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Just in my brain
I should admit this feverish longing
and not continue to fight
my body is calling your name
can you relate to my plight?
It is a call of the senses
enlivened with you in mind
now what is my competition
do I have an uphill climb?
Would doubts be taken care of
when you feel me enter you hard
not caring who is watching
yes I will take you in the yard
A variety of tempos
keeps the spice alive in our play
hopefully with pure satisfaction
enough to make you want to stay
So it may be only in my mind
the mark of semen touches you so
but that heaven on earth that you provide
is the place I always want to go
and not continue to fight
my body is calling your name
can you relate to my plight?
It is a call of the senses
enlivened with you in mind
now what is my competition
do I have an uphill climb?
Would doubts be taken care of
when you feel me enter you hard
not caring who is watching
yes I will take you in the yard
A variety of tempos
keeps the spice alive in our play
hopefully with pure satisfaction
enough to make you want to stay
So it may be only in my mind
the mark of semen touches you so
but that heaven on earth that you provide
is the place I always want to go
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Re: Just in my brain
2nd Nov 2013 7:51pm
....sensual thoughts as these, trapped in our brain, tends do drive us insane, beautifully of course. Enjoyed this Jazz! Xo
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re: Re: Just in my brain
2nd Nov 2013 7:53pm
Re: Just in my brain
2nd Nov 2013 8:04pm
You speak of a Heavenly place Jazz-Such a Wondrous place-Excellence Sir!!!
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re: Re: Just in my brain
2nd Nov 2013 8:46pm
Thanks...really just a reaction to some of the gems other poets have given us here.
Re: Just in my brain
3rd Nov 2013 2:07am
Jazz ,
I liked this ink,
5th line dwn, 1st stanza. You / Your.
Love how it sort of made me chuckle , n' taking out in the yard! .
Fine line and place to be taking it. Lol.
KG
I liked this ink,
5th line dwn, 1st stanza. You / Your.
Love how it sort of made me chuckle , n' taking out in the yard! .
Fine line and place to be taking it. Lol.
KG
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re: Re: Just in my brain
3rd Nov 2013 11:10pm
I think if I had be more attentive or critical of my own work I wouldn't have place so may "you"s in this write! To be honest I was even aware of it until I saw your comment.
Re: Just in my brain
3rd Nov 2013 3:20am
great piece jazz... love life always goes through a rollercoaster ride with lots of ups n down that effects sex life as well ... great way to show love....
write on ....
cyanide....
write on ....
cyanide....
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re: Re: Just in my brain
3rd Nov 2013 11:11pm
The rollercoaster? Gives me an idea for a future write! Thanks for the comment.
Re: Just in my brain
3rd Nov 2013 11:59am
Nothing like having Heaven on Earth. JZM very deep sensual write enjoyed it to its fullest capacity. Loving it man! Truly loving it!
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re: Re: Just in my brain
3rd Nov 2013 11:17pm
yes, like that Quincy Jones song "Heaven's Girl", featuring vocals by R.Kelly, Ron Isley, Aaron Hall, Charlie Wilson (Gap Band) and surprisingly Naomi Campbell.
Re: Just in my brain
3rd Nov 2013 10:52pm
re: Re: Just in my brain
3rd Nov 2013 11:18pm
Re: Just in my brain
4th Nov 2013 9:55pm
Loved the poem and the rhyming you did here....
I am very impressed with you as a poet....
You have a way of inspiring me.....!!! :)
I am very impressed with you as a poet....
You have a way of inspiring me.....!!! :)
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