Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:44pm
Yesterday 11:44pm
promises
tears like promises not kept
pool in my soul to be released
a moment at a time
grief at who I am and who i am not
I wonder at the sadness
from whence it comes?
it whispers secrets in my ears
I keen quietly so no one knows what I do
my sorrow grows intimate with me
so close a companion I wonder how long we've been acquainted
was it just this life or many?
melancholy my confidant
from her loving cup I sip
blood of my marrow
my wisdom intertwined with the honestly of pain,
the blue of my...
pool in my soul to be released
a moment at a time
grief at who I am and who i am not
I wonder at the sadness
from whence it comes?
it whispers secrets in my ears
I keen quietly so no one knows what I do
my sorrow grows intimate with me
so close a companion I wonder how long we've been acquainted
was it just this life or many?
melancholy my confidant
from her loving cup I sip
blood of my marrow
my wisdom intertwined with the honestly of pain,
the blue of my...
#sadness
#love
16 reads
3 Comments
dizzzzzzy
Nunaya
Nunaya
Poem Published
Yesterday 9:27pm
Yesterday 9:27pm
With every bit of my soul
Likewise
#love
#emotions
36 reads
1 Comment
SatInUGal
Kumar
Kumar
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:49pm
Yesterday 8:49pm
12/3/21
Like a breeze
Or a drip
Or a flying
Wing's tip
Like a hop
Or a claw
Or a small
Silky paw
Let us explore
The hard and the dry
The soft and the wet
The low and the high
PLACES TOGETHER
Or a drip
Or a flying
Wing's tip
Like a hop
Or a claw
Or a small
Silky paw
Let us explore
The hard and the dry
The soft and the wet
The low and the high
PLACES TOGETHER
#animals
#nature
#rhyming
#travel
#sensual
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0 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:58pm
Yesterday 5:58pm
the secret knowledge of fog
the secret knowledge called to me
caused me to scour books for hidden truths
I sought you early in the morning and late at night
I have a fire in me that needs to know
some information sticks
I turn it over in my mind
then my questions rise as prayers
the soul of me seems to understand
what my mind doesn't
the answers have been given
revealing themselves in various manners
I search different texts and dialects
I see pieces of you in all of them
multifaceted aspects but all a part of you
a...
caused me to scour books for hidden truths
I sought you early in the morning and late at night
I have a fire in me that needs to know
some information sticks
I turn it over in my mind
then my questions rise as prayers
the soul of me seems to understand
what my mind doesn't
the answers have been given
revealing themselves in various manners
I search different texts and dialects
I see pieces of you in all of them
multifaceted aspects but all a part of you
a...
#love
#spiritual
27 reads
1 Comment
slipalong
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:56pm
Yesterday 5:56pm
The masculine
To form the bond to clasp
to add your jeans into that bank
It rules our lives
the rise and fall
from song of dawn
the nesting, call for which we grope
our southern thoughts
stuck back in stone-age times
aware of feelings greater plains
the beast awaiting to be tamed
to add your jeans into that bank
It rules our lives
the rise and fall
from song of dawn
the nesting, call for which we grope
our southern thoughts
stuck back in stone-age times
aware of feelings greater plains
the beast awaiting to be tamed
#FallingInLove
8 reads
0 Comments
LaRochelleRaven
LaRochelle
LaRochelle
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:44am
Yesterday 5:44am
I was never fooled
I was never fooled
Finally I said enough
You have lied and used enough
You truly believed I was fooled in thinking that you loved me
I was never fooled
I met you in a place filled with sadness and I saw your selfish desire
I gave you a hundred moments to wake up and finally take responsibility
I have also spent lonely cold dark nights upon pavement beds and I have been hungry and tired and I have done horrific acts in the name of survival.
I was never fooled by your so called affection or tears which only...
Finally I said enough
You have lied and used enough
You truly believed I was fooled in thinking that you loved me
I was never fooled
I met you in a place filled with sadness and I saw your selfish desire
I gave you a hundred moments to wake up and finally take responsibility
I have also spent lonely cold dark nights upon pavement beds and I have been hungry and tired and I have done horrific acts in the name of survival.
I was never fooled by your so called affection or tears which only...
#anger
#grief
#frustration
#despair
#disappointment
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0 Comments
LaRochelleRaven
LaRochelle
LaRochelle
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:40am
Yesterday 5:40am
Did you hear it?
Did you hear that sound
did you notice the silence
then the absolute explosive noise
did you hear the slow tearing off a heart
did you hear that deep crackling noise
did you hear that breaking into pieces
did you hear the shattering
did you hear that soul numbing sound
did you hear it?
did you hear my heart break?
did you hear my soul fade?
did you hear my tears fall?
did you hear it?
that exact moment that you broke me
did you hear it? did...
did you notice the silence
then the absolute explosive noise
did you hear the slow tearing off a heart
did you hear that deep crackling noise
did you hear that breaking into pieces
did you hear the shattering
did you hear that soul numbing sound
did you hear it?
did you hear my heart break?
did you hear my soul fade?
did you hear my tears fall?
did you hear it?
that exact moment that you broke me
did you hear it? did...
