Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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direlegion
dire legion
dire legion
Poem Published
Today 3:05pm
Today 3:05pm
[WHERE'D I GO]
#love
#girlfriend
#relationships
#romantic
#honesty
7 reads
0 Comments
joeborg
Poem Published
Today 10:46am
Today 10:46am
busy musing
I’d keep busy all day long
If I was put where I belong,
And that would be seeking the muse
So I can write beauty reviews,
One good look so many thoughts
Say it straight untie the knots,
What a joy I found in life
Since I got you as my fyffe,
all the muses have combined
every corner’s been defined,
Such a feat to duplicate
Impossible to manipulate
If I was put where I belong,
And that would be seeking the muse
So I can write beauty reviews,
One good look so many thoughts
Say it straight untie the knots,
What a joy I found in life
Since I got you as my fyffe,
all the muses have combined
every corner’s been defined,
Such a feat to duplicate
Impossible to manipulate
#lust
#girlfriend
#lover
#crush
#passion
12 reads
0 Comments
summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
Today 10:07am
Today 10:07am
no reeling surrealism, ABSOLUTE IS LOVE ANYWHERE-either plugged in cyano'algal blooms or flow as molten sun'swans
absolute is love
#love
#universe
#faith
#spiritual
#surreal
21 reads
2 Comments
MJ-SWIM
M.J S.W.I.M
M.J S.W.I.M
Poem Published
Today 5:42am
Today 5:42am
The biggest L
I'll turn off my feelings for you
Flip a switch and cull the zoo
And I'll stop saying that I love you
If that is what you really want, too
And I'll become cold and unfeeling
If it keeps you from backwards reeling
Surely I'll never lose this big feeling
But surely your life I won't be stealing
Have your boyfriend and start a family
Far better than this body I call calamity
But just don't begin to call me the enemy
You have always had a best friend in me.
Now I carry on for a little while but all the while
Running the...
Flip a switch and cull the zoo
And I'll stop saying that I love you
If that is what you really want, too
And I'll become cold and unfeeling
If it keeps you from backwards reeling
Surely I'll never lose this big feeling
But surely your life I won't be stealing
Have your boyfriend and start a family
Far better than this body I call calamity
But just don't begin to call me the enemy
You have always had a best friend in me.
Now I carry on for a little while but all the while
Running the...
#UnrequitedLove
#emotional
19 reads
4 Comments
direlegion
dire legion
dire legion
Poem Published
Today 5:34am
Today 5:34am
[LOVE BITES]
#happiness
#love
#kindness
#strength
#hope
27 reads
2 Comments
Simon_III_Msibi
Mandla Msibi
Mandla Msibi
Poem Published
Today 5:20am
Today 5:20am
Crush Chronicles IX - The Significance
The new year came and went
And unlike last year
This year I had to
get my act together
Partying and drinking
Was no longer appealing
I was repeating
Whilst my friends
Were now in postgrad
The workload increased
And the only thing
I had going for me
Were my studies
We were getting deeper
Into our twenties
And could no longer
Behave like teens
Fresh out of high school
On the day of our last exam
We decided to meet up
We weren't all coming back
Next year so we knew that ...
And unlike last year
This year I had to
get my act together
Partying and drinking
Was no longer appealing
I was repeating
Whilst my friends
Were now in postgrad
The workload increased
And the only thing
I had going for me
Were my studies
We were getting deeper
Into our twenties
And could no longer
Behave like teens
Fresh out of high school
On the day of our last exam
We decided to meet up
We weren't all coming back
Next year so we knew that ...
#love
#narrative
#prose #FallingInLove
#prose #FallingInLove
8 reads
0 Comments
skymikan
Poem Published
Today 1:10am
Today 1:10am
"Yes, I do"
So, why are you here?”
Her father asked.
“I wanted to give this to you.”
He replied and sat down.
Her father looked into it
The book of her daughter
And pauses, then said.
“You are getting married?”
It was an unbelievable surprise.
He was reluctant to say but he should
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“Yes, with another girl.”
Her father asked.
“I wanted to give this to you.”
He replied and sat down.
Her father looked into it
The book of her daughter
And pauses, then said.
“You are getting married?”
It was an unbelievable surprise.
He was reluctant to say but he should
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“Yes, with another girl.”
