Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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affirmation
to touch your dark soul
I would give all of myself
in the cold and bleak
rise to greet your pain
and kiss your wounds
caressing the darkness of being
your woman of heart
I would always be there
lifting you up
sacred love I'm in need of you
sigh, to touch your scars
tracing my fingerss over them
listen to your brokeness
and build you back up again
so the world doesn't hurt so much
tenderly speak passion into being
while you pursue what makes you happy
cheer you on, in your endeavours
...
I would give all of myself
in the cold and bleak
rise to greet your pain
and kiss your wounds
caressing the darkness of being
your woman of heart
I would always be there
lifting you up
sacred love I'm in need of you
sigh, to touch your scars
tracing my fingerss over them
listen to your brokeness
and build you back up again
so the world doesn't hurt so much
tenderly speak passion into being
while you pursue what makes you happy
cheer you on, in your endeavours
...
#love
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Fall into my breath
Hey now where did you go?
Thought I was holding you?
All you are is air darling
Fall into my breath and chase away my fears only don't leave me so hollow
I sit back and look at this thing I've become
Am I really so twisted or are these the things you've filled me up with
But trusting what you say
I truly am not worth a thing.
Thought I was holding you?
All you are is air darling
Fall into my breath and chase away my fears only don't leave me so hollow
I sit back and look at this thing I've become
Am I really so twisted or are these the things you've filled me up with
But trusting what you say
I truly am not worth a thing.
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#rejection
#suffering
#vulnerability
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sullen
sullen in the moment, waiting for your return
my soul reaches out to you
across the seas and great barries between you and me
letting myself drift, I find you treading the depths
my thoughts seek yours
we collect in midnigh'ts gaze
a starry night to get lost in
in perpetual motion, perfectly fluid you stay
your moving away from me
looking on while you go, I dream
of quiet mornings sipping coffee
a time someday, to be held
I wonder how often you dream of me
calling to your shadow and places you have been ...
my soul reaches out to you
across the seas and great barries between you and me
letting myself drift, I find you treading the depths
my thoughts seek yours
we collect in midnigh'ts gaze
a starry night to get lost in
in perpetual motion, perfectly fluid you stay
your moving away from me
looking on while you go, I dream
of quiet mornings sipping coffee
a time someday, to be held
I wonder how often you dream of me
calling to your shadow and places you have been ...
#love
#sea
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Garbage
Try not to let the bad things define you
instead let them refine you
those negative thoughts
with sinister plots
let them blow away in the wind
you'll make mistakes
spend a lifetime to retrace
embarrassed and disgraced
by the narrative in place
forgive yourself
throw them in the garbage
you can pick love
from the song of a morning dove
sing along with its beautiful hum
take a deep breath into the new morning
so, stand and be strong
as the days travel on ...
instead let them refine you
those negative thoughts
with sinister plots
let them blow away in the wind
you'll make mistakes
spend a lifetime to retrace
embarrassed and disgraced
by the narrative in place
forgive yourself
throw them in the garbage
you can pick love
from the song of a morning dove
sing along with its beautiful hum
take a deep breath into the new morning
so, stand and be strong
as the days travel on ...
#regret
#forgiveness
#redemption
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22 Comments
serenading sorrow
welcome to my darkness make yourself at home
among the shattered remains of haunted memories
taste the sadness mixed with melancholy
sorrow will serenade your hurt
lilting pain from her tiny frame
your keening will entertain the many ghosts
should you join them
traveling over us, visitors of past regrets
days I was less than
a slow dance is death
so many vagrant thoughts make their home here
they reside within my inner chambers
little notes of despair escape me
rising on the air in somber tones
to quell...
among the shattered remains of haunted memories
taste the sadness mixed with melancholy
sorrow will serenade your hurt
lilting pain from her tiny frame
your keening will entertain the many ghosts
should you join them
traveling over us, visitors of past regrets
days I was less than
a slow dance is death
so many vagrant thoughts make their home here
they reside within my inner chambers
little notes of despair escape me
rising on the air in somber tones
to quell...
#sadness
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2 Comments
little tree
contemplative soul, wandering through a maze of thought
winding my way through sadness
walking the lonely pathways
a maze of forested trees
I hear their thoughts as I pass by
sentient beings of deep meaning
they ask me, little tree where are your branches
I tell them it has been a hard time for me among the mortals
humans can be cruel
their leaves rustle, as they utter hush little tree
you are to learn, while among them
wisdom gained, to bring back to us, later
we will watch out for you
time avows...
winding my way through sadness
walking the lonely pathways
a maze of forested trees
I hear their thoughts as I pass by
sentient beings of deep meaning
they ask me, little tree where are your branches
I tell them it has been a hard time for me among the mortals
humans can be cruel
their leaves rustle, as they utter hush little tree
you are to learn, while among them
wisdom gained, to bring back to us, later
we will watch out for you
time avows...
