Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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destiny0716
Poem Published
Today 6:34pm
Today 6:34pm
My Muse
To set the sky on fire
I came, I sought, I conquered
Drawing ribbons in the sky
My signature
A masterpiece
Practiced with skill and precision
I galloped over Great Walls
And beheld ninth wonders
Only to be amazed at the existence of your presence
A constant stream of vitality
My life
Your life
Intertwined as one
I'm on one,
Ready for one
the One that'll make this journey worthy
I am Netanyah
Living and loving in oz
on my way to to that grand prize
Hall of faming in Caton
Crossing over Jordan ...
I came, I sought, I conquered
Drawing ribbons in the sky
My signature
A masterpiece
Practiced with skill and precision
I galloped over Great Walls
And beheld ninth wonders
Only to be amazed at the existence of your presence
A constant stream of vitality
My life
Your life
Intertwined as one
I'm on one,
Ready for one
the One that'll make this journey worthy
I am Netanyah
Living and loving in oz
on my way to to that grand prize
Hall of faming in Caton
Crossing over Jordan ...
#love
#strength
#hope
#marriage
#faith
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0 Comments
coralluna
Poem Published
Today 4:15pm
Today 4:15pm
The Purpose of Life
He that falls in love
will be blessed beyond measure;
For in this greatest challenge
also lies the greatest pleasure.
Amidst the many arguments
and hopeful compromises;
Faith and trust will slowly bloom,
As compassion fertilizes.
He that takes his time
will truly learn her heart;
How to appreciate and adore
Every small, imperfect part.
From the furrow in her forehead
to her lips that softly pout,
He will memorize each flawed line
And assuage her every doubt.
For he that falls in love ...
will be blessed beyond measure;
For in this greatest challenge
also lies the greatest pleasure.
Amidst the many arguments
and hopeful compromises;
Faith and trust will slowly bloom,
As compassion fertilizes.
He that takes his time
will truly learn her heart;
How to appreciate and adore
Every small, imperfect part.
From the furrow in her forehead
to her lips that softly pout,
He will memorize each flawed line
And assuage her every doubt.
For he that falls in love ...
#love
#hope
10 reads
0 Comments
JackFu
Poem Published
Today 3:19pm
Today 3:19pm
Try Again
I have lifted my eyes to the stars
and raised my arms
to reach for them
And touching one, wounded,
I turned not to ash
but melted instead
Poured into a cast
Removed and beaten sharp
and balanced, lightly, bending
Brightly gleaming
Blood is streaming
from my endless blade
Wiped away and placed
by hardened hands gently
lifting, kissing nothing
Save my lips in desperation
pressing ever pressing
left alone, but on display
Always looking, never touching,
tasting silence never...
and raised my arms
to reach for them
And touching one, wounded,
I turned not to ash
but melted instead
Poured into a cast
Removed and beaten sharp
and balanced, lightly, bending
Brightly gleaming
Blood is streaming
from my endless blade
Wiped away and placed
by hardened hands gently
lifting, kissing nothing
Save my lips in desperation
pressing ever pressing
left alone, but on display
Always looking, never touching,
tasting silence never...
#TimeHeals
#MovingOn
23 reads
2 Comments
Prems
Poem Published
Today 12:09pm
Today 12:09pm
Love is beautiful
Wherever you are, wherever you are,
Lying next to me on the banks of this river or,
Being beyond the seven seas or wonder, but,
I feel you sitting next to me,
Resting your head on my shoulder,
And holding hands together,
Whispering naughty talks to each other,
Oh dear, you are living inside me forever.
Lying next to me on the banks of this river or,
Being beyond the seven seas or wonder, but,
I feel you sitting next to me,
Resting your head on my shoulder,
And holding hands together,
Whispering naughty talks to each other,
Oh dear, you are living inside me forever.
#love
#hope
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0 Comments
Stoney223
melvin scott
melvin scott
Poem Published
Today 11:55am
Today 11:55am
RESURRECTED FROM LOVING YOU
As these very words screams from the mere depth of my mind it feels as if they are ripping my heart to shreds into tiny little pieces of broken glass that cant be mended, but yet as these words resonates deep within the chambers of my thoughts what resurfaces is the constant struggle to mend my broken heart, back together again after you broke it without even a care of the outcome of my heart nor my soul nor my mind.
...
...
#heartbroken
#breakup
#betrayal
#TimeHeals
#separation
20 reads
0 Comments
iamdaria
Poem Published
Today 11:34am
Today 11:34am
it’s all because of you
do you remember the first time the smoke escaped your lungs?
because i do
it’s all because of you
were you surprised when you saw me with a cigarette in my hand?
because i would be too
it’s all because of you
do you smoke two packs of cigarettes everyday?
because i do
it’s all because of you
because i do
it’s all because of you
were you surprised when you saw me with a cigarette in my hand?
because i would be too
it’s all because of you
do you smoke two packs of cigarettes everyday?
because i do
it’s all because of you
#heartbroken
#tobacco
#addiction
#emotional
#hurt
16 reads
2 Comments
AaHarvey
Poem Published
Today 10:09am
Today 10:09am
Kill a love
There are times when I feel like just leaving you alone,
But there are times I don’t want to be here all on my own;
But I know if we keep on, keep going on,
I can be right there with you when things go right
And when things go wrong.