#sadness
#grief
#heartbroken #despair
#heartbroken #despair
26 reads
1 Comment
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:52am
Yesterday 1:52am
lilt
lilting soul song
little notes play
I'm keening within
I am of no value
of no importance in the grander scheme of things
just particles of dust
blown about on the stage of life
we exchange thoughts
feelings turn in the eternity
binding me to you in the moment
looking out through my tears
my saltiness says I am real
a woman of feeling
a woman of worth
in the sanctity of truth
I am valued
little notes play
I'm keening within
I am of no value
of no importance in the grander scheme of things
just particles of dust
blown about on the stage of life
we exchange thoughts
feelings turn in the eternity
binding me to you in the moment
looking out through my tears
my saltiness says I am real
a woman of feeling
a woman of worth
in the sanctity of truth
I am valued
#sadness
#love
34 reads
4 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Yesterday 00:35am
Yesterday 00:35am
intuition
carve your intuition into my dreams
manifest longing in my soul
then I'll know what it is to ache
you will never be mine
honestly I could never be yours
my nature is greed
there is a deep chasm within
it can't be crossed
restless spirits reside there
ghosts of love failed
I try to know a soul
really know a soul
I peer into their reality to see if there is room for me
I'm my own worst enemy
in the end I know you will regret me
in the end you'll love me
the truth is I wish you wouldn't
I...
manifest longing in my soul
then I'll know what it is to ache
you will never be mine
honestly I could never be yours
my nature is greed
there is a deep chasm within
it can't be crossed
restless spirits reside there
ghosts of love failed
I try to know a soul
really know a soul
I peer into their reality to see if there is room for me
I'm my own worst enemy
in the end I know you will regret me
in the end you'll love me
the truth is I wish you wouldn't
I...
#love
33 reads
4 Comments
KristinaX
Poem Published
2nd Dec 2021 11:00pm
2nd Dec 2021 11:00pm
For a Poet's Love
For the love of a Madman,
who was made to be lifted up by me;
It is not worth hindering - it will not pass.
My fate has become entwined with his.
And there is one life, and one death awaits us.
He is loyal, he calls me his favorite.
I try to reject hot words as they beguile.
Before I was not so vulnerable.
After the refusal, a new flower bloomed.
Now what? Am I crying? Or is it specks of dust.
Caught with the wind in the pool of blue eyes?
And on the cheeks tear after tear
Slide to the feet, sparkling like...
who was made to be lifted up by me;
It is not worth hindering - it will not pass.
My fate has become entwined with his.
And there is one life, and one death awaits us.
He is loyal, he calls me his favorite.
I try to reject hot words as they beguile.
Before I was not so vulnerable.
After the refusal, a new flower bloomed.
Now what? Am I crying? Or is it specks of dust.
Caught with the wind in the pool of blue eyes?
And on the cheeks tear after tear
Slide to the feet, sparkling like...
#MyInspiration
#WritingPoetry
#PowerOfWords
#temptation
#emotions
82 reads
22 Comments
Strangeways_Rob
Poem Published
2nd Dec 2021 10:16pm
2nd Dec 2021 10:16pm
Sing Your Love
Beyond all mist
Remember only this,
You were loved.
Is there anything more
Mere mortals can wish for?
Some talk of revolution,
But in the dead of night
There is no warmth in a gun.
One day,
A solitary ship will sail the ocean
Cast overboard its plundered treasure
And seek comfort in the last lighthouse.
Memories remain in the
Grass in the rain,
Sun on the sea,
Small toys on Christmas trees.
Mum’s last word to Sue and me was “sing.” She nil-by-mouth at this stage. We were trying to...
Remember only this,
You were loved.
Is there anything more
Mere mortals can wish for?
Some talk of revolution,
But in the dead of night
There is no warmth in a gun.
One day,
A solitary ship will sail the ocean
Cast overboard its plundered treasure
And seek comfort in the last lighthouse.
Memories remain in the
Grass in the rain,
Sun on the sea,
Small toys on Christmas trees.
Mum’s last word to Sue and me was “sing.” She nil-by-mouth at this stage. We were trying to...
#love
#death
#universe
31 reads
0 Comments
jemac
Poem Published
2nd Dec 2021 9:50pm
2nd Dec 2021 9:50pm
h a n d s
she loves working hands
stories beyond words held strong
deeply etched in lines
stories beyond words held strong
deeply etched in lines
#strength
#courage
#LifeAsAWriter #determination
#LifeAsAWriter #determination
33 reads
4 Comments
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