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Plummet
perched upon the ledge
a head full of
venomous imperturbation
The subdued coryphee
wails within her head
banging cobwebbed boxes
along the corridors of
her mind...
Futile memories shoved up inside
soot and shadows
prove still destructible
to her
even with time..
daybreak overshadows the sky
eyelids sink shut
arms spread wide
flailing as though
caught under ocean tide..
Wind caught hair
thunderous roar
sky is not the ocean
and pavement not the shore...
a head full of
venomous imperturbation
The subdued coryphee
wails within her head
banging cobwebbed boxes
along the corridors of
her mind...
Futile memories shoved up inside
soot and shadows
prove still destructible
to her
even with time..
daybreak overshadows the sky
eyelids sink shut
arms spread wide
flailing as though
caught under ocean tide..
Wind caught hair
thunderous roar
sky is not the ocean
and pavement not the shore...
Published 27th Jan 2014
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This is really pretty, I like the visual I get from it and the last two lines are amazing.
"sky is not the ocean
and pavement not the shore..."
That's very beautiful. I love that line alot. It has so much meaning and depth behind it. And it just made me feel like I actually was there, like this feeling was my own as well.
A simply lovely poem.
- Paige Rider
"sky is not the ocean
and pavement not the shore..."
That's very beautiful. I love that line alot. It has so much meaning and depth behind it. And it just made me feel like I actually was there, like this feeling was my own as well.
A simply lovely poem.
- Paige Rider
28th Jan 2014 1:21pm
WOW!!!
incredible wording that flows to the very depths
"sky is not ocean
and pavement not the shore..."
incredible wording that flows to the very depths
"sky is not ocean
and pavement not the shore..."
30th Jan 2014 1:30am
Love this! Powerful n deeply intriguing, love the closing lines, " the sky is not ocean and pavement not the shore"
31st Mar 2014 3:37pm
21st Nov 2017 1:02am
"perched upon the ledge"-this is dangerous..i like it already
"banging cobwebbed boxes
along the corridors of
her mind... "- nice imagery it's building up, that movie arachnophobia was crazy as shit
"Futile memories shoved up inside
soot and shadows "- no resistance shall be tolerated lol
"daybreak overshadows the sky
eyelids sink shut "- flawless line, i imagine a red solar eclipse over the pyramids in Egypt as the worlds ending
fantastic writing and poem, two thumbs way up.
keep'em coming RiverLily
