Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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joeborg
Poem Published
Today 10:03am
Today 10:03am
my private star
The sun has extra hot and shine
Enough to boil our head’s brine,
It lightens up all of our space
With a slow and steady pace,
I need a sun to call my own
And keep its shine into my zone,
Needs its shine upon my paths
Not to walk in other’s Spats,
I want its shine all for myself
So in its rays I’ll bathe and delve,
I want to have this sun as mine
So in it I’ll thrive and twine,
Like a fly I will get lured
To its brightness and get burned.
Enough to boil our head’s brine,
It lightens up all of our space
With a slow and steady pace,
I need a sun to call my own
And keep its shine into my zone,
Needs its shine upon my paths
Not to walk in other’s Spats,
I want its shine all for myself
So in its rays I’ll bathe and delve,
I want to have this sun as mine
So in it I’ll thrive and twine,
Like a fly I will get lured
To its brightness and get burned.
#girlfriend
#sensual
#crush #passion
#crush #passion
3 reads
1 Comment
Driqwright1490
Poem Published
Today 3:27am
Today 3:27am
I can't give you the world
I can't give you the world: I can't give you the world, because over the years this world turned evil, lustful, and corrupted. All due to money. I can't give you something that you don't need. This world done turned upside down there are a bunch of undeserved and ungrateful people on this earth looking for good people like you and me baby. You have to keep your guard and watch the people you communicate with. The love of money is the root of all evil I mean yea you want it to pay bills and to take care of your responsibilities, but to try to live a lavish lifestyle living above your meanings...
#love
#LifeStruggles
29 reads
0 Comments
bandit
Poem Published
Today 2:54am
Today 2:54am
Only one girl
Only one girl have I feel in love
the first time a seen her
across that dance hall table
perfect in every way
the perfect girl I dreamed
petite was never my thing
overly robust was the same
full bodied was perfect to me
black hair dark eyes full bodied
not on most guys radar
that is no surprise
in those Farrah Fawcett days
her beauty was my concern
would she dance with me
I am just a plain simple farmer
what would she want me
growing up I was taught
it never hurts to ask
unless she turns...
the first time a seen her
across that dance hall table
perfect in every way
the perfect girl I dreamed
petite was never my thing
overly robust was the same
full bodied was perfect to me
black hair dark eyes full bodied
not on most guys radar
that is no surprise
in those Farrah Fawcett days
her beauty was my concern
would she dance with me
I am just a plain simple farmer
what would she want me
growing up I was taught
it never hurts to ask
unless she turns...
#courage
#romantic
#FallingInLove
#gratitude
#FirstLove
9 reads
2 Comments
ClearmindedVillain
Poem Published
Today 2:40am
Today 2:40am
She Talks Through Me Like The Feeling Of Summer
Air becomes so fresh as you speak.
I pay attention but your words shatter within me.
I take your word serious.
So smooth the feeling checks in good.
Always.
Every time.
People wonder why the vibes strike so strong.
Awaiting a label they persist with interrogations.
Is it possible to ignore the moments that you feel?
Good.
I pay attention but your words shatter within me.
I take your word serious.
So smooth the feeling checks in good.
Always.
Every time.
People wonder why the vibes strike so strong.
Awaiting a label they persist with interrogations.
Is it possible to ignore the moments that you feel?
Good.
#relationships
#FallingInLove
#dating #LookingForLove
#dating #LookingForLove
11 reads
1 Comment
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Today 2:26am
Today 2:26am
Mister
I hold onto each note climbing higher and higher
each bar and rift getting me closer into the arms of my lover
who are you mister?
have we met somewhere before?
darkness embrace
a dark kiss
then memories flood me
are they mine or his?
a hiss a moan
deeper into me he pushes
until I unfurl
night's passion on the tip of my tongue
witches bane an arrogant man
who sees through my facade
into my folly he falls willingly
casting for fate
eyelashes cast downward
a shy glance...
each bar and rift getting me closer into the arms of my lover
who are you mister?
have we met somewhere before?
darkness embrace
a dark kiss
then memories flood me
are they mine or his?
a hiss a moan
deeper into me he pushes
until I unfurl
night's passion on the tip of my tongue
witches bane an arrogant man
who sees through my facade
into my folly he falls willingly
casting for fate
eyelashes cast downward
a shy glance...
#love
14 reads
2 Comments
XiaoLong
Poem Published
Yesterday 00:39am
Yesterday 00:39am
Sweet Turkish Delight
her embrace, it’s exciting
it’s got my heat beating
not just quite, it was pounding
her passion was truly resounding
she’s in my arm, she’s charming
her thin eye lining, it’s accentuating
curled lashes rolling, she’s dreaming
deep dark eyes gazing, she’s a darling
bumble we met, I’d still call it fate
surely she’s a wonderful soulmate
sparkle in her eyes is shining bright
I’m going to be with her, not just tonight
a beauty in my arms, she’s a charm
my rapid fire heartbeat, it’s an alarm
she rests her...
it’s got my heat beating
not just quite, it was pounding
her passion was truly resounding
she’s in my arm, she’s charming
her thin eye lining, it’s accentuating
curled lashes rolling, she’s dreaming
deep dark eyes gazing, she’s a darling
bumble we met, I’d still call it fate
surely she’s a wonderful soulmate
sparkle in her eyes is shining bright
I’m going to be with her, not just tonight
a beauty in my arms, she’s a charm
my rapid fire heartbeat, it’s an alarm
she rests her...
