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EpicUtester69
Poem Published
Today 12:59pm
Today 12:59pm
Pissed
Depending we’re you live pissed can be drunk or anger
I am pissed on jacks not angry just drunk
I remember when I first said to you I was pissed
You said what’s wrong I said nothing I’m just drunk
But we fell completely in love and I don’t care where you lived
You turned me on like never before before and I know you still do
You know you make me hot their is nothing that I would not do for you
I know you think of me when your making out with the guy you don’t care for
I ‘now I could of changed things maybe but you still of kept your closed...
I am pissed on jacks not angry just drunk
I remember when I first said to you I was pissed
You said what’s wrong I said nothing I’m just drunk
But we fell completely in love and I don’t care where you lived
You turned me on like never before before and I know you still do
You know you make me hot their is nothing that I would not do for you
I know you think of me when your making out with the guy you don’t care for
I ‘now I could of changed things maybe but you still of kept your closed...
#love
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Eudemonia
Poem Published
Today 4:02am
Today 4:02am
Feeding Flames, Feeding the Void
I lit a candle
In the name of true love
And the dancing flame
Cast a heart shaped shadow
On the wall behind it
But what if that flame
Shone instead into
Velvet black oblivion
The ceaseless void
That swallows
Everything in sight
Would that light
Still shine bright
As the flame I feed
For you in my heart?
In the name of true love
And the dancing flame
Cast a heart shaped shadow
On the wall behind it
But what if that flame
Shone instead into
Velvet black oblivion
The ceaseless void
That swallows
Everything in sight
Would that light
Still shine bright
As the flame I feed
For you in my heart?
#love
15 reads
1 Comment
sophie_ericson
Poem Published
Today 1:33am
Today 1:33am
...
your kiss split my lips, precisely
whispered words gently
placed
morning arrives carrying unfamiliar scents of questions that words can’t vocalise
and thoughts alone can’t stabilise
promises of eternal truths
awakened in a moment
where one can be nothing
but displeased to be alive
vision slowly creeping, knowing
tomorrow I’ll be with you
but forever
I’ll be without you
I ache
over the sound of running ink
until it perforates
my lips yearn for more
than the one
who was,...
whispered words gently
placed
morning arrives carrying unfamiliar scents of questions that words can’t vocalise
and thoughts alone can’t stabilise
promises of eternal truths
awakened in a moment
where one can be nothing
but displeased to be alive
vision slowly creeping, knowing
tomorrow I’ll be with you
but forever
I’ll be without you
I ache
over the sound of running ink
until it perforates
my lips yearn for more
than the one
who was,...
#love
#relationships
#heartbroken #lies
#heartbroken #lies
42 reads
4 Comments
RagingFlames
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:13pm
Yesterday 11:13pm
M.J.E
This is too difficult...
What is your motive?
Why did you play me?
Is this how you're getting back at me?
Raise my hopes
Then break me
I can't forget...
You didn't either...
You made me happy
You made me think I had a chance
Is it fake?
What's going on?
We spent hours
Talking about you and I
But I feel like I shouldn't get close...
I'm hanging on by a strand.
If it's not fake...
Pull me up
Do what you know I wanted to do
It's probably hard to remember who...
What is your motive?
Why did you play me?
Is this how you're getting back at me?
Raise my hopes
Then break me
I can't forget...
You didn't either...
You made me happy
You made me think I had a chance
Is it fake?
What's going on?
We spent hours
Talking about you and I
But I feel like I shouldn't get close...
I'm hanging on by a strand.
If it's not fake...
Pull me up
Do what you know I wanted to do
It's probably hard to remember who...
#love
#boyfriend
#girlfriend
#heartbroken
#breakup
16 reads
0 Comments
RichardJ
Poem Published
Yesterday 3:32pm
Yesterday 3:32pm
Sweet, yearned for moments....
#sensual
53 reads
0 Comments
Poetryman
Poem Published
Yesterday 1:17pm
Yesterday 1:17pm
Radiation Burns
I reached out to touch your porcelain soft skin
Invisible flames leapt from your flesh to burn my soul
Branding my heart with an impression of your face
Enticing me to fall where I have no right to go
Yet I am compelled by the imprint you unknowingly left on me
4000 leagues beneath Jupiter's swirling hurricane
Your crushing gravity holds me beneath your thunderstorm
Yet the calm in your eyes provides my will to survive a tropical isle
Where greenish blue skies gaze down through circling clouds
Lost and found on an island paradise I lay on...
Invisible flames leapt from your flesh to burn my soul
Branding my heart with an impression of your face
Enticing me to fall where I have no right to go
Yet I am compelled by the imprint you unknowingly left on me
4000 leagues beneath Jupiter's swirling hurricane
Your crushing gravity holds me beneath your thunderstorm
Yet the calm in your eyes provides my will to survive a tropical isle
Where greenish blue skies gaze down through circling clouds
Lost and found on an island paradise I lay on...