#love
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0 Comments
Oliviahoney
Poem Published
Today 00:10am
Today 00:10am
The death of a dream
The key to unlocking me was buried long ago, interred in the ground with my heart.
The once exuberant, vibrant, giggling girl is replaced with ashes.
Speak softly, walk lightly, you will never be noticed.
I traipse through life never feeling, feeling everything.
Looking through eyes with blinders, scared to see what is looking back at me.
Soul corrupted and crippled, hidden behind a façade of indifference.
Always running from someone or something,
Never really escaping anything because you are running from yourself. ...
The once exuberant, vibrant, giggling girl is replaced with ashes.
Speak softly, walk lightly, you will never be noticed.
I traipse through life never feeling, feeling everything.
Looking through eyes with blinders, scared to see what is looking back at me.
Soul corrupted and crippled, hidden behind a façade of indifference.
Always running from someone or something,
Never really escaping anything because you are running from yourself. ...
#grief
#heartbroken
#despair #emptiness
#despair #emptiness
14 reads
0 Comments
AverageJoe
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:09pm
Yesterday 11:09pm
Lost
I know what it is to die
And lie in one of the unmarked graves of life
No prize
No glory
No honor gained
To stand mute before the butcher’s blow
Then smile and say
“It’s alright.”
As he lands the fatal strike
None come to see you
Lying bloody and broken in the Shambles
The stench of it lies outside the city wall
Far from the fairest of ladies
And far from any feeling at all
I worked 8 hours today
I am a good drone
I know every move by rote
Reflex is good
You don’t have to think
I can’t think ...
And lie in one of the unmarked graves of life
No prize
No glory
No honor gained
To stand mute before the butcher’s blow
Then smile and say
“It’s alright.”
As he lands the fatal strike
None come to see you
Lying bloody and broken in the Shambles
The stench of it lies outside the city wall
Far from the fairest of ladies
And far from any feeling at all
I worked 8 hours today
I am a good drone
I know every move by rote
Reflex is good
You don’t have to think
I can’t think ...
#heartbroken
#breakup
25 reads
7 Comments
Stoney223
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:31pm
Yesterday 6:31pm
TRYING TO SOLVE AN PUZZLE
From the mere symmetries of lines drawn within the sands of time as footprints of our journeys and walks through this element known as yes LIFE, let us feel love as well give back love in honesty and truth and trust as one man to one woman and one woman to one man in honor and respect. For let US through this building of our foundation of STEEL AND STONES, be an deep unshackable thing from those outside forces that dont wanna see us make it as ONE. For you see its ME AND YOU against the world as one for better are for worse, yes exposing it for what its truly worth an love that didnt come by...
#strength
#courage
#gratitude
#admiration
#respect
16 reads
0 Comments
Simon_III_Msibi
Mandla Msibi
Mandla Msibi
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:29pm
Yesterday 5:29pm
Crush Chronicles VIII - Crushes Fade Away
This is the story
Of the first girl
I ever had a crush on
You know just before
you hit puberty
You know about
the concept of attraction
But there's a huge difference
between knowing
what something is
And actually experiencing it
Then it hit me
I don't know why
But for some reason
I liked this girl
And I knew it wasn't
Just a play thing
But your first crush
Is supposed to be just a passing wind
Someone in your distant memory
But somehow my first crush
Ended up in the...
Of the first girl
I ever had a crush on
You know just before
you hit puberty
You know about
the concept of attraction
But there's a huge difference
between knowing
what something is
And actually experiencing it
Then it hit me
I don't know why
But for some reason
I liked this girl
And I knew it wasn't
Just a play thing
But your first crush
Is supposed to be just a passing wind
Someone in your distant memory
But somehow my first crush
Ended up in the...
#relationships
#narrative
#FallingInLove
#UnrequitedLove
#crush
12 reads
5 Comments
MJ-SWIM
M.J S.W.I.M
M.J S.W.I.M
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:20pm
Yesterday 5:20pm
Compliments on adoration
I adore you, my queen and goddess
I love you, you magnificent woman
You are beloved, my sweet and honest
I cherish you, you wonderful woman
My eyes are blinded for your
Supernatural beauty.
I love you, you magnificent woman
You are beloved, my sweet and honest
I cherish you, you wonderful woman
My eyes are blinded for your
Supernatural beauty.
#girlfriend
19 reads
2 Comments
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