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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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arortiz73
MTP
MTP
Poem Published
Today 1:52am
Today 1:52am
Recommend Shampoo
#love
#prison
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Reborn-Asylum
Poem Published
Yesterday 7:35pm
Yesterday 7:35pm
Kerosene Seas
Betrayal doesn't come from my enemies
Cutting Samson's hair in the night
Judas coins, paid the price
Et Tu Brute
Non tocare
-with your liars dice
Cutting Samson's hair in the night
Judas coins, paid the price
Et Tu Brute
Non tocare
-with your liars dice
#lies
#betrayal
9 reads
1 Comment
_Skylark_
Poem Published
Yesterday 6:40pm
Yesterday 6:40pm
To Them, To Truth.
How could such a joy
Forever spoil my joy?
This is the nature of the incomparable
Somehow, each lengthening night mirrors
The boldness of your captivating spirit
That prison of impossibility glittered with flecks of crossed stars
I do not fear perishing in this prison, in fact I welcome it
For how could any flight of freedom or fancy surpass
The sweetness of being enwrapped in the bonds of your indelicate whispers?
Forever spoil my joy?
This is the nature of the incomparable
Somehow, each lengthening night mirrors
The boldness of your captivating spirit
That prison of impossibility glittered with flecks of crossed stars
I do not fear perishing in this prison, in fact I welcome it
For how could any flight of freedom or fancy surpass
The sweetness of being enwrapped in the bonds of your indelicate whispers?
#UnrequitedLove
14 reads
1 Comment
Leethal
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:48am
Yesterday 11:48am
YoUturn two sender... Unrequited love challenge
Pomp and spin Circumstance;
Stomp stamP ENd circumstance
Know She abused sew Lee accused the muse of "unrequited love"
She could careless less much two hushhhh one quiet love...
Why get hug width the pats on the back..?
Eye'm knot the Patriot's Brady oar the patriach's baby sew what's that?!?
You perp trying two burp me or hurt me..?
Maybe this just is my justice desserts that's why my baby just did desert me on a dusty desert
eYE LLand solo spacious bro show Oasis
*Show faces faces opposite
tHE LLast man voted on the eYE LLand ...
Stomp stamP ENd circumstance
Know She abused sew Lee accused the muse of "unrequited love"
She could careless less much two hushhhh one quiet love...
Why get hug width the pats on the back..?
Eye'm knot the Patriot's Brady oar the patriach's baby sew what's that?!?
You perp trying two burp me or hurt me..?
Maybe this just is my justice desserts that's why my baby just did desert me on a dusty desert
eYE LLand solo spacious bro show Oasis
*Show faces faces opposite
tHE LLast man voted on the eYE LLand ...
#rejection
#heartbroken
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0 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:16am
Yesterday 11:16am
bare
naked in my vulnerability
don't look at me
I hurt and I don't want you to see...
what my nakedness shows so plainly
I'm different than anyone I know
eternities have come and gone
still, I've yet to find a kindred
weeping in the cold rain
will i ever find peace?
where is my place of rest?
I look at the others and wonder are they pretending
or are they really so at ease in their skin?
I rub my pain with ash
hoping to cover my bare spots
it hurts to be this open
I don't have the luxury...
don't look at me
I hurt and I don't want you to see...
what my nakedness shows so plainly
I'm different than anyone I know
eternities have come and gone
still, I've yet to find a kindred
weeping in the cold rain
will i ever find peace?
where is my place of rest?
I look at the others and wonder are they pretending
or are they really so at ease in their skin?
I rub my pain with ash
hoping to cover my bare spots
it hurts to be this open
I don't have the luxury...
#love
#SelfReflection
25 reads
6 Comments
wallyroo92
Poem Published
Yesterday 8:45am
Yesterday 8:45am
Dancing in His Dream
Dancing in His Dream
#heartbroken
#dreams
#UnrequitedLove
35 reads
5 Comments
Kaylor1967
Ruben
Ruben
Poem Published
Yesterday 7:28am
Yesterday 7:28am
Forgetting to breathe again.
It seems like forever.
Another day just repeating.
Constantly searching.
How he despises who he’s become.
Dissatisfied, broken.
So deeply tarnished.
Mostly a clouded view....
Seeing nothing beyond you.
He’s trapped in a summer of love.
Much younger days when he still believed.
Those times just rip in his mind.
His eyes fade as memories invade.
Faith ending.....
Giving up and going on are both the same dead ends.
Alcohol derived haze allows him to drift.
