Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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OG-Poetry
Poem Published
Today 5:36pm
Today 5:36pm
Scream
It is a nightmare,
but not in a dream,
high drama to bare,
like a movie scene,
rip an
another tear,
on a bandaged wing,
I don’t dare
not to care,
now I see the ring,
this teardrop I had to share..
I just want to SCREAM.
but not in a dream,
high drama to bare,
like a movie scene,
rip an
another tear,
on a bandaged wing,
I don’t dare
not to care,
now I see the ring,
this teardrop I had to share..
I just want to SCREAM.
#heartbroken
#breakup
#separation
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EdibleWords
Poem Published
Today 3:39pm
Today 3:39pm
The Other “Parent Trap”
Kids are so diabolical
so offensively clever
duplicitous
meaningfully manipulating
and terribly
awfully
right when they are
wrong
That I sit here writing
about an event
a prank
so rare-eclipse
apocalypse
They didn’t start it
but damn if they didn’t
finish it
I was taken on a trip
of mind and body
away from everything
they ever hated
about awkward love
and entrenched
resentment ...
so offensively clever
duplicitous
meaningfully manipulating
and terribly
awfully
right when they are
wrong
That I sit here writing
about an event
a prank
so rare-eclipse
apocalypse
They didn’t start it
but damn if they didn’t
finish it
I was taken on a trip
of mind and body
away from everything
they ever hated
about awkward love
and entrenched
resentment ...
#love
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Kdog112
Poem Published
Today 2:56pm
Today 2:56pm
The Fight for My Wife
my dearest love the night I first met you, you took my breath away and made my heart skip a beat. Yes as cleaqueic as it is it truely was love at first sight. You were the woman of my dreams and the love of my life. Then I deployed to the war which I just was not mentally ready for. I was shot at twice which barely missed and that got me pissed,but I survived then I sawa friend get decapitated after his truck was hit by an IED. Later that monthI sawthe bodies of two of my best friends who were burned alive after their truck was struck by an IED and as their bodies were pulled from the truck...
#ImSorry
#heartbroken
#conflict
#betrayal
#disappointment
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Seed
Poem Published
Today 2:01pm
Today 2:01pm
Luck - Fate - Chance - Life
After a while relationships run their course
Love, like a car, runs out of fuel
The empty light comes on
To let us know
It's over
First the feelings, then the memories
Begin to fade
But I wanted a chance
Just to see her
If I could
One in a million, just maybe
She would be out working in her garden,
Walking her dog,
Standing in the yard talking to her neighbor,
Checking the mail
A chance to see her
From a distance,
But all was still, there was
No sign of life
As I drove slowly past the house ...
Love, like a car, runs out of fuel
The empty light comes on
To let us know
It's over
First the feelings, then the memories
Begin to fade
But I wanted a chance
Just to see her
If I could
One in a million, just maybe
She would be out working in her garden,
Walking her dog,
Standing in the yard talking to her neighbor,
Checking the mail
A chance to see her
From a distance,
But all was still, there was
No sign of life
As I drove slowly past the house ...
#sadness
#love
#heartbroken
#breakup
#LifeStruggles
13 reads
1 Comment
BlueBeastGirl
Poem Published
Today 11:36am
Today 11:36am
Never Say GoodBye
She doesn't say goodbye
It's something her family taught her
That Goodbyes are said only when
You're okay with never seeing them again
Her Grandma once said that goodbyes
Are like closing the doors to people
Ending an encounter with...
"see you" or "talk to you soon" or "later"
Are all like leaving the door open
It's cementing the fact you want
To see them again in future
Goodbyes are permanent...
Goodbyes feel so very final
When people say goodbye to her
She has to remind herself
That not everyone is raised like...
It's something her family taught her
That Goodbyes are said only when
You're okay with never seeing them again
Her Grandma once said that goodbyes
Are like closing the doors to people
Ending an encounter with...
"see you" or "talk to you soon" or "later"
Are all like leaving the door open
It's cementing the fact you want
To see them again in future
Goodbyes are permanent...
Goodbyes feel so very final
When people say goodbye to her
She has to remind herself
That not everyone is raised like...
