Rewriting in Progress

Pervaded -         
words bind      
and blind me to all      
but this screen in my face        
branding images to my mind        
with an obvious    
ease of eloquence        
burning trails      
demanding my tongue      
my utmost attention      
          
I comply      
        
Every next is still another dose    
of adrenaline          
a roaring V4 between my legs          
and release of open road          
infatuation setting in        
to salacious seduction          
of rhythm, flow--          
his reign over diction      
heating cheeks    
unleashing tethers    
that hold      
this delicate composure      
       
And I covet      
his eyes          
     
Only once      
those ride-or-die eyes      
that I drink from his lines      
where a hinted taste of paradox          
piques my curiosity,          
     
and I think         
in summation:          
          
What an asshole.      
Bet he's amazing in bed.
 
 
 
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the original:
 
Ravenous,
I devour the words
that spill from his pen.
Invading me, pervading me
they hold me fast
his images driving the burn in my veins
his eloquence daring my tongue
to comply
 
I can't get enough.
Every next is the rush I get
with a roaring V4 between my legs
and the release
of open road:
I'm infatuated.
with the salacious seduction
in his rhythm, flow
dominion over diction--
Oh, I know there's
that glow.
 
I defy my own mind to forget
the way he records this,
this multi-faceted essence I drink on a page.
[And] I want his eyes
Only once, those wild side,
"ride-with-me" eyes I read into his lines.
 
I taste a hint of paradox,
piquing my curiosity
And I think
in summation
 
What an asshole.
Bet he's amazing in bed.