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Drip, drop
Drip
Life is leaving
your body
Drop
Too weak to
move now
Drip
Still a final
hopeless effort
Drop
But then the mind
starts to fade
Drip
With an empty head
calmness comes
Drop
In your final breath
you embrace death
Drip
And now all is black
You are never
coming back.
Life is leaving
your body
Drop
Too weak to
move now
Drip
Still a final
hopeless effort
Drop
But then the mind
starts to fade
Drip
With an empty head
calmness comes
Drop
In your final breath
you embrace death
Drip
And now all is black
You are never
coming back.
Published 7th Jul 2013
| Edited 8th Jul 2013
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7th Jul 2013 4:30am
this is sick!! I love that repitiontion.."drip, drop"...till the dark end comes...very creatively written :-)
7th Jul 2013 4:39am
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7th Jul 2013 4:56am
7th Jul 2013 4:49am
I can definitely visualize a person in his/her final moments of his/her life. This is a great poem. Good job!
7th Jul 2013 4:56am
Anonymous
7th Jul 2013 6:33am
This poem is visual and it has a hint of tension, nicely woven words, NO1!
8th Jul 2013 5:32am
12th Jul 2013 6:59pm
Another of your darker ones,
I love how the drips and drops
are almost audible among the words.
Fitting into a deadly rhythm.
I love how the drips and drops
are almost audible among the words.
Fitting into a deadly rhythm.
13th Jul 2013 4:58am
