Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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LillyValleyPoems
Poem Published
Today 6:17am
Today 6:17am
Wild Roses
Single bloomers deeply rooted in
Unique,
But not year round unlike,
Newly lovers kissing fingers
After love’s freshly minted prick
Red brushwork burns my feet
As I run,
Tilling the blood soil
Where my soul awaits for you
Limiting the range that our
Common compass can’t resist
As in your wanton whisper’s need to
Insist,
On resting profoundly pressed up
Against my rousing breath
Forever lip lingering
In the wild rose bed.
Unique,
But not year round unlike,
Newly lovers kissing fingers
After love’s freshly minted prick
Red brushwork burns my feet
As I run,
Tilling the blood soil
Where my soul awaits for you
Limiting the range that our
Common compass can’t resist
As in your wanton whisper’s need to
Insist,
On resting profoundly pressed up
Against my rousing breath
Forever lip lingering
In the wild rose bed.
#love
#strength
#inspirational #emotions
#inspirational #emotions
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Today 1:36am
Today 1:36am
lust becomes me
I'm in awe of you
let me tell you what I feel...
with an intellect razor sharp
masculine truths hold me accountable
in my need i crave
you growl, wait
I need
the boundaries are set and yes I know them
I test you to see if you are rigid
but you remain in control
and let me tell you I rattle most
discipline is given if I cross your soul
I am admonished to be honest with you
to tell you my honesties
I hurt in truth
my ache is real
I hunger for you
I taste you inside me
I...
let me tell you what I feel...
with an intellect razor sharp
masculine truths hold me accountable
in my need i crave
you growl, wait
I need
the boundaries are set and yes I know them
I test you to see if you are rigid
but you remain in control
and let me tell you I rattle most
discipline is given if I cross your soul
I am admonished to be honest with you
to tell you my honesties
I hurt in truth
my ache is real
I hunger for you
I taste you inside me
I...
#lust
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:23pm
Yesterday 8:23pm
breathe
find me in my solemn hours when I am most present
hurt has called upon me from the universes where I was wandering
I come back in need's regret
my son is fighting for his life
I will not relent I stand with him
warring the angels and demons who would collect him
he's not ready yet
so if you would allow a moment to breathe
this mother requests a favor
if needs be take my son home
suffer the doubt and welcome him in
I need to hear it from your mouth
it's time
weeps time, his life too short
I blame...
hurt has called upon me from the universes where I was wandering
I come back in need's regret
my son is fighting for his life
I will not relent I stand with him
warring the angels and demons who would collect him
he's not ready yet
so if you would allow a moment to breathe
this mother requests a favor
if needs be take my son home
suffer the doubt and welcome him in
I need to hear it from your mouth
it's time
weeps time, his life too short
I blame...
#love
#son
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12 Comments
Em-ily
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:40pm
Yesterday 6:40pm
My human father tried to teach me that if I thought I was myself I would
My human father would try to teach me that if I thought I was myself I failed
#love
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Carnal
Poem Published
Yesterday 2:29pm
Yesterday 2:29pm
Pulchritudinous
Hello Luv, I’ve been up all night in agonizing pain. Imagination creating vivid imagerys overwhelming my sensory capacity.
I wish you were laying me in our nakedness, feeling the heat of your skin to comfort me in
deafening silence.
So many times I crave you and I don’t know how to express that because you tend to deflect certain things and feelings.
So many times I crave your touch, voice, energy I go mad in depression because you’re not accessible.
I want you so much physically especially now that I’m in discomfort. Just carnal cravings...
I wish you were laying me in our nakedness, feeling the heat of your skin to comfort me in
deafening silence.
So many times I crave you and I don’t know how to express that because you tend to deflect certain things and feelings.
So many times I crave your touch, voice, energy I go mad in depression because you’re not accessible.
I want you so much physically especially now that I’m in discomfort. Just carnal cravings...
#lover
#sensual
#temptation
#passion
#seductive
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Thesilverymoon
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:36am
Yesterday 6:36am
2am
It’s 2am
I’m here at your door
About to knock
Not yet
If you would just let me in
I can explain
this random behaviour
Just let me begin
All that I want
is to lie with you, where lucid dreams unveil
Those long forgotten memories
Of fresh and breezy days
What would it take
To bring you closer
A lifetime of snapshots
And six thousand tears
Now everything’s changed
You have forgotten
But I remember
Deeply etched imprints
You forged on my mind
A welcome...
I’m here at your door
About to knock
Not yet
If you would just let me in
I can explain
this random behaviour
Just let me begin
All that I want
is to lie with you, where lucid dreams unveil
Those long forgotten memories
Of fresh and breezy days
What would it take
To bring you closer
A lifetime of snapshots
And six thousand tears
Now everything’s changed
You have forgotten
But I remember
Deeply etched imprints
You forged on my mind
A welcome...