Daydreaming his way to the eventuality....
Another day just repeating.
Constantly searching.
How he despises who he’s become.
Dissatisfied, broken.
So deeply tarnished.
Mostly a clouded view....
Seeing nothing beyond you.
He’s trapped in a summer of love.
Much younger days when he still believed.
Those times just rip in his mind.
His eyes fade as memories invade.
Faith ending.....
Giving up and going on are both the same dead ends.
Alcohol derived haze allows him to drift.
Daydreaming his way to the eventuality....
#heartbroken
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Pratik
Poem Published
Yesterday 5:15am
Yesterday 5:15am
Love for my dear
Love you my dear
Want to be your near
But to tell you my feelings
I am always in great fear
I am always so confuse
My body becomes lose.
Don't have courage to propose
Thinking that you would refuse.
Think about you day and night.
With you I see my future bright.
Can't stop thinking about you
About you I always write
You are my heart and soul
In my life you have an important role
I will give you my full support
Together we will fulfill our goal
You are the one whom I adore.
You are the...
Want to be your near
But to tell you my feelings
I am always in great fear
I am always so confuse
My body becomes lose.
Don't have courage to propose
Thinking that you would refuse.
Think about you day and night.
With you I see my future bright.
Can't stop thinking about you
About you I always write
You are my heart and soul
In my life you have an important role
I will give you my full support
Together we will fulfill our goal
You are the one whom I adore.
You are the...
#love
14 reads
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PoetSpeak
Poem Published
Yesterday 4:41am
Yesterday 4:41am
Cadence Exploding
Erotic
Eclectic
Eccentric
Exciting
Eclectic
Eccentric
Exciting
#LifeAsAWriter
16 reads
6 Comments
Emotional_Esther
Esther...
Esther...
Poem Published
5th Mar 2021 9:19pm
5th Mar 2021 9:19pm
Manipulated II
I was there at the crack of dawn
Waiting to do anything for you
I'd given up everything if you said to
I was ready to be at your call and beckoning
I gave up my purity for you
I gave up my virginity for you
I gave up my last standing sense of innocence towards my parents for you
I gave up my will to live for you
That one word that made my head spin
Made my heart throb and melt
The way you could say that one word and I'd be there doing anything
Getting on my hands and knees for you
I went from watching you graduate...
Waiting to do anything for you
I'd given up everything if you said to
I was ready to be at your call and beckoning
I gave up my purity for you
I gave up my virginity for you
I gave up my last standing sense of innocence towards my parents for you
I gave up my will to live for you
That one word that made my head spin
Made my heart throb and melt
The way you could say that one word and I'd be there doing anything
Getting on my hands and knees for you
I went from watching you graduate...
#anger
#jealousy
#secrets
#ForbiddenLove
#manipulation
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Emotional_Esther
Esther...
Esther...
Poem Published
5th Mar 2021 9:06pm
5th Mar 2021 9:06pm
Manipulated
I've been gone for seven months
The pains and aches I've felt tower over me
My mistake for thinking older guys will be true
Note to self: Older guys go for younger girls because they're easy to manipulate
Turns out he didn't really like me
I was just another girl in his three sided game
It's fun until you figure out the "I love you" he said to her
Turns out there were more girls under my knowledge
Turns out he never got over the first love
So here I stand alone and crushed
Figuring out he said the same thing to a girl younger than...
The pains and aches I've felt tower over me
My mistake for thinking older guys will be true
Note to self: Older guys go for younger girls because they're easy to manipulate
Turns out he didn't really like me
I was just another girl in his three sided game
It's fun until you figure out the "I love you" he said to her
Turns out there were more girls under my knowledge
Turns out he never got over the first love
So here I stand alone and crushed
Figuring out he said the same thing to a girl younger than...
#anger
#jealousy
#hate #heartbroken
#hate #heartbroken
12 reads
2 Comments
PoetSpeak
Poem Published
5th Mar 2021 7:00pm
5th Mar 2021 7:00pm
Maybe
Maybe it’s what I don’t do
You seem to like that
Street cred for behaving your way
Still leaves me unsettled
There was a time when I could do no wrong
Former lovers are like that
Leaves us both still wanting
You’re turning left
I’m stuck at the light
You seem to like that
Street cred for behaving your way
Still leaves me unsettled
There was a time when I could do no wrong
Former lovers are like that
Leaves us both still wanting
You’re turning left
I’m stuck at the light
#SelfReflection
24 reads
8 Comments
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