Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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runaway-mindtrain
Poem Published
Today 6:40pm
Today 6:40pm
Her loving smile
She gently wakes me up
Kisses and hugs me tight
My babe of the morning
My angel of the night,
I can see the eternal warming
As sweet fire in her eyes
We ran all night in our dreams
Then walking the water stream
Of the world, we now flow,
My heart now completes
Her heart from the beginning
Our union of souls ignites
This new star in flight...
Kisses and hugs me tight
My babe of the morning
My angel of the night,
I can see the eternal warming
As sweet fire in her eyes
We ran all night in our dreams
Then walking the water stream
Of the world, we now flow,
My heart now completes
Her heart from the beginning
Our union of souls ignites
This new star in flight...
#girlfriend
#romantic
#ILoveYou
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Rjm
Poem Published
Today 6:28pm
Today 6:28pm
Before you
You are a beautiful disease
Infecting my deepest dreams
Leaving me weak and fevered
You are an intoxicating poison
Sapping and confusing me
Leaving me begging for more
You are an unnamed feeling
New and foreign to me
Leaving me afraid of normality
You are a wanted parasite
Fuelling lust whilst feeding off it
Leaving me perpetually aroused
You are a perfect nightmare
Scaring me with these feelings
Leaving me terrified of waking
You are a rapturous curse
Vexing me at every turn ...
Infecting my deepest dreams
Leaving me weak and fevered
You are an intoxicating poison
Sapping and confusing me
Leaving me begging for more
You are an unnamed feeling
New and foreign to me
Leaving me afraid of normality
You are a wanted parasite
Fuelling lust whilst feeding off it
Leaving me perpetually aroused
You are a perfect nightmare
Scaring me with these feelings
Leaving me terrified of waking
You are a rapturous curse
Vexing me at every turn ...
#love
#lust
#dreams #nightmares
#dreams #nightmares
23 reads
7 Comments
Tallen
Poem Published
Today 6:15pm
Today 6:15pm
Precious Smile
a smile
any of I’ve chosen, until ----
infects and thrills
hearts leaping o’er
mountain tops
over glades and hills.
a glimpse of smile
laughter
causes elation
again and again.
lusting for what comes after
I want to understand.
the voice
of my friend
so gentle, so free
throughout my mind it rings
ringing of sensuality!
her smile gives me no time of day
an option to flirt?
reflecting, what can I do but
smile?
her smile
causes my insides to leap
flooding my...
any of I’ve chosen, until ----
infects and thrills
hearts leaping o’er
mountain tops
over glades and hills.
a glimpse of smile
laughter
causes elation
again and again.
lusting for what comes after
I want to understand.
the voice
of my friend
so gentle, so free
throughout my mind it rings
ringing of sensuality!
her smile gives me no time of day
an option to flirt?
reflecting, what can I do but
smile?
her smile
causes my insides to leap
flooding my...
#love
#friendship
#UnrequitedLove
20 reads
13 Comments
MindOfAPohett
Poem Published
Today 5:58pm
Today 5:58pm
L O V E
I ceased trust with that slut many years ago.
Searchin for that bitch so damn long.
Fucked around and became hoe.
See, BAD love will leave ya heart cold
GOOD love make you feel shy and uncomfortable.
If two wrongs dont make a right, WHY we keep Searchin tho?
I rite my words in RED ink just to show.
Even tho its blood, they too can be schemin, plotin, bobby-pin'in locks to sneak thru ya front door.
LOOK Y'ALL I AIN'T TRYINA START WAR!
Buhht LOVE?
Blinded me nd hurt me to my core.
Shit! my motha'fuckin body sore.
Cause even tho i...
Searchin for that bitch so damn long.
Fucked around and became hoe.
See, BAD love will leave ya heart cold
GOOD love make you feel shy and uncomfortable.
If two wrongs dont make a right, WHY we keep Searchin tho?
I rite my words in RED ink just to show.
Even tho its blood, they too can be schemin, plotin, bobby-pin'in locks to sneak thru ya front door.
LOOK Y'ALL I AIN'T TRYINA START WAR!
Buhht LOVE?
Blinded me nd hurt me to my core.
Shit! my motha'fuckin body sore.
Cause even tho i...
#love
#breakup
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0 Comments
Tardegrade
Poem Published
Today 5:12pm
Today 5:12pm
The Lovers
In the morning when She wakes,
She spreads her love o'er lands and lakes
And as She rises from her bed
She shines her grace on every head
She strolls serene across the lands
Forests, fields, and desert sands
And when She tires and turns to bed
Her Lover rises in Her stead
Up stares through darkness, as She sleeps
Her Sentinel in silver creeps
He holds his vigil through the night
In reverent reflection of her light
And dreams of moments on her lips
That even love cannot eclipse.
She spreads her love o'er lands and lakes
And as She rises from her bed
She shines her grace on every head
She strolls serene across the lands
Forests, fields, and desert sands
And when She tires and turns to bed
Her Lover rises in Her stead
Up stares through darkness, as She sleeps
Her Sentinel in silver creeps
He holds his vigil through the night
In reverent reflection of her light
And dreams of moments on her lips
That even love cannot eclipse.
#love
#sun
#moon
#night
#lover
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1 Comment
Lyrically_Inclined
Poem Published
Today 2:40pm
Today 2:40pm
Romantic
Have you ever been made love to?
Looked in the eyes
and made to believe
someone truly loves you?
Your body to be understood
like it was made to?
Not simply fucked
but first freaked
your mental?
Have you ever had a man romance you?
Body navigated,
made to dance in the bedroom?
Given a second chance,
after you first played the fool?
