Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
Today 11:53am
Today 11:53am
Never love or hate
Focus
The truth of a blade
The truth of it sharpness
Steel can cut through flesh & bone
Never love or hate
The truth of a blade
The truth of it sharpness
Steel can cut through flesh & bone
Never love or hate
#emotions
#hate
#love
#strength
#honesty
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4 Comments
Loki_Undercover
Wannabe-Poet
Wannabe-Poet
Poem Published
Today 1:26am
Today 1:26am
Baby, I am trying to cope
I don’t deserve your time of day
But you give it to me anyway
I can’t stop thinking about you
But you’re not mine to keep in my thoughts
I wish you were here
I never got to have you near
I just want you
Why can’t I be with you
I need your touch
I sink in my couch
I cling on to you
Trapped with nothing else to do
Save me
Come take me
I am all yours
But I will always just be
Something you adore
But never what you need
But you give it to me anyway
I can’t stop thinking about you
But you’re not mine to keep in my thoughts
I wish you were here
I never got to have you near
I just want you
Why can’t I be with you
I need your touch
I sink in my couch
I cling on to you
Trapped with nothing else to do
Save me
Come take me
I am all yours
But I will always just be
Something you adore
But never what you need
#love
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smackdownraven
Poem Published
Today 00:53am
Today 00:53am
moodiness
alter the course with some venom
seethining inside I reside in the darkness
anxiiety crawling, lashing out at the world to escape
claustrophobic in my body, it aches
pulling at the seems of reality, while i unravel
painful feeling my hurt only grows larger
an enormous weight I feel I can't get away
trapped within an emotion it is my fate
fractured trust, cursing at the skies
blackest day, no sunshine
the grey moves in on me
my depressed state gets out of control
desiring mercy, for my sin
I petition my Father ...
seethining inside I reside in the darkness
anxiiety crawling, lashing out at the world to escape
claustrophobic in my body, it aches
pulling at the seems of reality, while i unravel
painful feeling my hurt only grows larger
an enormous weight I feel I can't get away
trapped within an emotion it is my fate
fractured trust, cursing at the skies
blackest day, no sunshine
the grey moves in on me
my depressed state gets out of control
desiring mercy, for my sin
I petition my Father ...
#love
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scatteredsilence
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:10pm
Yesterday 11:10pm
Feeling insignificant
He doesn’t look at me like he used to
He’s preoccupied with other things
I look to grab his attention
Unfortunately…
It’s folly, a waste of my energy
I’m invisible to him now
My affections are so politely rebuffed
I’m quietly disregarded
Told that I’m loved, but untouched in so many ways
I understand, I’m not so attractive
Time hasn’t been too kind to me
I look at myself in disbelief
In your shoes, I’d probably feel the same
Perhaps you ought to confess your dislike of me
That I’m not longer your cup of tea ...
He’s preoccupied with other things
I look to grab his attention
Unfortunately…
It’s folly, a waste of my energy
I’m invisible to him now
My affections are so politely rebuffed
I’m quietly disregarded
Told that I’m loved, but untouched in so many ways
I understand, I’m not so attractive
Time hasn’t been too kind to me
I look at myself in disbelief
In your shoes, I’d probably feel the same
Perhaps you ought to confess your dislike of me
That I’m not longer your cup of tea ...
#UnrequitedLove
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:10pm
Yesterday 11:10pm
my love doesn't alter
heartbroken in the soul of me
a scarred terrain
indiscretions brutalize
and I don't trust anymore
vulnerable in a feeling
I can't go back, I can't go forward
if I leave I will hurt, if I stay I will be hurt
my love for you doesn't fade
but it aches
so full on the good days
so bad when you push me away
I'm uncertain what you think you will find with someone else
the magic elixer
the perfect combination
perhaps you would
my affections don't alter
I know there is no one more perfect for me ...
a scarred terrain
indiscretions brutalize
and I don't trust anymore
vulnerable in a feeling
I can't go back, I can't go forward
if I leave I will hurt, if I stay I will be hurt
my love for you doesn't fade
but it aches
so full on the good days
so bad when you push me away
I'm uncertain what you think you will find with someone else
the magic elixer
the perfect combination
perhaps you would
my affections don't alter
I know there is no one more perfect for me ...
#love
40 reads
4 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:40pm
Yesterday 8:40pm
~ethereal :: shadoe
viz : shadoe
#admiration
#inspirational
#love
#spiritual
#WritingPoetry
48 reads
5 Comments
BlackBox
Black Box
Black Box
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:11pm
Yesterday 6:11pm
Lost Love
She was the best part of my day
Your banner flashing across my screen
What a giddy rush
Like opening my first Christmas presents
You’ve cannibalized my thoughts
These neurons fire only for you
Encapsulating your beauty and charm
In those special moments we shared
Perfectly preserved and timeless like a pristine fossil
Life is dull without your brightness,
Cascading over me like a warm blanket
The daily monotonous minutia is mind numbing
Your memory breaks the routine if only briefly
The memories...
