Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems - Honest critique has been requested for these poems. Want to learn the art of critique? Join our Honestly Crafted Critique group.
slipalong
Poem Published
Today 9:55pm
Today 9:55pm
Keeper
Mothers words still ringing in my ears
you want to find yourself a keeper dear
you'll be left on the shelf like auntie FLO
shes going on again, ouch my aching soul
did she know how hard i tried
that cool look in bitches coven times
a fine line with a touch of class
to hook with the flash of tits and ass
domesticity a stamp that holds on fast
wrapped to rip like the Christmas parcel pass
a sex slave thats not been neutered
the package comes is this my future
of sweets and treats
and pills for pain relief ...
you want to find yourself a keeper dear
you'll be left on the shelf like auntie FLO
shes going on again, ouch my aching soul
did she know how hard i tried
that cool look in bitches coven times
a fine line with a touch of class
to hook with the flash of tits and ass
domesticity a stamp that holds on fast
wrapped to rip like the Christmas parcel pass
a sex slave thats not been neutered
the package comes is this my future
of sweets and treats
and pills for pain relief ...
#romantic
9 reads
0 Comments
smackdownraven
Poem Published
Today 9:11pm
Today 9:11pm
off key notes
dearest poet I have thoughts from the edge
I have to reel them in
to stop my world from spinning
you see I'm out of control
a thrill seeker
who pushes until I can push no more
eventually those walls push back
and they are made of steel
a deep current of sadness
is running through my soul
I don't know if it's my own
or of others looking in
it could be the universe
the star's council is in session
pouring their thoughts into me
lending me focus
for an ever shifting world...
I have to reel them in
to stop my world from spinning
you see I'm out of control
a thrill seeker
who pushes until I can push no more
eventually those walls push back
and they are made of steel
a deep current of sadness
is running through my soul
I don't know if it's my own
or of others looking in
it could be the universe
the star's council is in session
pouring their thoughts into me
lending me focus
for an ever shifting world...
#universe
#confessional
#TruthOfLife #honesty
#TruthOfLife #honesty
19 reads
2 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Today 8:02pm
Today 8:02pm
Soul Artist
my depression has a name
she's called Artist
she put all her paints away
and now creates with dung
left on the city streets on New Delhi
her reality a painful thing
raw truth can only be rendered
in this type of medium
watercolors are too delicate
for this type of feeling
her blood is used to add splashes of color
an emphasis on her true masterpiece
because in truth
she creates with her soul's painful memories
she's called Artist
she put all her paints away
and now creates with dung
left on the city streets on New Delhi
her reality a painful thing
raw truth can only be rendered
in this type of medium
watercolors are too delicate
for this type of feeling
her blood is used to add splashes of color
an emphasis on her true masterpiece
because in truth
she creates with her soul's painful memories
#love
#depression
#honesty
21 reads
4 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Today 6:11pm
Today 6:11pm
supernova
I'm an ugly poetess
I mean I write of unpleasant things
decorating my walls with prettiness
hoping you don't smell the stink
as I peruse the poetry of the enlightened
I'm confronted with my human downfalls
but don't feel pity for me
I'm not after that
just chasing down a thought
with hopes of shedding a light on the subject
using a lighter to light a cavern
deep and dank within
is getting to know my ego
once upon a time
I was evolving into a being of substance
who later began devolving...
I mean I write of unpleasant things
decorating my walls with prettiness
hoping you don't smell the stink
as I peruse the poetry of the enlightened
I'm confronted with my human downfalls
but don't feel pity for me
I'm not after that
just chasing down a thought
with hopes of shedding a light on the subject
using a lighter to light a cavern
deep and dank within
is getting to know my ego
once upon a time
I was evolving into a being of substance
who later began devolving...
#universe
#TruthOfLife
#philosophical
27 reads
10 Comments
ReggiePoet
Reggie
Reggie
Poem Published
Today 1:13pm
Today 1:13pm
Banshee
In time, her mind may heal from insult’s prick;
her heart remembers every little slight…
She bides her time with banter, politic,
unleashing vengeance when the time grows ripe!
Your little cuts, she deftly turns aside,
as she enjoys a clever turn of phrase;
but, scorn her, and you risk her vengeful pride
will burn you worse than summer’s mid-day rays!
No diva will abide much more than that,
so mind your tongue! Beware your repartee!
Forget your station—venturing backchat—
you might petition your own dread banshee! ...
her heart remembers every little slight…
She bides her time with banter, politic,
unleashing vengeance when the time grows ripe!
Your little cuts, she deftly turns aside,
as she enjoys a clever turn of phrase;
but, scorn her, and you risk her vengeful pride
will burn you worse than summer’s mid-day rays!
No diva will abide much more than that,
so mind your tongue! Beware your repartee!
Forget your station—venturing backchat—
you might petition your own dread banshee! ...
#dark
#relationships
#funny #revenge
#funny #revenge
16 reads
1 Comment
Diabolicalizmz
Diabolicizmz
Diabolicizmz
Poem Published
Today 1:08pm
Today 1:08pm
Xoul Ether
How did my zoul taste?
Left not a morsel
For anyone else
On heart's plates
Spirit and mind aligned
Your zoul tasted wonderful
Now! How was mine???
