tire.
Is there no end to this hopeless plight,
When the demons dance all through the night!?
While the normal folk are at rest,
I'm awakened by a pest.
It has pricked me with a bloody lance,
and dragged my ass to the dance.
My body has some vicious guests,
when they're here there is no rest.
They like to party when I need to sleep.
They dance all through the night, they love to see me weep.
They dance with knives and they dance with fire,
On and on, they never tire.
Is there no end to this hopeless plight,
When the demons dance all through the night!?
Published 5th Mar 2014
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5th Mar 2014 3:30am
The repetition of the word "they" threw me off near the end, but it was decent enough.
5th Mar 2014 6:20pm
Sorry about that I posted my reply incorrectly.
You are right, I did get carried away them theys, didn't think about it at the time though, Thanks so much for the Honest Feedback.
You are right, I did get carried away them theys, didn't think about it at the time though, Thanks so much for the Honest Feedback.
5th Mar 2014 11:38am
I liked this poem, I sometimes feel that demons keep me awake at night. Perhaps one day I will find the words I need to silence them.
Keep up the good work:)
Keep up the good work:)
5th Mar 2014 6:31pm
Thank You so much for relating!
The little bastards can be obnoxious can't they, especially when you are really tired. The ones that I have been dealing with lately though have turned out to be pretty decent. They're showing up with some good whiskey and pills and they either pass out or leave by the time I'm ready to go back to bed. Thanks, Again
The little bastards can be obnoxious can't they, especially when you are really tired. The ones that I have been dealing with lately though have turned out to be pretty decent. They're showing up with some good whiskey and pills and they either pass out or leave by the time I'm ready to go back to bed. Thanks, Again
8th Mar 2014 2:34pm
8th Mar 2014 3:35pm
