"Tethered..."

A sweet moment of realisation...

Your structure is like the dive into her heart, down, down...

Last line bothers me a little - consider writing it "want to" instead, to be consistent with the rest of the writing.

You're very sweet my friend, n just so you know
the last line was intentional, "want to" is so
obvious n common, n I routinely hate to be common
n I got this thing where I'm generally 'flipping the finger'
at rules in poetry lol... Aside from that I also want you to 'see'
why  "wanna" worked for me... Simply as I can say it is this:
By the time HE felt this euphoric emotion, his senses were altered... Does that make sense? Thank you my
sweet one, I truly appreciate you much :)

Lol, you go ahead and flip the finger, as long as you're aware...

:)

Will do my love!
ur special n super gifted n I truly adore u lady :)

My man this piece is something else. Beautifully written, an excellent display of poetic skills.

Thank you bro! I'm truly truly flattered n so grateful for your always kind n honest commentaries. Much love to you n yours! :)

then
he took
a
swandive
into
her heart

Makes me
want to (wanna :-))dive
into your seductive words.

*Makes me
want to (wanna) dive...*

See first comment/reply above lol

Thank you my dear, I'm happy you liked
and I deeply appreciate your thoughts and support :)

As to the comment above:
That's why but hey! she's right!

Never said she wasn't or wrong
Only that it was intentional how I wrote it lol
Muah!

Lovely piece Poe! Love the flow.....Xo

Thank you Rain, I'm glad you enjoyed and
I'm grateful for all your support always :)

Beautiful write such a passionate tender side you have to you :) peace Crim

Yea I guess, for all the good it does me lol
Anyways, thank you so much my friend, truly appreciate
ur support :)