poem for one

Truly felt it, can relate, great write...

Thank you L.

hh

"when we met    
before I had ever heard the words "I love you"    
and believed them    
she was all the bright colours    
   
and when I left    
she was    
no colours    
at all"

Powerful imagery in those words and a common thing.

Guilt slowly eats away at everything.

Great write Hemi, with much depth I find. :)

   
   

Thank you my dear.

hh

wow.. deep as it gets.. painful for her and beautiful for you to recognize..

Cheers D...nor much here really, but happy the small bite worked a little bit.

h.

Hugh,

I appreciate you feeling out a new device to play around with . It works ,  says something solid with minimal words.

I would however try and make a case to have 'away'  included as the last word. I think ( the pace I read it) that your one word off for the flowing of it.

Anyhow, glad to see you've got the versitility in you.

Nice one.

Yeah, I agree with CraicDealer; adding "away" would allow the piece to trail beautifully - and like him, I enjoyed the brevity ... the "nothin' to say" of it.  Not your usual style, but looks like you might fit there if you so wanted.

This one is a kick in the guts, and I'm sorry for how you got to it, but gee it's described soft as a caress ...

Alright alright you beautiful bastards...i'll put it in. Was trying upset even the beauty of the poem..if you see what I mean.

hh

Love to love you lol xoxo

Aww gg...you'd ruin me :-)

This is so touching Hemi..peace Crim

Thank you my dear...have been stripping and playing with it for a day now...have stripped out the rubbish, and left what was the central idea.

:-)

hh

One of your best he hemi...

Cheers S...not sure about it myself, the last verse feels hollowed out, but I do remember that that was my intention at the time, to hang it in a way that jarred, so it's being left alone...

Good man mate.

h.

So much conveyed with so few words, really enjoyed this.

ah wel...that was the plan :-)

Cheers.

hh.

Clean, crisp and impressive.

Cheers man :-)

hh