Your banner flashing across my screen
What a giddy rush
Like opening my first Christmas presents
You’ve cannibalized my thoughts
These neurons fire only for you
Encapsulating your beauty and charm
In those special moments we shared
Perfectly preserved and timeless like a pristine fossil
Life is dull without your brightness,
Cascading over me like a warm blanket
The daily monotonous minutia is mind numbing
Your memory breaks the routine if only briefly
The memories...
#heartbroken
#IMissYou
#love
#sadness
#UnrequitedLove
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:07pm
Yesterday 6:07pm
waiting on a soul connection
little thoughts of beauty make me smile
with a grateful heart I enter another day
my hopes are that there are no surprises I can't handle
focusing on the positive
I won't get mean today
you wouldn't think that is a thing
but it is for the impatient
the key is to remember to be present in the moment
not racing ahead to the next destination
taking my time to smile at people
instead of cutting them with my eyes
it's been brought to my attention how vivid I can be
altering myself I realize I don't want to be sour
I want...
with a grateful heart I enter another day
my hopes are that there are no surprises I can't handle
focusing on the positive
I won't get mean today
you wouldn't think that is a thing
but it is for the impatient
the key is to remember to be present in the moment
not racing ahead to the next destination
taking my time to smile at people
instead of cutting them with my eyes
it's been brought to my attention how vivid I can be
altering myself I realize I don't want to be sour
I want...
#love
#spiritual
#support
47 reads
3 Comments
tating
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:01pm
Yesterday 5:01pm
The Real Thing!
This feels like the real thing!
So much so, it makes my heart Sing!
Girlfriend so wet, she starts to ring!
The absence of our lust still burns and stings!
This feels like the real thing!
Five foot eight, one-hundred fifty eight pounds and strong!
Girlfriend takes it all night long
Enter her temple and make her sing a song!
This feels like the real thing!
You lick my lips and then my clit
Girlfriend starts trembling,
She’s about to lose her shit!
This feels like the real thing
Bend me over, go for the gold! ...
So much so, it makes my heart Sing!
Girlfriend so wet, she starts to ring!
The absence of our lust still burns and stings!
This feels like the real thing!
Five foot eight, one-hundred fifty eight pounds and strong!
Girlfriend takes it all night long
Enter her temple and make her sing a song!
This feels like the real thing!
You lick my lips and then my clit
Girlfriend starts trembling,
She’s about to lose her shit!
This feels like the real thing
Bend me over, go for the gold! ...
#crush
#LookingForLove
#relationships
47 reads
2 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
Yesterday 4:26pm
Yesterday 4:26pm
Exist
Exist
The pages fall off the calendar
As the leaves go from green to red then gold
My existence has lost all meaning
Unless I exist in bed next to you
The softness of your skin draws me in
Makes me want to give my burning love to you
When you’re away my spirit decays
And it doesn’t return until I lay my eyes upon you
In between I just resist but I can’t exist alone
The pages fall off the calendar
As the leaves go from green to red then gold
My existence has lost all meaning
Unless I exist in bed next to you
The softness of your skin draws me in
Makes me want to give my burning love to you
When you’re away my spirit decays
And it doesn’t return until I lay my eyes upon you
In between I just resist but I can’t exist alone
#happiness
#love
#relationships #romantic
#relationships #romantic
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s0_obscen3
Poem Published
Yesterday 3:19pm
Yesterday 3:19pm
Quercitron yellow
A lot of people would become yellow
some are yellow
Quercitron yellow?
no just yellow like a flower or another bee
you...me?
Quercitron like the only rising sun
setting. just letting the moon pass by
two equal beings bringing meaning to one another
Quercitron yellow
for each other...
some are yellow
Quercitron yellow?
no just yellow like a flower or another bee
you...me?
Quercitron like the only rising sun
setting. just letting the moon pass by
two equal beings bringing meaning to one another
Quercitron yellow
for each other...
#admiration
#emotions
#hope
#kindness
#love
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AfterSexDilemma
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:49pm
Yesterday 1:49pm
Dirty Little Secret
I regret, not telling you I love you,
When you needed it.
I forget, I always needed you,
And I didn't see it.
I'm losing it; the one I see through.
That I reflect.
When you needed it.
I forget, I always needed you,
And I didn't see it.
I'm losing it; the one I see through.
That I reflect.
#love
#regret
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7 Comments
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