#rejection
#spiritual
#PTSD
#curse
#tradition
13 reads
2 Comments
annihilateme
Poem Published
Today 9:40am
Today 9:40am
(WALKING IN TWO WORLDS)
#love
#strength
#courage
#respect
#emotions
19 reads
2 Comments
Indie
Miss Indie
Miss Indie
Poem Published
Today 9:33am
Today 9:33am
small magics
You smile like the world will never end
like this moment is the only moment
worth living for
and some days for me
it is
(C) Indie Adams 2020
like this moment is the only moment
worth living for
and some days for me
it is
(C) Indie Adams 2020
#love
#depression
#children
#motherhood
#family
18 reads
1 Comment
cabcool
Poem Published
Today 7:15am
Today 7:15am
prelude to an evening kiss
and when the sun
had inked the fountain
till he was done
painting the mountain,
the skies ablaze
were filled with praise.
eavesdropping birds
feathered the stillness,
bereft of words
for eve’s tranquilness;
i sat alone,
my baritone
ripe with a song
to tease my lover.
the wait is long,
yet must i prove her—
lips so much wine
i must make mine.
here come her feet,
drinking my music,
every heartbeat
a bold acoustic.
the hour is ripe:
love’s...
had inked the fountain
till he was done
painting the mountain,
the skies ablaze
were filled with praise.
eavesdropping birds
feathered the stillness,
bereft of words
for eve’s tranquilness;
i sat alone,
my baritone
ripe with a song
to tease my lover.
the wait is long,
yet must i prove her—
lips so much wine
i must make mine.
here come her feet,
drinking my music,
every heartbeat
a bold acoustic.
the hour is ripe:
love’s...
#romantic
#FallingInLove
#UnrequitedLove
17 reads
2 Comments
SatInUGal
Kumar
Kumar
Poem Published
Today 4:52am
Today 4:52am
THE FLIRT
You know the flirt
Is a good one
If you feel guided
By the invisible hand
Of the muse
Designer of love
Enabler of passion
Dispenser of devotion
And devastation
Is a good one
If you feel guided
By the invisible hand
Of the muse
Designer of love
Enabler of passion
Dispenser of devotion
And devastation
#lust
#MyInspiration
#LifeCycle
27 reads
6 Comments
annihilateme
Poem Published
Yesterday 9:41pm
Yesterday 9:41pm
(RUMINATING)
#love
#strength
#hope
#respect
#emotions
27 reads
0 Comments
joeborg
Poem Published
Yesterday 9:56am
Yesterday 9:56am
feverish
Today they turned of a shop
I had the fever had to stop,
I’ quite sure about the cause
Not because of virus flaws,
My head feels up in the cloud
And got dizzy from profound,
A bit light head a bit convulse
I might even miss a pulse,
It is due to all this crush
U all day feeling the blush,
My blood pressure got so high
Now the cuase I can’t deny,
I keep looking at that face
In that beauty full of grace,
Blood in boil that gives me sweat
I can’t get you off my head.
I had the fever had to stop,
I’ quite sure about the cause
Not because of virus flaws,
My head feels up in the cloud
And got dizzy from profound,
A bit light head a bit convulse
I might even miss a pulse,
It is due to all this crush
U all day feeling the blush,
My blood pressure got so high
Now the cuase I can’t deny,
I keep looking at that face
In that beauty full of grace,
Blood in boil that gives me sweat
I can’t get you off my head.
#lust
#girlfriend
#lover
#crush
#passion
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ManorMyth
Man_Or_Myth
Man_Or_Myth
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:44am
Yesterday 8:44am
Non existent existence
How can I call this an existence without you near me.
Never knowing the gentle carcass of your touch across my face
Never having the chance to hold you in a loving embrace.
Has my heart racing from just the thought,
Of you and I being worlds apart.
Yet, growing closer from your looks and words
That quietly penetrate my mind day in and day out.
But still loud enough to force it’s way pass this impenetrable wall placed around my heart.
How can I call this an existence
Knowing that the days seem longer
As I count...
Never knowing the gentle carcass of your touch across my face
Never having the chance to hold you in a loving embrace.
Has my heart racing from just the thought,
Of you and I being worlds apart.
Yet, growing closer from your looks and words
That quietly penetrate my mind day in and day out.
But still loud enough to force it’s way pass this impenetrable wall placed around my heart.
How can I call this an existence
Knowing that the days seem longer
As I count...
#love
#WritersBlock
#LongDistanceRelationship
#crush
#passion
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