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broKen noTes\/
whaT haPpenD to the sSong wiTh the broKen noTes/
that i could tasTe in a million ways (don;T choKe)
jusT knoW to deciPher the unrhythmical feeliNg/
would be the truth unreveiling /like if the sSky had a ceiling))
(in an unBounD epic wheRe the sStorm Gods faLL/
back inTo the oCean/filling sSeas with sSalt)
there weRe mermaiDs swiMming in a sShallow depth/
while the clouDs were cuT out/ to finD no sSunSet)
no sSweat/ i bet that theRe were no regreTs/
except thoSe miSsing in acTion/ & those not founD yet/
waiT a Cancer caughT a Piscies & it uSed a neT/
as for the LosT sSanD ciTy/ pray that the walls proTect it]
there;s a wager on the casTle & NepTunes in debT / quick/
The Fates are on the other line/ call collecteD;)
with tHe forCe of my loVe still sStuck in the mud/
sSimply reMembering/ just wasn:t eNough(
(well Time could;t tell/ what DeaTh doesn:t know/
& Life coulDn;t get any other viTals to sShow /
as we helD our breaTh\Hope/ make no misTakes/
cauSe the drugs we;Re applying/ to the hearT aren;T sSafe;
(Cupid might know..! wiTh his sShiney }-aRrows->
but he oVerDoSed on eXtasy while shooting poRno((
sSo woulD the sSaints marCh in/ & please tell me when/
if it;s eVer really goNna waNna beat again/
the damage is high] but who;d be conCerneD of it/
with meNtal bandaids\ wraPped up like a tourniquet,)
Published 3rd Oct 2013
| Edited 19th Nov 2014
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I freaking love the way you write.The combination of the terminology and the way you present your language stimulates an odd section of my brain that can't but become consumed by the stories you share with us..
(in an unBounD epic wheRe the sStorm Gods faLL/
back inTo the oCean/filled the sSeas with sSalt)
I particularly like those lines. It gives me several different mental images interrupted by the imagery. I dig the almost rap but still strange enough to be rock vibe you have. Write on man..
(in an unBounD epic wheRe the sStorm Gods faLL/
back inTo the oCean/filled the sSeas with sSalt)
I particularly like those lines. It gives me several different mental images interrupted by the imagery. I dig the almost rap but still strange enough to be rock vibe you have. Write on man..
6th Nov 2013 8:28am