#love
#trees
#wisdom
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vulnerable rain
catching rain in my soul
my heart is cleansed
beautiful day when the storm rolled in
carrying away my hurt on the winds
to be blown across an open field
I watch the gray sadness collect as fog
lighting on little flowers to open later
scribed on their petals my soul's sadness
to be plucked later
he loves me he love not
sacred heart carrying my heaviness
the sun smiles my tears are reflective
my blues mix with the sky, touching everyone
no one notices me cry
weeping for the beauty of living ...
my heart is cleansed
beautiful day when the storm rolled in
carrying away my hurt on the winds
to be blown across an open field
I watch the gray sadness collect as fog
lighting on little flowers to open later
scribed on their petals my soul's sadness
to be plucked later
he loves me he love not
sacred heart carrying my heaviness
the sun smiles my tears are reflective
my blues mix with the sky, touching everyone
no one notices me cry
weeping for the beauty of living ...
#love
#sadness
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6 Comments
Wash Away
I hear you cry, I feel your pain
Your hearts ran dry, you can't explain
Down and out, lost at sea
Look around, there I'll be
I'll wipe those tears, take your weight
Blue cascades, my love awaits
The sun will rise, a brand new day
Those distant cries, washed away
Your hearts ran dry, you can't explain
Down and out, lost at sea
Look around, there I'll be
I'll wipe those tears, take your weight
Blue cascades, my love awaits
The sun will rise, a brand new day
Those distant cries, washed away
#emotions
#hope
#inspirational
#love
#motivational
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The Way I Love You
When you are not with me
You are my first thought when I wake up
My last thought before I fall asleep
You are every sip that I drink
You are the sweet fruits that I eat
You are my healing water of life
You are the cooling breeze of wind
Caressing my skin on hot summer days
You accompany me deeply rooted in my heart
When you are with me
We are completely naked
There is no holding back
I share every thought with you
Listen to you attentively
I feel your feelingso
Sense your needs ...
You are my first thought when I wake up
My last thought before I fall asleep
You are every sip that I drink
You are the sweet fruits that I eat
You are my healing water of life
You are the cooling breeze of wind
Caressing my skin on hot summer days
You accompany me deeply rooted in my heart
When you are with me
We are completely naked
There is no holding back
I share every thought with you
Listen to you attentively
I feel your feelingso
Sense your needs ...
#love
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3 Comments
decline
daring myself closer to you
you look good girl, own it
with a sideways glance I get brave
then back out with a piercing look from you
I've never been affected that way
moving over my soul a man of substance
one of value and intellect
I'm not sure I measure up
our circles merge and it begins
I'm on my tip toes trying to stay on your level
your depths amaze me
caressing me with innuendos
you see me smile and the mood is lightened
I turn pink then blush deeply when you take interest
my feelings of...
you look good girl, own it
with a sideways glance I get brave
then back out with a piercing look from you
I've never been affected that way
moving over my soul a man of substance
one of value and intellect
I'm not sure I measure up
our circles merge and it begins
I'm on my tip toes trying to stay on your level
your depths amaze me
caressing me with innuendos
you see me smile and the mood is lightened
I turn pink then blush deeply when you take interest
my feelings of...
#love
34 reads
3 Comments
translation
love lost in translation
the telling too intense, I couldn't just tell you
that I love you
moving in close enough to touch, frightened me enough
your eyes shimmer with dreamscapes, I long to escape to
soulful need, I ache to reach in
tenderness on display but I held back
I was afraid
stalking your perimeter
I watch on as you handle yourself easily
my awkward movements make me feel odd
all angles, not many curves
your edge soft with understanding
I want to believe you
somehow I doubt
so I...
the telling too intense, I couldn't just tell you
that I love you
moving in close enough to touch, frightened me enough
your eyes shimmer with dreamscapes, I long to escape to
soulful need, I ache to reach in
tenderness on display but I held back
I was afraid
stalking your perimeter
I watch on as you handle yourself easily
my awkward movements make me feel odd
all angles, not many curves
your edge soft with understanding
I want to believe you
somehow I doubt
so I...
#love
46 reads
4 Comments
WHEN YOU HAVE SOMETHING
They say when you have something else, that you've never had before. DUE to the fact that there was no real commitment, and consistency of honesty and truth and trust. But yet you were willing to give it a chance, just to see how much of the words hold TRUTH. 🤨 FOR it's true what they say, knowone is sent to you by chance 💕 or accident 😞 FOR it is the cycle of life. Yet soon you will find out the truth, when we encounter someone, who doesn't have the ability to understand, the true meaning of real communications. Between a woman and man or man to woman who is going...
#aging
#fatherhood
#LifeCycle
#LookingForLove
#motherhood
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