#night
#lover
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smackdownraven
Poem Published
Yesterday 3:28am
Yesterday 3:28am
illusion
I don't know where to turn
I feel you don't love me anymore
maybe I disappointed
perhaps I wasn't the illusion you fantasized
the reality of me hitting hard
I never expected you to look my way
when you did my soul glow
I was in love with you completely
to know you noticed made my heart swell
dandelions in the summer wind
a beautiful revelation
now I think I've lost you
you were only mine in the moment
then when it was gone
I lost a part of myself forever
I feel you don't love me anymore
maybe I disappointed
perhaps I wasn't the illusion you fantasized
the reality of me hitting hard
I never expected you to look my way
when you did my soul glow
I was in love with you completely
to know you noticed made my heart swell
dandelions in the summer wind
a beautiful revelation
now I think I've lost you
you were only mine in the moment
then when it was gone
I lost a part of myself forever
#love
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ImperfectedStone
The Gardener
The Gardener
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:39am
Yesterday 1:39am
Sting
The body doesn't reject a finger
because once it didn't do as it should,
nor twice, nor thrice, nor countless times.
She does not
spill bones into streets
for not performing
in adequate measure. Often
when something breaks,
or fails to perform
we tenderly coerce it back to movement,
we drain out ideas of failure
and linger with it longer
nursing the strength
back into its form.
I took what you said
when you said it
where you said it
with great bitterness,
that I was a nurse,
that no one should ...
because once it didn't do as it should,
nor twice, nor thrice, nor countless times.
She does not
spill bones into streets
for not performing
in adequate measure. Often
when something breaks,
or fails to perform
we tenderly coerce it back to movement,
we drain out ideas of failure
and linger with it longer
nursing the strength
back into its form.
I took what you said
when you said it
where you said it
with great bitterness,
that I was a nurse,
that no one should ...
#hope
#identity
#fire
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smackdownraven
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:37am
Yesterday 1:37am
rules of engagement
god, I'm hurting
I want to tell you I love you
but it's against the rules
we don't do that
it's inconsiderate to be so forward
I know you love me
you've told me so
but you don't want those words from me
perhaps it would hurt too much
I'm taken and I wouldn't fit in your world
you like sampling my world
but you don't want to cross over
into the madness that is me
so I keen in the dark
I weep I'm not enough
I cry I'm too much
it hurts down deep
my lips whisper I love you
I'm...
I want to tell you I love you
but it's against the rules
we don't do that
it's inconsiderate to be so forward
I know you love me
you've told me so
but you don't want those words from me
perhaps it would hurt too much
I'm taken and I wouldn't fit in your world
you like sampling my world
but you don't want to cross over
into the madness that is me
so I keen in the dark
I weep I'm not enough
I cry I'm too much
it hurts down deep
my lips whisper I love you
I'm...
#love
#ILoveYou
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Yesterday 00:41am
Yesterday 00:41am
yours
I don't know where I'm going
or quite who I am
I wait in the shadows patiently
for you to discover me
and uncover my soul shaded with pain
glorious colors of red
in my need I am freed
in my desire bound
for the want of you I put away pride
in my sanctum is my greed
it longs for your touch
deep within my hollow spaces
I ache to be known by you
a woman of hope
I cultivate the fantasy of you and I
allowing it to grow
though I doubt deep down
that you would see me true
bring me to...
or quite who I am
I wait in the shadows patiently
for you to discover me
and uncover my soul shaded with pain
glorious colors of red
in my need I am freed
in my desire bound
for the want of you I put away pride
in my sanctum is my greed
it longs for your touch
deep within my hollow spaces
I ache to be known by you
a woman of hope
I cultivate the fantasy of you and I
allowing it to grow
though I doubt deep down
that you would see me true
bring me to...
#lust
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13 Comments
AverageJoe
Poem Published
Yesterday 00:14am
Yesterday 00:14am
Seldom So
I am lost in soft shadows you can't understand
Deep in the warmth of you who burns, so young
On the edges as others crowd in
Stand I
Lost in you and to you
Jasmine breeze, the stars are different in your night
And love is not a word
As I breathe
Its both hope and dream
I saw in you today, forever
And could not speak
Though sounds spilled and lied of other things
Lost was the truth of my eyes
Who looked away
For you were too near
And who was I among so many
As shadows fell, melting before your...
Deep in the warmth of you who burns, so young
On the edges as others crowd in
Stand I
Lost in you and to you
Jasmine breeze, the stars are different in your night
And love is not a word
As I breathe
Its both hope and dream
I saw in you today, forever
And could not speak
Though sounds spilled and lied of other things
Lost was the truth of my eyes
Who looked away
For you were too near
And who was I among so many
As shadows fell, melting before your...
#love
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saint_gw
Gregory
Gregory
Poem Published
2nd Dec 2022 4:00pm
2nd Dec 2022 4:00pm
Marry Go Round
We’re here again already Love
our marry go round is turning
Three laps so far my Dove
and I’m still only learning
We dance a circle around a star
our marry go round still turning
We’ve come so very very far
around this fire ever burning
Let us never stop these trips
our marry go round goes round
I’ll keep your name upon my lips
and hope that you enjoy the sound
Happy Anniversary Ann Marie.
our marry go round is turning
Three laps so far my Dove
and I’m still only learning
We dance a circle around a star
our marry go round still turning
We’ve come so very very far
around this fire ever burning
Let us never stop these trips
our marry go round goes round
I’ll keep your name upon my lips
and hope that you enjoy the sound
Happy Anniversary Ann Marie.
#marriage
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