Left not a morsel
For anyone else
On heart's plates
Spirit and mind aligned
Your zoul tasted wonderful
Now! How was mine???
#husband
#romantic
#drugs
#lover
#addiction
10 reads
0 Comments
cold_fusion
Poem Published
Today 10:14am
Today 10:14am
and when i see flowers
i think of you
for they do the same
what you do
for both you
and they
know not except
to bring
colors
joy
fragrance
to the
heart
mind
and soul
and when i see flowers
i stop
the pause is felt
for an eternity
between the breaths
something happens
like a slow motion scene
the world stops in its tracks
except
for my lips to make their upward movement
at the edges
and then it's back
to normal
speed
the only change
the lasting grin ...
for they do the same
what you do
for both you
and they
know not except
to bring
colors
joy
fragrance
to the
heart
mind
and soul
and when i see flowers
i stop
the pause is felt
for an eternity
between the breaths
something happens
like a slow motion scene
the world stops in its tracks
except
for my lips to make their upward movement
at the edges
and then it's back
to normal
speed
the only change
the lasting grin ...
#happiness
#love
#inspirational
#spiritual
#uplifting
32 reads
9 Comments
ChoaticGoddess
ShyG
ShyG
Poem Published
Today 4:41am
Today 4:41am
I Got Ahead of Myself
My heart is hurting.
My soul is yearning.
All because of one person.
He's so damn charming
and i can't stop the wanting.
I wanna be the reason he wakes up in the morning.
but what he dreams about when he's snoring.
I want to be his always,
but all I get is maybe someday.
He can't let go of her.
The way I'm feeling is so absurd.
becuase she had him first and I'll never compare to the bond they'd shared.
For christ sake they have a baby!
Fuck.. I can't...
My soul is yearning.
All because of one person.
He's so damn charming
and i can't stop the wanting.
I wanna be the reason he wakes up in the morning.
but what he dreams about when he's snoring.
I want to be his always,
but all I get is maybe someday.
He can't let go of her.
The way I'm feeling is so absurd.
becuase she had him first and I'll never compare to the bond they'd shared.
For christ sake they have a baby!
Fuck.. I can't...
#love
20 reads
0 Comments
samael
Poem Published
Today 1:46am
Today 1:46am
The slightly reflective bathroom stall wall showed me at my best
I buried myself in your fantasizing photos and your wavering words.
i framed myself inside a coffin as an architect of ache.
these days and nights run together;
oceans dream tides take
as beaches bring the lovely strangers in and out of our lives.
vacationers cut feelings,
hearts as souvenirs.
i framed myself inside a coffin as an architect of ache.
these days and nights run together;
oceans dream tides take
as beaches bring the lovely strangers in and out of our lives.
vacationers cut feelings,
hearts as souvenirs.
#love
17 reads
1 Comment
JohnnyBlaze
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:54pm
Yesterday 10:54pm
Nature's Church
No need for small talk
When together, we know
the weather;
all that needs saying
can be said in a slow
lazy swaying
Havoc in the hammock
being acrobatic, risking
tumbling onto Autumn's
auburn bed of leaves
Moments pined for
amongst the eaves
of a pillared steeple of trees
beckoning names be carved
in hearts of birch
Universe, please ...
quietly praying on knees
in Nature's church
Let these one day
be Our memories
...
When together, we know
the weather;
all that needs saying
can be said in a slow
lazy swaying
Havoc in the hammock
being acrobatic, risking
tumbling onto Autumn's
auburn bed of leaves
Moments pined for
amongst the eaves
of a pillared steeple of trees
beckoning names be carved
in hearts of birch
Universe, please ...
quietly praying on knees
in Nature's church
Let these one day
be Our memories
...
#trees
#nature
21 reads
6 Comments
John_Galt
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:58pm
Yesterday 8:58pm
Everything to Me
Shining hair flows down her neck,
an obsidian waterfall.
I dare not gaze too long,
for in love I'll surely fall.
The sweetest darkness,
is there within her eyes.
They captivate me,
this comes as no surprise.
Her lips are beautiful,
when she shares a cupcake grin.
I could taste their softness,
forever and again.
Face of an angel,
fresh as morning rain.
When she looks at me,
away goes all the pain.
Beneath the beauty,
lies a soul of perfect light.
Comforting throughout the day, ...
an obsidian waterfall.
I dare not gaze too long,
for in love I'll surely fall.
The sweetest darkness,
is there within her eyes.
They captivate me,
this comes as no surprise.
Her lips are beautiful,
when she shares a cupcake grin.
I could taste their softness,
forever and again.
Face of an angel,
fresh as morning rain.
When she looks at me,
away goes all the pain.
Beneath the beauty,
lies a soul of perfect light.
Comforting throughout the day, ...
#romantic
#beauty
#FallingInLove
36 reads
9 Comments
Diabolicalizmz
Diabolicizmz
Diabolicizmz
Poem Published
Yesterday 7:32am
Yesterday 7:32am
Kneading
I need a muse like yesterday
You have no idea
My trainz of thoughtz keep taking
Off without me
I need a muse like yesterday
You have no idea
My trainz of thoughtz keep taking
Off without me
I need a muse like yesterday
#wife
#husband
#lover
19 reads
2 Comments
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