Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Tenderloin
Poem Published
Today 4:12pm
Today 4:12pm
No Quick Fix ( I Am Not A Hero)
We missed again,,
our window
to re-connect
has passed.
Another event,
and you are racing out the door.
So busy these days,
that an invisible wedge
has positioned itself
between us.
I snuck into the room,
as instructed,
my hand across your back,
while you slept.
A wave of anxiety overcomes me
at the thought of penetrating you.
It never was an issue,
until the alcohol was gone.
And I can't bear to leave you unsatisfied,
contributing to another resentment of me.
In some ways, it is a relief ...
our window
to re-connect
has passed.
Another event,
and you are racing out the door.
So busy these days,
that an invisible wedge
has positioned itself
between us.
I snuck into the room,
as instructed,
my hand across your back,
while you slept.
A wave of anxiety overcomes me
at the thought of penetrating you.
It never was an issue,
until the alcohol was gone.
And I can't bear to leave you unsatisfied,
contributing to another resentment of me.
In some ways, it is a relief ...
#relationships
#addiction
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shadow_starzzz
Poem Published
Today 3:07pm
Today 3:07pm
Love, is just a four letter word, like f**k... for opportunistic f**ktards who lie & cheat !
He sat next to me on the couch whilst sipping his glass of red as I tried to deescalate a situation via text a thousand miles away, whilst the Beatles strummed melodically in the background.
He then proceeded to pull out his phone and finger it as I spied his screen from the corner of my eye.
It was the other woman.
Well. It could’ve been his wife for all I know as I don’t know much, other than I struggled to trust this man when I saw these 3 lips upon the message thread......
He then proceeded to pull out his phone and finger it as I spied his screen from the corner of my eye.
It was the other woman.
Well. It could’ve been his wife for all I know as I don’t know much, other than I struggled to trust this man when I saw these 3 lips upon the message thread......
#sex
#lover
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2 Comments
Olivia-H
Mystic Ink
Mystic Ink
Poem Published
Today 2:17pm
Today 2:17pm
Silent Vibe
All those days
I was inspired from the silence
Last words,
I spelled, “please stay”
Without a reply
Without any warn
Silence too, disappeared
Oh! my savior
Where to find my shadow?
Where it belongs?
Feel the pain.
I was inspired from the silence
Last words,
I spelled, “please stay”
Without a reply
Without any warn
Silence too, disappeared
Oh! my savior
Where to find my shadow?
Where it belongs?
Feel the pain.
#LifeChangingMoment
#UnrequitedLove
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personanongrata
Poem Published
Today 1:25pm
Today 1:25pm
lingered participles of time
What kind of a sick joke is this?
Unknown forces are messing with my mental state.
The angels I thought as my guardians are evil spirits of my ego, thirsty for a bloodshed and pneumatic massacre.
Love, passion, strength
have to be altered by
fury, apathy, fragility.
I hate emotions. I want to feel no more. I hate polarity.
I want to escape, smash that pendulum.
I'll never have you now, will I?
Feel you, touch your adonic lips
But you are the part of mine I love the most.
I hate the rest.
I want to die
and live...
Unknown forces are messing with my mental state.
The angels I thought as my guardians are evil spirits of my ego, thirsty for a bloodshed and pneumatic massacre.
Love, passion, strength
have to be altered by
fury, apathy, fragility.
I hate emotions. I want to feel no more. I hate polarity.
I want to escape, smash that pendulum.
I'll never have you now, will I?
Feel you, touch your adonic lips
But you are the part of mine I love the most.
I hate the rest.
I want to die
and live...
#UnrequitedLove
#SelfReflection
14 reads
2 Comments
EpicUtester69
Poem Published
Today 1:11pm
Today 1:11pm
between worlds
I walk alone in this cold world tonight
The bells chime like the sands of time
Been caught in a twilight zone again
Guessing who is wrong and who is right
Sitting on the fence wondering what to do
Thunder booms in through sky loudly
Mind wonders in between heaven and hell
I've been lost for a long time still stuck in this nightmare
Tied by these chains around my heart
Please let me let go of you finally completely
Trying to hold my head high from the bitterness
I never asked for the way you have treated me.
The bells chime like the sands of time
Been caught in a twilight zone again
Guessing who is wrong and who is right
Sitting on the fence wondering what to do
Thunder booms in through sky loudly
Mind wonders in between heaven and hell
I've been lost for a long time still stuck in this nightmare
Tied by these chains around my heart
Please let me let go of you finally completely
Trying to hold my head high from the bitterness
I never asked for the way you have treated me.
#heartbroken
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JohnnyBlaze
Poem Published
Today 12:57pm
Today 12:57pm
Mind Fades To Black
ink flowing from this pen
No holding back, my Love
Write you a poem every day
We both know I could
but what if I should
run out of things to say?
What then?
Mind fades to black
graphite streaks from this pencil
No holding back, my Love
Draw you daily in shades of gray
We both know I could
but what if I should
lack enough pages in my sketchbook
for your figure to play and dance
What then?
What will become of this romance?
Mind
fades
to
black
...
No holding back, my Love
Write you a poem every day
We both know I could
but what if I should
run out of things to say?
What then?
Mind fades to black
graphite streaks from this pencil
No holding back, my Love
Draw you daily in shades of gray
We both know I could
but what if I should
lack enough pages in my sketchbook
for your figure to play and dance
What then?
What will become of this romance?
