Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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Angels
denying my pleasures of the flesh that I have oft indulged in
because I am reminded of my purpose yet again
on which I first embarked on with a vow
the men awaken me with truth
what's up man did you come just for the sex, drugs and rock n rolll
do you even really remember us yet?
shame fills my being and I remember our promise to each other
cursing at my guard while imprisoned I vowed
I would get even for this
admitting my fears I rise
beaten down while in confinement
and questioned night and day until my release
...
because I am reminded of my purpose yet again
on which I first embarked on with a vow
the men awaken me with truth
what's up man did you come just for the sex, drugs and rock n rolll
do you even really remember us yet?
shame fills my being and I remember our promise to each other
cursing at my guard while imprisoned I vowed
I would get even for this
admitting my fears I rise
beaten down while in confinement
and questioned night and day until my release
...
#angels
#brother
#love
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Embrace the solitude
Always wanting more and never getting it
Following your heart and you keep regretting it
Leads you to disappointment and you keep letting it
Never won a hand but you keep betting it
all...taking chances hoping someone will stay true
Making excuses for every hurtful thing they do
If you love them hard enough they cant help but love you
can't love yourself so you find someone else to give it to
Putting them on a pedestal they can't help but fall from
It's so dumb
But your mind's numb
There's the beat of a drum
In your chest
For a...
Following your heart and you keep regretting it
Leads you to disappointment and you keep letting it
Never won a hand but you keep betting it
all...taking chances hoping someone will stay true
Making excuses for every hurtful thing they do
If you love them hard enough they cant help but love you
can't love yourself so you find someone else to give it to
Putting them on a pedestal they can't help but fall from
It's so dumb
But your mind's numb
There's the beat of a drum
In your chest
For a...
#breakup
#despair
#heartbroken #loneliness
#heartbroken #loneliness
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Fear
looking through time I shutter
for things done in the dark, I can't utter
whispers, secrets, and lies
flawed I'm told by design
madness followed I made a world of illusion
to protect an innocent mind from confusion
Beauty was our creation
tenderly we made all things lovely
each day a new exploration
we made heaven from hell in our confinement
it was not enough to put me away from Himself
time passed and he came to claim my son
creating a ball of fire
a light meant to warm some
and threaten...
for things done in the dark, I can't utter
whispers, secrets, and lies
flawed I'm told by design
madness followed I made a world of illusion
to protect an innocent mind from confusion
Beauty was our creation
tenderly we made all things lovely
each day a new exploration
we made heaven from hell in our confinement
it was not enough to put me away from Himself
time passed and he came to claim my son
creating a ball of fire
a light meant to warm some
and threaten...
#angels
#God
#love #MeToo
#love #MeToo
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An unwinnable game
Im in love with someone who doesn't feel the same
I wish that it would go as quickly as it came
I dont want to play this unwinnable game
Why the fuck did love put me in its aim
I felt happy and alive and now its just an ache
Was cutting off from her the right move to make
Was having her close something i could take
Either way i still feel a heartbreak
I miss her intensely she stays on my mind
And i know that its something that will take some time
I want time with her but its not fates design
Id learn how to love right, for...
I wish that it would go as quickly as it came
I dont want to play this unwinnable game
Why the fuck did love put me in its aim
I felt happy and alive and now its just an ache
Was cutting off from her the right move to make
Was having her close something i could take
Either way i still feel a heartbreak
I miss her intensely she stays on my mind
And i know that its something that will take some time
I want time with her but its not fates design
Id learn how to love right, for...
#love
#UnrequitedLove
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Only time will tell
I stare out towards you
I wonder if I love you
Only time will tell
I wonder if I love you
Only time will tell
#haiku
#LifeStruggles
#love #strength
#love #strength
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Something we never were
I want her so bad that its causing me pain
So i walk away but the feelings remain
My life feels like there is only the rain
Her blue skies is what I'm trying to gain
But i have nothing to offer except scars and trauma
I know when she thinks of me all she sees is the drama
Shes everything that I've been looking for
Shes made me want to open every closed door
Shes trying to be a good friend but I'm wanting more
Cuz i feel like my heart she can restore
I want to know how it feels to have her im my arms
To be fully in...
So i walk away but the feelings remain
My life feels like there is only the rain
Her blue skies is what I'm trying to gain
But i have nothing to offer except scars and trauma
I know when she thinks of me all she sees is the drama
Shes everything that I've been looking for
Shes made me want to open every closed door
Shes trying to be a good friend but I'm wanting more
Cuz i feel like my heart she can restore
I want to know how it feels to have her im my arms
To be fully in...