I hang out with the losers and the freaks;
I love those people, they are just like me.
Why are you so cruel?
Why did you treat me like a fool?
Why do I care about anybody in this world?
I’m going to see you as a star and pick you apart;
I love you with all my heart, but to destroy...
But there are times I don’t want to be here all on my own;
But I know if we keep on, keep going on,
I can be right there with you when things go right
And when things go wrong.
I hang out with the losers and the freaks;
I love those people, they are just like me.
Why are you so cruel?
Why did you treat me like a fool?
Why do I care about anybody in this world?
I’m going to see you as a star and pick you apart;
I love you with all my heart, but to destroy...
#love
#relationships
#LifeStruggles
#LifeAsAWriter
#SelfReflection
15 reads
0 Comments
JohnnyBlaze
Poem Published
Today 1:45am
Today 1:45am
Universe House VIII
Blueprints
inked in my mind
and yet I still get lost in our
Universe House
The layout is hardly convoluted;
there are no architectural
delusions of grandeur
Room after room, rectangular -
it's rather simple, straightforward
verse
The main attraction is that
you're with me
and there's nowhere else
I'd rather be
inked in my mind
and yet I still get lost in our
Universe House
The layout is hardly convoluted;
there are no architectural
delusions of grandeur
Room after room, rectangular -
it's rather simple, straightforward
verse
The main attraction is that
you're with me
and there's nowhere else
I'd rather be
#love
#home
#universe
23 reads
5 Comments
iamdaria
Poem Published
Yesterday 00:08am
Yesterday 00:08am
he has two sides
he has two sides:
a blue-eyed boy i love
another one is darker
and hidden inside of him
he is a robber
he stole my heart
and a golden necklace
from his friend’s house
he is the best guy
that i’ve ever had
but something inside my head
tells me to run
i love him
more than anyone else
but he can’t show emotions
so he pays me off
my family likes him
as much as i do
his mother hates me saying
i have a bad influence on him
one day i want
to sell...
a blue-eyed boy i love
another one is darker
and hidden inside of him
he is a robber
he stole my heart
and a golden necklace
from his friend’s house
he is the best guy
that i’ve ever had
but something inside my head
tells me to run
i love him
more than anyone else
but he can’t show emotions
so he pays me off
my family likes him
as much as i do
his mother hates me saying
i have a bad influence on him
one day i want
to sell...
#love
#boyfriend
#lover #FallingInLove
#lover #FallingInLove
10 reads
0 Comments
iamdaria
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:05pm
Yesterday 11:05pm
I would have
i would have forgiven you
if you just had come to my door
saying you’re sorry
for what you had done
i would have forgiven you
if you hadn’t made me a fool
in front of your friends
when you said
you had missed me
i would have forgiven you
if you had got more courage
to say that you had used me
that night in your bed
i would have forgiven you
if you had acted like a person
who didn’t care
what other people would say
about you.
i would have forgiven you
but i won’t.
if you just had come to my door
saying you’re sorry
for what you had done
i would have forgiven you
if you hadn’t made me a fool
in front of your friends
when you said
you had missed me
i would have forgiven you
if you had got more courage
to say that you had used me
that night in your bed
i would have forgiven you
if you had acted like a person
who didn’t care
what other people would say
about you.
i would have forgiven you
but i won’t.
#love
#forgiveness
#heartbroken #emptiness
#heartbroken #emptiness
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AaHarvey
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:16pm
Yesterday 10:16pm
Flaw
All your beautiful flaws.
I am left crawling at your feet, begging, let me be yours.
Cynicism and pessimism; I see a beautiful prism,
Floating inside your galaxy eyes.
Bitter words choke realism;
I guess the party has to die.
Left behind to tell only lies.
I love the way your truly despise.
You are so apathetic and that’s to your credit;
You have nothing to hide behind.
They say miserable; I see incredible.
So credible, you do not speak their dull,
Repetitive slogans, no catch phrase needed.
No...
I am left crawling at your feet, begging, let me be yours.
Cynicism and pessimism; I see a beautiful prism,
Floating inside your galaxy eyes.
Bitter words choke realism;
I guess the party has to die.
Left behind to tell only lies.
I love the way your truly despise.
You are so apathetic and that’s to your credit;
You have nothing to hide behind.
They say miserable; I see incredible.
So credible, you do not speak their dull,
Repetitive slogans, no catch phrase needed.
No...
#love
#lover
#TruthOfLife
#metaphor
#apathy
19 reads
0 Comments
Stoney223
melvin scott
melvin scott
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:35pm
Yesterday 8:35pm
CREEPING IN THE DARKNESS
It has gotten so hard lately for me to even think straight since you walked out of my life and world without even speaking a word leaving me with just so many unanswered questions for the depth of my mind, for I though we were on the same page as far as what we wanted for our life and world together as one man to one woman but I see that you had other plans creeping deep within the darkness of our suppose to be lives as one.
...
...
#heartbroken
#breakup
#secrets
#betrayal
#separation
27 reads
3 Comments
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