Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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Solsist
Poem Published
Today 6:53am
Today 6:53am
Time’s Gone Bye
Her brown skin is smooth as silk
Or so I’ve been told
Oh, how the days grow old
My plans with her have been bilked
Moreover my thoughts just fold
She’s gone, I’m sold
I wish I talked to her more
I wish we made a true connection
I’m obsessed with her complexion
Years I have seen her; only four
So scared of rejection
Why would I win this election?
Though this is not a vote I’m sure
God, point me in the right direction
I need to move past this section of life
If she was wife would depression cure?
Who knows-if only...
Or so I’ve been told
Oh, how the days grow old
My plans with her have been bilked
Moreover my thoughts just fold
She’s gone, I’m sold
I wish I talked to her more
I wish we made a true connection
I’m obsessed with her complexion
Years I have seen her; only four
So scared of rejection
Why would I win this election?
Though this is not a vote I’m sure
God, point me in the right direction
I need to move past this section of life
If she was wife would depression cure?
Who knows-if only...
#love
15 reads
1 Comment
SatInUGal
Kumar
Kumar
Poem Published
Today 5:51am
Today 5:51am
GAIAPHILIA
Sometimes I can see
the earth as a man aroused
sees your naked flesh
the earth as a man aroused
sees your naked flesh
#earth
#environment
#senryu #sensual
#senryu #sensual
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0 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Today 2:55am
Today 2:55am
origins
infinite time bends then extends its hand
and falls into the shadows counting down the hours
I will stand true as my life whittles away
let all the facades fall away while I evolve in truth
it's all in the becoming, in who we were meant to be
ambassadors of humanity
recognize the universes are watching
I solemnly put on scarves of wisdom
hard-earned by my life's journey
enter the silent corridor doing nothing more than observing
I am woman rolling with energy
no turning back, full speed ahead
sentient beings await our...
and falls into the shadows counting down the hours
I will stand true as my life whittles away
let all the facades fall away while I evolve in truth
it's all in the becoming, in who we were meant to be
ambassadors of humanity
recognize the universes are watching
I solemnly put on scarves of wisdom
hard-earned by my life's journey
enter the silent corridor doing nothing more than observing
I am woman rolling with energy
no turning back, full speed ahead
sentient beings await our...
#love
#universe
#stars
37 reads
8 Comments
SatInUGal
Kumar
Kumar
Poem Published
Today 2:33am
Today 2:33am
9/28/20
Every time I visit you
I must pass by death
For I can have no fear
When I present myself
If we are to live
FEROCIOUSLY
I must pass by death
For I can have no fear
When I present myself
If we are to live
FEROCIOUSLY
#love
#death
#determination #fear
#determination #fear
30 reads
8 Comments
smackdownraven
Poem Published
Yesterday 00:58am
Yesterday 00:58am
sanctity
innocence in sanctity of a soul union
sacred vow, holy communion
the child weeps, the maiden blushes
a oneness of being not meant for mortals
the husbandman grooms his beloved
walking with her through life
looking forward to the future
she is promised to him
he guards her purity
so beautiful in many regards
she is evolving in truth
wisdom her covering
no one knows her like he does
into the infinite on a grand adventure
she star gazes when she looks at him
a lovely orchid in the...
sacred vow, holy communion
the child weeps, the maiden blushes
a oneness of being not meant for mortals
the husbandman grooms his beloved
walking with her through life
looking forward to the future
she is promised to him
he guards her purity
so beautiful in many regards
she is evolving in truth
wisdom her covering
no one knows her like he does
into the infinite on a grand adventure
she star gazes when she looks at him
a lovely orchid in the...
#love
#beauty
20 reads
4 Comments
EdibleWords
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:35pm
Yesterday 11:35pm
Ibram and Kendi - Two Opposites Can Agree
The men both believe
that adoption
cuts bio-parents
out of humanity
..or only if the adoption
..is mixed race
what sense does that make?
But hey, a
white supremacy guy
hates Trump just like
a famous anti-racist
named Ibram Kendi
and they both hate
Amy Coney Barrett
...anything can happen now!
that adoption
cuts bio-parents
out of humanity
..or only if the adoption
..is mixed race
what sense does that make?
But hey, a
white supremacy guy
hates Trump just like
a famous anti-racist
named Ibram Kendi
and they both hate
Amy Coney Barrett
...anything can happen now!
#HumanRights
#inequality
23 reads
2 Comments
Baldwin
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:04pm
Yesterday 11:04pm
For Summer
I’ve watched her now
in many of her captive walks
from here to there.
