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I'll chain myself to a star
What I thought I'd do was
I'd wait here patiently
Until the time is right
And then chain myself to a star
And bring her down to me
So we'd be together
Not even 'til death we do part'
We'd be Heathcliff and Cathy
My trapped angel, fallen star
I'd adore her
So what if she dislikes me
I'll change that, through passion
Through hellfire relentless
I'll wait here patiently
And then chain myself to a star
Why Shouldn't I?
I'd wait here patiently
Until the time is right
And then chain myself to a star
And bring her down to me
So we'd be together
Not even 'til death we do part'
We'd be Heathcliff and Cathy
My trapped angel, fallen star
I'd adore her
So what if she dislikes me
I'll change that, through passion
Through hellfire relentless
I'll wait here patiently
And then chain myself to a star
Why Shouldn't I?
Published 23rd Feb 2011
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24th Feb 2011 1:07am
I enjoyed reading this very much..
My trapped angel, fallen star
I'd adore her
So what if she dislikes me
I'll change that, through passion
Through hellfire relentless
I'll wait here patiently
And then chain myself to a star
Why Shouldn't I?
great lines..peace Crimsin
My trapped angel, fallen star
I'd adore her
So what if she dislikes me
I'll change that, through passion
Through hellfire relentless
I'll wait here patiently
And then chain myself to a star
Why Shouldn't I?
great lines..peace Crimsin
24th Feb 2011 1:13am
'So what if she dislikes me
I'll change that, through passion
Through hellfire relentless
I'll wait here patiently' - Beautiful, almost melodic. Full of imagery and just full in general, I think. Nice work.
I'll change that, through passion
Through hellfire relentless
I'll wait here patiently' - Beautiful, almost melodic. Full of imagery and just full in general, I think. Nice work.
24th Feb 2011 8:24am
I would love to do just the same thing. Only I would neither wait for the time to be right no hope to bring her down to me. I will do everything now to chain myself to a star and allow ourselves fall up, up to eternity.
The poem is a great awakening. I am loving it.
The poem is a great awakening. I am loving it.
24th Feb 2011 2:14pm
I put the last line "Why shouldn't I?" to give the impression that the mind is still not made up and still a bit restless.
24th Feb 2011 2:12pm
Thanks for the comments and general attention to this piece. Are you chaining yourself to these starry words perhaps?
Anonymous
25th Feb 2011 8:05pm
I like how this poem doesn't have a ready meaning. It's subtle and strange and oddly moving. Excellent work, Viddax.
25th Feb 2011 11:37pm
You've just listed all the things I try to express in my work, the epitome. But you did miss 'passion' but I'll forgive that and work on it.
6th Apr 2011 7:26pm
if this were true that we could grasp a star and that be our one true one then maybe things maybe different...
i like this alot i am not really a mushy person but this is something that i will tell my friends about
darkvein_333
i like this alot i am not really a mushy person but this is something that i will tell my friends about
darkvein_333
7th Apr 2011 2:55am
Oh, don't cash in all those chips just yet, romance isn't quite dead. We're all surrounded by stars, just need the right sight to look at them looking at us. I'm flattered that you'd mention this to anyone!
18th Apr 2011 3:24pm
To some it may not be dead but to me it is... I can't find anyone who can except me for me...
and my friends love this one!!!
and my friends love this one!!!
24th Apr 2011 00:26am
Et tu? Well I'm less a case of not being excepted as almos being ignored. David means 'beloved' but though its good that I may be beloved by my friends, they can't quite be that special person who keeps me warm at night in winter and sit with in a cool summer.
26th Apr 2011 2:43pm
ya true... i just know that i when i find someone i want them to be the one not just another thing i want something that will last forever....
26th Apr 2011 10:04pm
Ah forever is a long time coming. Settle for a lifetime, you'd treasure them even more then.
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12th Jul 2011 11:57am
Its nice that people are chaining themselves to this, seems I've found something that people can connect with; a long chain!