#love
24 reads
2 Comments
joeborg
Poem Published
Yesterday 11:11am
Yesterday 11:11am
alarms
I just heard the fire alarm
Though i will stay cool and calm,
The sound is messing with my head
It stirs me up I feel so glad,
This alarm goes off from within
drives my thoughts in pleasant sin,
with every pic I see of you
beauty face and eyes so true,
I get distracted from the world
While it feels like twist and turned,
Sadly I’m a bit out of your league
And I look just like a freak,
so to stand out from the crowd
I either have to shout out loud, ...
Though i will stay cool and calm,
The sound is messing with my head
It stirs me up I feel so glad,
This alarm goes off from within
drives my thoughts in pleasant sin,
with every pic I see of you
beauty face and eyes so true,
I get distracted from the world
While it feels like twist and turned,
Sadly I’m a bit out of your league
And I look just like a freak,
so to stand out from the crowd
I either have to shout out loud, ...
#girlfriend
#lover
#crush
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0 Comments
one
Poem Published
Yesterday 10:59am
Yesterday 10:59am
can't be found
close your eyes
listen
really listen
hear the gaps?
i fell
between those cracks
when he fucked with my head
i’m hidden
can’t be found
till he comes back
listen
really listen
hear the gaps?
i fell
between those cracks
when he fucked with my head
i’m hidden
can’t be found
till he comes back
#despair
26 reads
0 Comments
dizzzzzzy
616
616
Poem Published
Yesterday 4:55am
Yesterday 4:55am
I run away
Because I already know what will happen
I see it in my head so clear
The sight makes my eyes well up
If I get to close
I know I'll break down
I know I'll collapse
Because I'm just tired
Tired of everything
Tired of life
If love was in front of me I wouldn't know what to do with it
Awkward and overwhelming
____________
Hey look at it in a positive note....
At least you got a job
I see it in my head so clear
The sight makes my eyes well up
If I get to close
I know I'll break down
I know I'll collapse
Because I'm just tired
Tired of everything
Tired of life
If love was in front of me I wouldn't know what to do with it
Awkward and overwhelming
____________
Hey look at it in a positive note....
At least you got a job
#TimeHeals
43 reads
5 Comments
hgnichols
Poem Published
Yesterday 2:28am
Yesterday 2:28am
Fever-Dream
I wanted something profound to say
about the wilderness we walked
crooked as snakes.
something in your vicious fang
and the orchards’ fruit;
some deep truth feeding the garden
like subterranean creeks
nourishing the thicket hiding
our joint fever-dream.
Like all carnage, ours was empty.
Dreams forgotten on waking,
all pumping earth awaiting collapse,
hollow fruit.
We were animals basking in
idiot nature, drunken meanings,
howling at nothing.
about the wilderness we walked
crooked as snakes.
something in your vicious fang
and the orchards’ fruit;
some deep truth feeding the garden
like subterranean creeks
nourishing the thicket hiding
our joint fever-dream.
Like all carnage, ours was empty.
Dreams forgotten on waking,
all pumping earth awaiting collapse,
hollow fruit.
We were animals basking in
idiot nature, drunken meanings,
howling at nothing.
#love
#dark
#sex
#nostalgia
#FirstLove
18 reads
2 Comments
1Docmcruz
Nourish
Nourish
Poem Published
Yesterday 2:22am
Yesterday 2:22am
Cancer- Stage 4
Stage 2?
They said I need more testing but it could be...
Stage 3.
If wore a dress
with a flattened chest
And a pink ribbon where my bra used to be
with a weakened stride yet a ton of pride would you call me a Fighter?
Stage 4.
On my last day...will you forget to call me Beautiful
When more hair is on my brush than on my head
When i am paler than a page
no strength to grip a pen ...
They said I need more testing but it could be...
Stage 3.
If wore a dress
with a flattened chest
And a pink ribbon where my bra used to be
with a weakened stride yet a ton of pride would you call me a Fighter?
Stage 4.
On my last day...will you forget to call me Beautiful
When more hair is on my brush than on my head
When i am paler than a page
no strength to grip a pen ...
#strength
#LifeStruggles
#illness
22 reads
6 Comments
gaballantyne
Poem Published
16th Oct 2018 00:55am
16th Oct 2018 00:55am
Meet me at the train station
Meet me at the train station.
You’ll know it’s me
I’ll be in a grey hoodie,
And you’ll forget your halo again.
I’ll be standing on the corner
Where time hasn’t moved.
You’ll walk beside me,
Slow and rhythmic, as though there is a song in your head.
We’ll go downtown to watch our ghosts meet again for the very first time.
I’ll say all the things I should have
Your cheeks will become hot as you laugh to stop yourself from believing it all.
I’ll search deep within those troubled eyes
To see if time has tainted you.
I’ll use...
You’ll know it’s me
I’ll be in a grey hoodie,
And you’ll forget your halo again.
I’ll be standing on the corner
Where time hasn’t moved.
You’ll walk beside me,
Slow and rhythmic, as though there is a song in your head.
We’ll go downtown to watch our ghosts meet again for the very first time.
I’ll say all the things I should have
Your cheeks will become hot as you laugh to stop yourself from believing it all.
I’ll search deep within those troubled eyes
To see if time has tainted you.
I’ll use...
#love
26 reads
2 Comments
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