#love
#girlfriend
#lover
#sensual
#passion
12 reads
1 Comment
Quizzy29
Tanzo Ellis
Tanzo Ellis
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:43pm
Yesterday 11:43pm
My fault not to be determined
I seemed to always be the one to lose my temper first.
You never seemed to pay attention to my actions more than my words.
Apparently, I was the one who needed a lesson in patience.
You watched as I cried through my emotions.
I needed your stability with no credibility.
You ignored my attempts, & played with my fears.
I became unrecognizable standing in front of you.
(Mis-understanding)
You never seemed to pay attention to my actions more than my words.
Apparently, I was the one who needed a lesson in patience.
You watched as I cried through my emotions.
I needed your stability with no credibility.
You ignored my attempts, & played with my fears.
I became unrecognizable standing in front of you.
(Mis-understanding)
#strength
#patience
#wisdom #tolerance
#wisdom #tolerance
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Gentle
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:37pm
Yesterday 10:37pm
Love I dreamt
On the flat end of the mountain tip
(Where ever this is, my heart did sail)
Where sun and rain sign a peace slip
Stands a love that will never fail
Beauty and brain and together stay
Tender and caring and never stray
A queen who loves more or just same
Respecting all, and the most high
Whose imperfection is just a name
In love's flame then, here we will die
Hush! wake me not from what I caught!
For in the real, I know it not
(Where ever this is, my heart did sail)
Where sun and rain sign a peace slip
Stands a love that will never fail
Beauty and brain and together stay
Tender and caring and never stray
A queen who loves more or just same
Respecting all, and the most high
Whose imperfection is just a name
In love's flame then, here we will die
Hush! wake me not from what I caught!
For in the real, I know it not
#love
#admiration
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Bon_Mot
Poem Published
Yesterday 2:59pm
Yesterday 2:59pm
in cool linens.
rapt in cool linens
cauterized kissing
after elastic lust
and non-versation
we clutch and
churn unjustified love
before the tilt of sleep
and
before our attenuated
forgettings.
tedefroberts©2018
from love etc.
cauterized kissing
after elastic lust
and non-versation
we clutch and
churn unjustified love
before the tilt of sleep
and
before our attenuated
forgettings.
tedefroberts©2018
from love etc.
#love
#lover
12 reads
4 Comments
bandit
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:29pm
Yesterday 1:29pm
made up for lost time
the night we were introduce
I've wrote poems about
how I felt about you
how fare out of my league you were
the beauty in your dark eyes
and the sparkled like the midnight sky
how I never met anyone like you
most of all I feel in love with you
these are things I've wrote in rhyme
in different ways over time
there is only so many way to write
I didn't think there would be another night
the celebration of our fist night
I wasn't wrong but wasn't right
that night was the first love high
one would think our first...
I've wrote poems about
how I felt about you
how fare out of my league you were
the beauty in your dark eyes
and the sparkled like the midnight sky
how I never met anyone like you
most of all I feel in love with you
these are things I've wrote in rhyme
in different ways over time
there is only so many way to write
I didn't think there would be another night
the celebration of our fist night
I wasn't wrong but wasn't right
that night was the first love high
one would think our first...
#forgiveness
#romantic
#beauty
#FallingInLove
#FirstLove
14 reads
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averageJoe69
Ron Summers
Ron Summers
Poem Published
Yesterday 9:02am
Yesterday 9:02am
Crumbles
#love
#heartbroken
#hurt
18 reads
2 Comments
Alan-S-Jeeves
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:58am
Yesterday 8:58am
I Should O' Known (All Along)
Were I wise I should o' known
To steer a leery course;
And felt the tumult wind had blown
Its tempest of remorse.
But I was given to the sound
That echoed through my head
And tumbled in there, round and round,
The first sweet words she'd said.
She told me all the world was ours
Until our days may end;
Boundless love that never sours
Nor can the years amend.
She said she ever would be true
And by my side she'd stay
But now her words are scant and few ~
My love has went away.
So, as I drift into the...
To steer a leery course;
And felt the tumult wind had blown
Its tempest of remorse.
But I was given to the sound
That echoed through my head
And tumbled in there, round and round,
The first sweet words she'd said.
She told me all the world was ours
Until our days may end;
Boundless love that never sours
Nor can the years amend.
She said she ever would be true
And by my side she'd stay
But now her words are scant and few ~
My love has went away.
So, as I drift into the...
#sadness
#regret
#rejection
#heartbroken
#disappointment
7 reads
2 Comments
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