#love
#UnrequitedLove
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Silence
Silence is that you?
confession number 6 I am afraid
falling forever falling in love with you
no matter the cause, doomed to fail
damned if I do, damned if I don't
pardoned on one condition
my brother, we can not speak
He will destroy me for being evidence of His dark side
laying witness I was cold with grief
imprisoned I was not allowed to stand with you
a traitor to feelings for you...never
visions of the future
you saw in my mind while we soul-coupled
the...
confession number 6 I am afraid
falling forever falling in love with you
no matter the cause, doomed to fail
damned if I do, damned if I don't
pardoned on one condition
my brother, we can not speak
He will destroy me for being evidence of His dark side
laying witness I was cold with grief
imprisoned I was not allowed to stand with you
a traitor to feelings for you...never
visions of the future
you saw in my mind while we soul-coupled
the...
#hell
#love
#philosophical
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Honor
the aquatic need for rebirth compels me to come forth
laying claim to my mind yet again, I take the reigns
jealousy and low self-esteem from systematic worldly rejection
will not be allowed to alter who I inherently am
refocusing my passions, centering my love where it belongs, I take control
allowing my full personality to shine
I will not dim my glow to suit others
if they find me too intense, give me space
you are welcome to your feelings
choosing to see beauty instead of monsters in the mix
everything has beauty even when it's...
laying claim to my mind yet again, I take the reigns
jealousy and low self-esteem from systematic worldly rejection
will not be allowed to alter who I inherently am
refocusing my passions, centering my love where it belongs, I take control
allowing my full personality to shine
I will not dim my glow to suit others
if they find me too intense, give me space
you are welcome to your feelings
choosing to see beauty instead of monsters in the mix
everything has beauty even when it's...
#love
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A Letter from Desperation
what we want,
It is what we do day by day
Living like a mayfly
Maybe?
Our pride gets bent or broken
When you reach an age where you can't walk properly
When you have to give up everything you own
I can't sleep,
When you toss and turn in pain
When you tilt your head,
from leaves
When the tree falls,
in the helmet
When your head falls,
We habitually
send a signal to the stars
“Walk instead of run?”
“Are you crazy?”
the universe answers
Peaceful waves crashing into each other
create a stream ...
It is what we do day by day
Living like a mayfly
Maybe?
Our pride gets bent or broken
When you reach an age where you can't walk properly
When you have to give up everything you own
I can't sleep,
When you toss and turn in pain
When you tilt your head,
from leaves
When the tree falls,
in the helmet
When your head falls,
We habitually
send a signal to the stars
“Walk instead of run?”
“Are you crazy?”
the universe answers
Peaceful waves crashing into each other
create a stream ...
#love
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The dream is over
The years and the moments are all that remain
Thought it hurts there wont be more, I shouldn't complain
Pieces and fragments are still better than losing it all
Watching the cracks in my world as it all starts to fall
Should have and could haves abound and taunt me
And now the thoughts of what never could be
How clear its become only way too late
You told me how you felt and I refused to relate
Now its my turn to know how you felt for so long
And to see how ignoring it feels so wrong
Cant make ammends cuz we're past that point
And the...
Thought it hurts there wont be more, I shouldn't complain
Pieces and fragments are still better than losing it all
Watching the cracks in my world as it all starts to fall
Should have and could haves abound and taunt me
And now the thoughts of what never could be
How clear its become only way too late
You told me how you felt and I refused to relate
Now its my turn to know how you felt for so long
And to see how ignoring it feels so wrong
Cant make ammends cuz we're past that point
And the...
#heartbroken
#love
#regret #sadness
#regret #sadness
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Focus
regaining focus my mind settles
this was a difficult test to go through
I've come to realize I am loved unconditionally
our relationship difficult at times took a tale spin
realizing I too get distracted by the world
it is the laws of attraction
confessing to him I'd been spending emotional time with another
uttering he showed true interest in me and I liked it
with the knowledge I have loved my husband but haven't always liked him
dreaming of different shores where everything is perfect
is an illusion that has...
this was a difficult test to go through
I've come to realize I am loved unconditionally
our relationship difficult at times took a tale spin
realizing I too get distracted by the world
it is the laws of attraction
confessing to him I'd been spending emotional time with another
uttering he showed true interest in me and I liked it
with the knowledge I have loved my husband but haven't always liked him
dreaming of different shores where everything is perfect
is an illusion that has...
#husband
#love
#marriage
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An elderly mother in 90s wants to live with her daughter in 60s
Thinking like this
Saying like this
Acting like this
Dear daughter,
Will Dorothy like it?
More than I like
Dear daughter,
What Dorothy likes
Let's do it first
And just
Let's accept it
Do not ask for it.
Saying like this
Acting like this
Dear daughter,
Will Dorothy like it?
More than I like
Dear daughter,
What Dorothy likes
Let's do it first
And just
Let's accept it
Do not ask for it.
#love
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1 Comment
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