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Creature Caw
Alas, empty
came the cry
shall I not see
with both my eyes
drying, in strain
the waters
all gone
recessed blessings
sail on sail on
Wind did carry
took your breath
from four corners
that know
how you laughed
Your last gasp
the door nailed
shut
and pry
as you might
never ray
never sun
will light
place shadow
upon your
stoop
Caw caw
crow
wander run
to yonder battlefield
where eyes pecked
are thee only meal
some knight will find you
bless and keep you still
Till his heart bleeds out
and the moon rises full
came the cry
shall I not see
with both my eyes
drying, in strain
the waters
all gone
recessed blessings
sail on sail on
Wind did carry
took your breath
from four corners
that know
how you laughed
Your last gasp
the door nailed
shut
and pry
as you might
never ray
never sun
will light
place shadow
upon your
stoop
Caw caw
crow
wander run
to yonder battlefield
where eyes pecked
are thee only meal
some knight will find you
bless and keep you still
Till his heart bleeds out
and the moon rises full
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25th Jun 2013 7:41am
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25th Jun 2013 11:26am
Till his heart bleeds and the moon rises true.
Enjoyed Soul good read mate .
Enjoyed Soul good read mate .
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25th Jun 2013 2:06pm
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25th Jun 2013 2:05pm
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25th Jun 2013 2:06pm
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25th Jun 2013 2:52pm
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25th Jun 2013 4:17pm
:) thank You Dear Red...Once upon a time when creatures calledtrying to undo their ways...at least for a day--beware those masks of past...once seen they are forever known their true nature.
Greatly appreciate that;)
Greatly appreciate that;)
Re: Creature Caw
25th Jun 2013 4:55pm
Soulman, Very nice rhythm and beautifully worded as always. I think a voice over video would work nicely. That picture is awesome as well. Very nice!
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25th Jun 2013 11:15pm
Very appreciated Tony-thank You!!!
ahhh yes those video posts...one day maybe :)
different kind of stage fright there-need my guitar to hide behind...
ahhh yes those video posts...one day maybe :)
different kind of stage fright there-need my guitar to hide behind...
Re: Creature Caw
25th Jun 2013 6:17pm
awesome write!
I like the style it adds to the creepy awesomeness, and it reminded me of the crow from The Gunslinger
I like the style it adds to the creepy awesomeness, and it reminded me of the crow from The Gunslinger
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25th Jun 2013 11:19pm
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Anonymous
25th Jun 2013 8:18pm
Lots of passion in this poem! A call for the wild!
Really liked this poem, Soul!
Really liked this poem, Soul!
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25th Jun 2013 11:24pm
Thank You Dear Queen-Greatly appreciated!!!
That old saying-fool me once...
Never twice.
That old saying-fool me once...
Never twice.
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26th Jun 2013 1:50am
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27th Jun 2013 1:03am
Indeed Brrrrrr ;) rarely do I show that side of me.
when years are spent with one who wore a mask...took it off...then tries to put the mask back on...it will never pass as genuine once again...I thank You Dear Rain-so very kind.
when years are spent with one who wore a mask...took it off...then tries to put the mask back on...it will never pass as genuine once again...I thank You Dear Rain-so very kind.
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26th Jun 2013 11:29pm
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27th Jun 2013 1:07am
BROOOMIE!!!!!!!
Thank You:)...Poe-ish...indeed the effect I was going for...his tales will forever be the darkest to me...simply because of the childhood awe they held...Thank You for reading me :)))
hugs Jackie!!!
Thank You:)...Poe-ish...indeed the effect I was going for...his tales will forever be the darkest to me...simply because of the childhood awe they held...Thank You for reading me :)))
hugs Jackie!!!
Re: Creature Caw
29th Jun 2013 1:05pm
Wind did carry
took your breath
from four corners
that know
how you laughed
Your last gasp
the door nailed
shut
A tale wrapped in darkness,
I love the tension you
create in this.
took your breath
from four corners
that know
how you laughed
Your last gasp
the door nailed
shut
A tale wrapped in darkness,
I love the tension you
create in this.
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29th Jun 2013 8:15pm
Thank You;)
this happens when evil ones touch me...there are reasons ones become ex right;)
this happens when evil ones touch me...there are reasons ones become ex right;)
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16th Oct 2015 4:30am
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16th Oct 2015 2:15pm
Too kind KDA!!!
You picked a very old Write- thank you for visiting :)
You picked a very old Write- thank you for visiting :)