Call of Viddax

Just a little ditty that came from my head; about how the corrupt and evil would be dead, if my will was finally said.

Well said..peace Crim

Thanken you fur the comment, you get to be issued your non-corporeal combat gear, its in the mail.

Cool you made me laugh with that one..peace Crim :)

Glad you didn't take it too seriously, a revolution in my name would be problematic to say the least! War and Peace Viddax

I normally don't like this kind of "call to arms" poem, though they monopolised my earlier work, but this is constructed with such elegance, such a good ear for rhythm and rhyme, that it's impossible to resist. I think you should put a "the" before "madman's ball," "question" would make more sense than "inquest their," and I'm not sure "day of dusk" is quite accurate, but apart from those quibbles this is excellent. Now, where's my Margaret Thatcher mask and petrol bombs...

I'll take note of your notes and change it as is appropriate. I put day of dusk to detract and contrast the 'new dawn' feel of the poem.

this is really inspiring stuff love it!  

Thanks, hope it inspired you to... do... something...

Tanken you for the ze comment.

I like this it's good well said

Well said, but better roared to the revolutinoaries by the passionate leader.