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You're My Drug
You're arsenic mixed with opium
I inhale your toxic combination
gladly intoxicated by your poisonous stew
taking you in flowing through my veins
you're a dangerous cocktail
like playing with a viper
getting bit the venom
makes my head spin
your poetic verse is the poison
I so badly crave
such a deadly combination
sets my heart racing
my cocaine with no cutter
sending me into outer space
where I can reach the cosmos
tripping off you as if I were on acid
wondering what makes you tick
I lick your ink written so deliciously
laid down like cum so tasty to me
I drink you down not wanting to waste a drop
you are my ecstasy leaving my panties on fire
watching multi colored flashes before my eyes
streaking like a shooting star
there one minute then crashes to the ground
that's where i'm at without your verse
so addicted to your power punches
just another junkie, groupie of yours
dusting myself off I walk on into the night
dreams will come, maybe your face will be there
I hope not I need some peace from my painful addiction
I inhale your toxic combination
gladly intoxicated by your poisonous stew
taking you in flowing through my veins
you're a dangerous cocktail
like playing with a viper
getting bit the venom
makes my head spin
your poetic verse is the poison
I so badly crave
such a deadly combination
sets my heart racing
my cocaine with no cutter
sending me into outer space
where I can reach the cosmos
tripping off you as if I were on acid
wondering what makes you tick
I lick your ink written so deliciously
laid down like cum so tasty to me
I drink you down not wanting to waste a drop
you are my ecstasy leaving my panties on fire
watching multi colored flashes before my eyes
streaking like a shooting star
there one minute then crashes to the ground
that's where i'm at without your verse
so addicted to your power punches
just another junkie, groupie of yours
dusting myself off I walk on into the night
dreams will come, maybe your face will be there
I hope not I need some peace from my painful addiction
Published 10th Nov 2013
| Edited 12th Dec 2014
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Anonymous
10th Nov 2013 4:29am
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10th Nov 2013 4:44am
10th Nov 2013 5:24am
10th Nov 2013 7:36am
10th Nov 2013 5:36am
Love it, of course. That's one lucky fucker, whoever it may be. ;)
In the interest of honest critique, dear crim, you use the word "mix" three times in the first stanza. I would suggest leaving one there and searching out a couple of synonyms to replace the other two. JMHO, of course.
Gemini
In the interest of honest critique, dear crim, you use the word "mix" three times in the first stanza. I would suggest leaving one there and searching out a couple of synonyms to replace the other two. JMHO, of course.
Gemini
thank you Gemini I don't know how I missed that mix thing.. too wrapped up I guess thank you for pointing it out to me great looking out :) as always you make me smile :) peace Crim
10th Nov 2013 6:23pm
Ah, the first stanza reads much smoother now. Well done. If the muse for this piece is who I think it is, he loves it and has added it to his reading list. ;)
Gemini
Gemini
10th Nov 2013 6:25pm
thank you Gemini :) you're too sly nothing gets past you ;) you made me smile wide this morning thank you.. peace Crim
Megadeth- Poison was the cure....Song's about herion,but this reminded me of it...The first lines of the song are among some of my favorites...
First lines:
I miss the warm embrace I felt the first time you touched me.Secure,and safe in open arms,I should've known you'd crush me!A snake you were when we met,I loved you anyway.Pulling out your poison fangs,then venom never goes away...
Enjoyed...
First lines:
I miss the warm embrace I felt the first time you touched me.Secure,and safe in open arms,I should've known you'd crush me!A snake you were when we met,I loved you anyway.Pulling out your poison fangs,then venom never goes away...
Enjoyed...
10th Nov 2013 7:40am
thank you for sharing part of the song with me I don't know if I've heard and just didn't pay attention to the lyrics but i'll definitely give it a listen now :) peace Crim
10th Nov 2013 1:34pm
Beautiful words sharing your feelings...I feel it all.(leaving my panties on fire)love that :)
10th Nov 2013 2:11pm
Anonymous
11th Nov 2013 00:16am
Good metaphor...addiction to a lover....
11th Nov 2013 4:46am
11th Nov 2013 2:58pm
what a great combination of words! indeed love is a dangerous drug...beautiful crim!
11th Nov 2013 4:12pm
21st Nov 2013 8:20am
Deliciously venomous. I like your choice of words. Gonna have to stalk your works. Great write!
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