He didn’t rush in for the sex
he took the time
to get to know you?
I won’t let you get ahead of yourself boo
Slow you down,
take my time
cause you’re special ...
Looked in the eyes
and made to believe
someone truly loves you?
Your body to be understood
like it was made to?
Not simply fucked
but first freaked
your mental?
Have you ever had a man romance you?
Body navigated,
made to dance in the bedroom?
Given a second chance,
after you first played the fool?
He didn’t rush in for the sex
he took the time
to get to know you?
I won’t let you get ahead of yourself boo
Slow you down,
take my time
cause you’re special ...
#happiness
#love
#relationships
#romantic
#FallingInLove
39 reads
8 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Today 2:03pm
Today 2:03pm
soul colors
the day bled her colors...
until they blend with mine
in stark contrast she is vivid
while I am pastel in nature
my feelings are washed out
hers bold with emotion
together we harmonize
she fills my emptiness
I tone down her zealous proclamations
a symphony of high and low notes
we dance a ballet of oneness
into the dark, she enters
with a light, I can barely comprehend
she understands the depths of it
my quiet pain is at home in her ozone
...
until they blend with mine
in stark contrast she is vivid
while I am pastel in nature
my feelings are washed out
hers bold with emotion
together we harmonize
she fills my emptiness
I tone down her zealous proclamations
a symphony of high and low notes
we dance a ballet of oneness
into the dark, she enters
with a light, I can barely comprehend
she understands the depths of it
my quiet pain is at home in her ozone
...
#love
#beauty
51 reads
13 Comments
llonzeyy
Rex tabu
Rex tabu
Poem Published
Today 10:15am
Today 10:15am
love is my superstition
everybody wants love,
but its just pretend,
im playing possum,
on the drugs,
Im waiting for the end,
They tell me im no good
put me in the system
knock on wood
keep away from all the
superstitions
but its just pretend,
im playing possum,
on the drugs,
Im waiting for the end,
They tell me im no good
put me in the system
knock on wood
keep away from all the
superstitions
#love
15 reads
0 Comments
Tallen
Poem Published
Today 6:08am
Today 6:08am
Summer Semester, 1993
( Gee wiz )
I have noticed You
I truly have
But I don’t / do want you
It’s poor timing;
but I do / don’t want you
dark clouds – silver lining
Gee wiz.
Short of
over-aggressive being
I sense that I’m the quarry. . .
in class you came to sit by me
the start of a feely fairy tale.
Gee wiz.
You gave your # last night
told me your name, Liz;
I reciprocated in like
(I don’t / do want You)
Wow and Gee wiz.
Who is supposed to call first?
I do / don’t...
I have noticed You
I truly have
But I don’t / do want you
It’s poor timing;
but I do / don’t want you
dark clouds – silver lining
Gee wiz.
Short of
over-aggressive being
I sense that I’m the quarry. . .
in class you came to sit by me
the start of a feely fairy tale.
Gee wiz.
You gave your # last night
told me your name, Liz;
I reciprocated in like
(I don’t / do want You)
Wow and Gee wiz.
Who is supposed to call first?
I do / don’t...
#relationships
#romantic
#friendship #lover
#friendship #lover
27 reads
4 Comments
theEgoEffect
Barona
Barona
Poem Published
Today 5:44am
Today 5:44am
masks of stone
I wish that I had known
what you felt in your bones
as your battles left you on tip toes
along the edge of the unknown -
and now you're alone
I wish that you had known
what it was you meant to me
can we go out to sea
to watch the stars in the waves
display the world
below & above graves
so you see you're not alone
face me entirely
no one deserves to feel lonely
face me wholeheartedly
so we can be kids again, boldly
skateboarding & learning songs
merry momentarily -
I should have known...
what you felt in your bones
as your battles left you on tip toes
along the edge of the unknown -
and now you're alone
I wish that you had known
what it was you meant to me
can we go out to sea
to watch the stars in the waves
display the world
below & above graves
so you see you're not alone
face me entirely
no one deserves to feel lonely
face me wholeheartedly
so we can be kids again, boldly
skateboarding & learning songs
merry momentarily -
I should have known...
#love
#regret
#hope
#dark
#despair
34 reads
11 Comments
HaiItsMo
Mo
Mo
Poem Published
Today 3:48am
Today 3:48am
Dreams
In my dreams sometimes you are a ghost
Watching me wander around my empty corridors
Looking for company whilst you sit there
Invisible.
White.
In my dreams sometimes you are a shadow
Following me through life
Watching me run in circles around you.
Black.
In my dreams sometimes you are hers.
Clinging to her like your last breath.
As I bleed my blood into this page wishing
Wanting.
Waiting for you to be mine again.
But in this dream you are mine.
Holding me in your arms.
I see you staring at me with...
Watching me wander around my empty corridors
Looking for company whilst you sit there
Invisible.
White.
In my dreams sometimes you are a shadow
Following me through life
Watching me run in circles around you.
Black.
In my dreams sometimes you are hers.
Clinging to her like your last breath.
As I bleed my blood into this page wishing
Wanting.
Waiting for you to be mine again.
But in this dream you are mine.
Holding me in your arms.
I see you staring at me with...
#heartbroken
#UnrequitedLove
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0 Comments
legz
Poem Published
Today 2:25am
Today 2:25am
Coffee
Warm water,
Cold coffee,
Tell me now,
Do you love me?
Cold winter,
Warm coffee,
Tell me now,
Do you love me?
Cold coffee,
Tell me now,
Do you love me?
Cold winter,
Warm coffee,
Tell me now,
Do you love me?
#love
16 reads
0 Comments
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