And I have memorized
the subtle music held within
the easy striking pattern of her gait.
And I am left to shake my head
in wonderment.
She does not seem to know
the power of the lulling image she carves out upon the air
as she, in studied silence,
glides along her paths,
of how she eddies supple marvels in her wake.
Nor does she notice how, as she,
with shoulders squared in grace,
all hushed intensity, and focused strength, ...
in many of her captive walks
from here to there.
And I have memorized
the subtle music held within
the easy striking pattern of her gait.
And I am left to shake my head
in wonderment.
She does not seem to know
the power of the lulling image she carves out upon the air
as she, in studied silence,
glides along her paths,
of how she eddies supple marvels in her wake.
Nor does she notice how, as she,
with shoulders squared in grace,
all hushed intensity, and focused strength, ...
#FallingInLove
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PittinixDesigns
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:22pm
Yesterday 10:22pm
The Pleasant Memories Of You Still Comfort Me
For Jamie
This is the last poem I’ll write for you, my beloved Jamie
I’m still grieving a lost intrigue that wasn’t meant to be
Your incredible love left an irremovable mark on my heart
Time has flown by, but I’m not too old to desire you.
Although I’ve been living without you for so many years,
The pleasant memories of you still comfort me today
I’ve never seen another woman with such perfect love
If I could return to the past, I’d get everything right
But finding a soulmate happens only once in one’s lifetime
The chance...
This is the last poem I’ll write for you, my beloved Jamie
I’m still grieving a lost intrigue that wasn’t meant to be
Your incredible love left an irremovable mark on my heart
Time has flown by, but I’m not too old to desire you.
Although I’ve been living without you for so many years,
The pleasant memories of you still comfort me today
I’ve never seen another woman with such perfect love
If I could return to the past, I’d get everything right
But finding a soulmate happens only once in one’s lifetime
The chance...
#love
#grief
#fate
#memories
#WritingPoetry
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:07pm
Yesterday 10:07pm
bidden
effervescent energy lifts my spirit
connected to the air, winds, and universe
rising up and out I touch the aether
careful not to disturb the restless
reaching space my negative energies released
time collects his own
a soul on a long journey of discovery
awakens within
the eternal pools of knowledge are welcoming
ebbing and flowing
lifting me higher
children of the universes sing in unison
a uniting of sanctity covers my mind
careful to reveal the message behind the visions
inside my inner sanctum, I...
connected to the air, winds, and universe
rising up and out I touch the aether
careful not to disturb the restless
reaching space my negative energies released
time collects his own
a soul on a long journey of discovery
awakens within
the eternal pools of knowledge are welcoming
ebbing and flowing
lifting me higher
children of the universes sing in unison
a uniting of sanctity covers my mind
careful to reveal the message behind the visions
inside my inner sanctum, I...
#love
#spiritual
36 reads
5 Comments
solanaceae
Poem Published
Yesterday 7:08pm
Yesterday 7:08pm
Starry-Eyed (Visual)
Starry-Eyed -- Visual Poem
#love
#haiku
#lover
#FallingInLove
#senryu
30 reads
1 Comment
EdibleWords
Poem Published
Yesterday 7:00pm
Yesterday 7:00pm
Nine Months Vs Eternity
An eternity
to remember
what cannot
be undone
versus nine months
of community service
to prevent a
tragedy
to remember
what cannot
be undone
versus nine months
of community service
to prevent a
tragedy
#motherhood
#LifeStruggles
24 reads
2 Comments
anonymous125
Poem Published
Yesterday 4:25pm
Yesterday 4:25pm
A Bond Broken
In the midst
of the world ending,
we stared at each other
and it was as if
we could outlast the rest.
Our unspoken love
could surpass anything,
as long as we stayed in sync.
Then a car passed by
and his gaze shifted.
My heart immediately dropped,
our bond had been broken.
The magic we shared
had floated off into the midnight air.
When his gaze fixed back on mine,
he looked like a stranger.
Distant
and
foreign.
of the world ending,
we stared at each other
and it was as if
we could outlast the rest.
Our unspoken love
could surpass anything,
as long as we stayed in sync.
Then a car passed by
and his gaze shifted.
My heart immediately dropped,
our bond had been broken.
The magic we shared
had floated off into the midnight air.
When his gaze fixed back on mine,
he looked like a stranger.
Distant
and
foreign.
#sadness
#relationships
#heartbroken #emotional
#heartbroken #emotional
25 reads
3 Comments
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