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SACRED INCOMPLETION
in our
collective humanity
wherein
each of us
are slowly spun
turned and formed
revised and honed
finessed by lifes
perpetual
invisible lathe
as its constant
silent blade
gradually shapes
evolves transforms
us all along
our journeys way
into never
truly understanding
who we
really are
but rather into
who we are
continuously becoming
with each of us
in our last breath
hopefully realizing
that we are only
little masterpieces
of sacred incompletion
yet despite
our personal sense
and all our
futile claims
of our individual
uniqueness
in the end
each of us all
both great
and small
may finally
come to see
at last
that we are
only fallen
leaves
surrendered
to lifes
sacred
winds
soon blown
beyond
the blinding
weave of
whatever
illusions
we have
ascribed to
believed in
and lived
each time
around
were
here
Published 2nd Jun 2013
| Edited 18th Apr 2024
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Anonymous
2nd Jun 2013 12:20pm
Leaves me in awe oin.
3rd Jun 2013 00:23am
Wow!... thank you Strider!... that's great & 'awesome' to hear!... 'Awe' is a wonderful state of being to come into, to be in or even to be left in (to savor), for however brief or long a period of time!...
~ ("Seize the AWE!!!")...
- OIN
~ ("Seize the AWE!!!")...
- OIN
Anonymous
- Edited 8th Oct 2022 2:45pm
4th Jun 2013 10:12pm
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5th Jun 2013 6:37am
"WOW" back to you 'Soulid', as that's one of the highest compliments I've ever received to one of my poems!... I am both honored & humbled by your most flattering regards!...
That's what this is all about (this thing called poetry we all write & do), just one kind word of appreciation, or of telling someone how much you/we were touched or moved by, or were able to deeply relate to something they expressed or kindredly captured in their words, makes all the difference in the world, in terms of validating for them that there truly is meaning in this thing (poetry) we all do!!!... Even if you post a poem that's not particularly one of your personal favorites & you receive just one positive comment of sincere appreciation, that is all the validation & proof that any of us needs to confirm for us that our words truly can & do have more power & potential influence for good, than we can ever even begin to imagine!!!... So "Thank you again 'Soulid' for your gracious gift to me here!... & I'm thrilled to hear that you are loving my poems!... & please feel free to check out as many of my others as well, if you care to (?), as I believe I have posted around 180 so far over the past 80 days!...
- "Write-on, Write-on!!!"...
- OIN
That's what this is all about (this thing called poetry we all write & do), just one kind word of appreciation, or of telling someone how much you/we were touched or moved by, or were able to deeply relate to something they expressed or kindredly captured in their words, makes all the difference in the world, in terms of validating for them that there truly is meaning in this thing (poetry) we all do!!!... Even if you post a poem that's not particularly one of your personal favorites & you receive just one positive comment of sincere appreciation, that is all the validation & proof that any of us needs to confirm for us that our words truly can & do have more power & potential influence for good, than we can ever even begin to imagine!!!... So "Thank you again 'Soulid' for your gracious gift to me here!... & I'm thrilled to hear that you are loving my poems!... & please feel free to check out as many of my others as well, if you care to (?), as I believe I have posted around 180 so far over the past 80 days!...
- "Write-on, Write-on!!!"...
- OIN
Anonymous
- Edited 8th Oct 2022 2:45pm
5th Jun 2013 11:34am
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Much appreciated 'Soulid'!...
"Such circles of creative connections have no true beginnings, nor any finite ends!"...
~ OIN
"Such circles of creative connections have no true beginnings, nor any finite ends!"...
~ OIN
Anonymous
- Edited 8th Oct 2022 2:45pm
8th Jun 2013 12:17pm
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Hi there 'Soulid', actually, that line wasn't a quote I'd ever heard anywhere before, it's just what came out spontaneously as I was replying to your previous comments to me... I was wanting to try & reply to your comments in a much shorter, more succinct way than I most always seem to do, which in general is exhaustingly long... to say the least!!!... & those words just kind of came right up & at the time, I thought to
myself, "Hey, that sounds like something I would write, but most likely never think of to say in everyday one on one conversation"... But then after I wrote it, I thought, "Hm-m-m-m-m, that sounds like a really good, but kind of mystically cryptic, quote!...
So then I went back & put it in quotation marks, but decided 'not' to attribute it to me (even though I wrote it), just so I could leave it anonymous & savor the idea of it being a bit of an unsuspecting mystery!?!... (until now that is!)...
By the way, I've gotten extremely busy the past couple of days & so I've only had enough time to go back & check in on my profile page & write down all the new comments I've received from other DUP members, that I've not had a chance to yet answer or reply to, including several of your most recent ones, except for this one here... So, I will hopefully get a chance to catch up on some of them tomorrow or the next day, if I can?...
& Thanks again for your enviable two word comment!...(I keep telling myself, "One day... Some day, One day!", but even that suggests or implies, little more than a potentially never ending, ongoingly improbable, continuance of my same old usual, seemingly insatiable, creative tendency for only more & yet more?!!!? - lol
😄😉☀️😎👍🏻
- OIN
myself, "Hey, that sounds like something I would write, but most likely never think of to say in everyday one on one conversation"... But then after I wrote it, I thought, "Hm-m-m-m-m, that sounds like a really good, but kind of mystically cryptic, quote!...
So then I went back & put it in quotation marks, but decided 'not' to attribute it to me (even though I wrote it), just so I could leave it anonymous & savor the idea of it being a bit of an unsuspecting mystery!?!... (until now that is!)...
By the way, I've gotten extremely busy the past couple of days & so I've only had enough time to go back & check in on my profile page & write down all the new comments I've received from other DUP members, that I've not had a chance to yet answer or reply to, including several of your most recent ones, except for this one here... So, I will hopefully get a chance to catch up on some of them tomorrow or the next day, if I can?...
& Thanks again for your enviable two word comment!...(I keep telling myself, "One day... Some day, One day!", but even that suggests or implies, little more than a potentially never ending, ongoingly improbable, continuance of my same old usual, seemingly insatiable, creative tendency for only more & yet more?!!!? - lol
😄😉☀️😎👍🏻
- OIN
Anonymous
- Edited 8th Oct 2022 2:45pm
9th Jun 2013 7:30pm
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9th Jun 2013 11:56pm
Thanks 'Soulid'!... & "Roger That!"...
* I thought I'd best begin practicing the foreign (more like 'Alien' to me!) contemporary art form of communicating more briefly & succinctly & so my comment/reply above, to your last comment to me, is my very first effort!...
I think I succeeded beyond my highest expectations (except for this additional, explanatory, last, little paragraph here!)& it feels pretty cool to boot!!!... But I'm not too sure just how much longer I'll be able to keep up such a false façade(???), because trying to be brief & succinct just takes too damn much focus & energy for me, whereas being spontaneous seems to flow much more effortlessly & freely, like running water, melted butter or better yet, melted Hagen Dasz!!!...
- OIN
* I thought I'd best begin practicing the foreign (more like 'Alien' to me!) contemporary art form of communicating more briefly & succinctly & so my comment/reply above, to your last comment to me, is my very first effort!...
I think I succeeded beyond my highest expectations (except for this additional, explanatory, last, little paragraph here!)& it feels pretty cool to boot!!!... But I'm not too sure just how much longer I'll be able to keep up such a false façade(???), because trying to be brief & succinct just takes too damn much focus & energy for me, whereas being spontaneous seems to flow much more effortlessly & freely, like running water, melted butter or better yet, melted Hagen Dasz!!!...
- OIN