Mind
fades
to
black
...
#NaPoWriMo2018
#WritingPoetry
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5 Comments
EpicUtester69
Poem Published
Today 12:55pm
Today 12:55pm
Bad choices
I've looked high
I've looked low
I've looked for answers
Not one will be answered
A stupid love fool
thinking in a real way
she would keep her legs closed
just for me she was not truthful
I know you used to dance for a living
still I never judged you that’s not me
my love gave you the benefit of the doubt
We all make bad choices in life mine was you
My bad choice was I let my guard down
when I meet you there just was something about you
You tricked me to believe that you loved me
the games you played were next...
I've looked low
I've looked for answers
Not one will be answered
A stupid love fool
thinking in a real way
she would keep her legs closed
just for me she was not truthful
I know you used to dance for a living
still I never judged you that’s not me
my love gave you the benefit of the doubt
We all make bad choices in life mine was you
My bad choice was I let my guard down
when I meet you there just was something about you
You tricked me to believe that you loved me
the games you played were next...
#rejection
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shadow_starzzz
Poem Published
Today 12:42pm
Today 12:42pm
He said his mother was unkind but I think he meant she was a nasty bitch, which probably explains why he abhors women !
I am too full of life... to be half loved, and fucked even less !
Deep down, it's my responsibility to not settle for a love, that's purely lukewarm.
I wanted the intensity of a raging fire that lingered from dawn to dusk.
One, that was scorching, and capable of singeing the fringes of my psyche, each time he's away from me.
A love so deep, that even I cannot fathom the loss.
What I want, and what I need, have never aligned as I allowed my temple to be desecrated by those who knew not how to love, with...
#identity
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Justafan18
Justafan
Justafan
Poem Published
Today 12:20pm
Today 12:20pm
A Love So Dear
There was a time when I didn’t know you
When days passed into nights
With no comfort
No joy
My life listless and dull …painfully so
You changed all that
With few words
How do I thank someone for giving meaning to my life,
For lighting a candle in the darkness of my existence?
I know only this
Words on a page
Expressions of love
From one human being to another
Here are those expressions
You are loved
Your light in my life will never dull
Never go out
When you have doubts
Cling to those who will
Wrap...
When days passed into nights
With no comfort
No joy
My life listless and dull …painfully so
You changed all that
With few words
How do I thank someone for giving meaning to my life,
For lighting a candle in the darkness of my existence?
I know only this
Words on a page
Expressions of love
From one human being to another
Here are those expressions
You are loved
Your light in my life will never dull
Never go out
When you have doubts
Cling to those who will
Wrap...
#happiness
#relationships
#honesty
#gratitude
#admiration
18 reads
2 Comments
Justafan18
Justafan
Justafan
Poem Published
Today 12:09pm
Today 12:09pm
Chained
Cold walls
Little sunlight
Fear so real … you can taste it
What is happening?
Is anything real?
Life out of my control.
You left me chained here
In this life
Without you
I used to soar
My heart light
Mind at peace
What changed?
Was it me,
Or someone else?
Come back
Release my chains
Release my heart
To soar again!
Little sunlight
Fear so real … you can taste it
What is happening?
Is anything real?
Life out of my control.
You left me chained here
In this life
Without you
I used to soar
My heart light
Mind at peace
What changed?
Was it me,
Or someone else?
Come back
Release my chains
Release my heart
To soar again!
#sadness
#heartbroken
#betrayal
17 reads
3 Comments
cold_fusion
Poem Published
Today 10:35am
Today 10:35am
when you're around
what is it
that
when you're around
everything becomes meaningful
and
meaningless
at the same time
when you're around
even the scariest masks you put on
evoke the deepest of joys
for what the eye sees
becomes irrelevant
as the heart becomes the single
source of all the senses
the sight the touch the smell
the taste
and more
and they say
that is a case
of mind over matter
how stupid
can't you see
it is a case
of heart over matter
not the mind
for the mind surrenders ...
that
when you're around
everything becomes meaningful
and
meaningless
at the same time
when you're around
even the scariest masks you put on
evoke the deepest of joys
for what the eye sees
becomes irrelevant
as the heart becomes the single
source of all the senses
the sight the touch the smell
the taste
and more
and they say
that is a case
of mind over matter
how stupid
can't you see
it is a case
of heart over matter
not the mind
for the mind surrenders ...
#loneliness
#BestFriend
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6 Comments
Spanker
Poem Published
Today 7:01am
Today 7:01am
It Was Complicated
Approaching infinity, it was a long way,
The approach that is, and the distance,
Like a Jumbo needing room to land,
And take off, vice-versa actually
She took her top off, quite casually,
Said "gee it's hot in here", or did she
Say that first, then remove her top?
It mattered not, she was topless
My worshiping at her feet, did not
Impress her, she said "arise fool!"
I did, glad I had it in the right order,
This time, supposedly, and that ...
I had placed her on a pedestal,
Most unfairly it would seem,
She deserved to be up...
The approach that is, and the distance,
Like a Jumbo needing room to land,
And take off, vice-versa actually
She took her top off, quite casually,
Said "gee it's hot in here", or did she
Say that first, then remove her top?
It mattered not, she was topless
My worshiping at her feet, did not
Impress her, she said "arise fool!"
I did, glad I had it in the right order,
This time, supposedly, and that ...
I had placed her on a pedestal,
Most unfairly it would seem,
She deserved to be up...
#love
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0 Comments
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