Love Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about lost love, heartbreak and relationship problems
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crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 10:35pm
1st Apr 2025 10:35pm
cherished
Interesting sorrow it brings so much depth
piercing your soul with a look
haunted feelings communicating sadness
to touch the aether and disturb its restlessness
seducing the moment when you awaken to the need of it
When it passes and the melancholy resides, you realize your happiness
a place so deep within needs sorrow
it speaks of things not understood on the conscious level
interpreting your emotions
at a level not scratched by surface conversations
emptiness means you will be filled
Loneliness beckons others closer...
piercing your soul with a look
haunted feelings communicating sadness
to touch the aether and disturb its restlessness
seducing the moment when you awaken to the need of it
When it passes and the melancholy resides, you realize your happiness
a place so deep within needs sorrow
it speaks of things not understood on the conscious level
interpreting your emotions
at a level not scratched by surface conversations
emptiness means you will be filled
Loneliness beckons others closer...
#love
48 reads
2 Comments
Thesilverymoon
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 7:28pm
1st Apr 2025 7:28pm
The whole package
1/30
*The whole package*
Ten pairs of socks
arrived today
from Temu
along with some kitchen utensils
a polymer clay stencil
and a pair of beaded earrings
I sat on the couch
with the socks
and the torn crumpled
plastic white packaging
feeling
well..
all of the above
churned up
and unseen
The Sun faded off
the end of another day
He hadn’t been responding
Like I wanted him to
I am so fucking jaded
tricking myself into believing
that...
*The whole package*
Ten pairs of socks
arrived today
from Temu
along with some kitchen utensils
a polymer clay stencil
and a pair of beaded earrings
I sat on the couch
with the socks
and the torn crumpled
plastic white packaging
feeling
well..
all of the above
churned up
and unseen
The Sun faded off
the end of another day
He hadn’t been responding
Like I wanted him to
I am so fucking jaded
tricking myself into believing
that...
#crush
#UnrequitedLove
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0 Comments
InDreamz
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 2:32pm
1st Apr 2025 2:32pm
Sepia tone
I remember our love
in sepia tone
Rustic and raw pictures
of our beautiful memories
playing in my mind.
The rugged and worn off edges
of photos of our togetherness
...of moments timeless,
as if a continuum-
beginning from infinity
when stars blossomed into life;
a phantasmagoria of
smiles and tears
rainbows and rain,
ebbing and flowing
with the passage of time
like a dream within a dream
embedded in my soul...
Though you aren't here
your absence can't consume me
...this...
in sepia tone
Rustic and raw pictures
of our beautiful memories
playing in my mind.
The rugged and worn off edges
of photos of our togetherness
...of moments timeless,
as if a continuum-
beginning from infinity
when stars blossomed into life;
a phantasmagoria of
smiles and tears
rainbows and rain,
ebbing and flowing
with the passage of time
like a dream within a dream
embedded in my soul...
Though you aren't here
your absence can't consume me
...this...
#death
#hope
#love
#memories
#stars
86 reads
9 Comments
Betty
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 12:27pm
1st Apr 2025 12:27pm
the stars I was born under were f**king c**ts
I was born without luck.
I had to shove a rabbit’s foot
up my ass and tape
four-leaf clovers to my nipples
just to get through the day
without disaster.
But the tape always wore out
and the rabbit’s foot gave
me crack-rot
so I made my own luck
by working circles
around anyone near me
and cutting a few well-placed throats.
Something stilled
when we stood in a steam-fillwd
shower, my forehead pressed
against your aching back
until I swore my skin
could taste your thoughts
I...
I had to shove a rabbit’s foot
up my ass and tape
four-leaf clovers to my nipples
just to get through the day
without disaster.
But the tape always wore out
and the rabbit’s foot gave
me crack-rot
so I made my own luck
by working circles
around anyone near me
and cutting a few well-placed throats.
Something stilled
when we stood in a steam-fillwd
shower, my forehead pressed
against your aching back
until I swore my skin
could taste your thoughts
I...
#lust
#obsession
#passion
100 reads
9 Comments
Nevermindthegaps
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 9:52am
1st Apr 2025 9:52am
What We had And Can We Get It Back
I get bogged down in the where’s and why’s
I’m less sophisticated
I could blame it on
being a man
being selfish
being brought up in the gutter
too much ego not enough real love for
the art that you crafted from your id
or I could just admit I’m…
I’m just a lucky cunt
with idiot-savant syndrome
more idiot than savant
trying to make sense of what we were
in all the back ground noise
there’s a quiet solitude
before the shitstorm I drag with me
hits
I realise
you may want a reason to glue...
I’m less sophisticated
I could blame it on
being a man
being selfish
being brought up in the gutter
too much ego not enough real love for
the art that you crafted from your id
or I could just admit I’m…
I’m just a lucky cunt
with idiot-savant syndrome
more idiot than savant
trying to make sense of what we were
in all the back ground noise
there’s a quiet solitude
before the shitstorm I drag with me
hits
I realise
you may want a reason to glue...
#hope
#obsession
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1 Comment
Nevermindthegaps
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 9:35am
1st Apr 2025 9:35am
You Placed Your Neck Inside The Noose
I love
the feel of your pretty throat
against my thick fingers
then
the way you press in deeper
daring me to pull the lever
the feel of your pretty throat
against my thick fingers
then
the way you press in deeper
daring me to pull the lever
#BDSM
#dirty
#lover #sex
#lover #sex
121 reads
1 Comment
EveAteRedApples
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 7:56am
1st Apr 2025 7:56am
It's all semantics, babe
Make me your dirty little secret
you know it's nothing new
to my over bruised soul
what's one more sin
to someone like me?
I mean
you did always love a good whore
-Eve-
you know it's nothing new
to my over bruised soul
what's one more sin
to someone like me?
I mean
you did always love a good whore
-Eve-
#love
#lust
#sex #UnrequitedLove
#sex #UnrequitedLove
75 reads
3 Comments
jemac
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 3:24am
1st Apr 2025 3:24am
Nature's Warnings
wind raced across sky
black grey clouds bursting warm rain
golden flashes boom
black grey clouds bursting warm rain
golden flashes boom
#LifeAsAWriter
#rain
#storm
54 reads
4 Comments
Betty
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 2:43am
1st Apr 2025 2:43am
lifeline
your need is a
noose
and I’m
emotionally
suicidal
noose
and I’m
emotionally
suicidal
#lust
#minimalist
#obsession
120 reads
12 Comments
smackdownraven
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 2:38am
1st Apr 2025 2:38am
shiver
darker and darker still
runs cold the water deeper
Lingers love, but it is outshone
surrender to the loneliness
shivers the doubt to feel you once more
increasing fear it will never be
conniving heart seeking redemption
from my cast-off state
staring into the emptiness of fate
fatal need I need too much
greedy understanding there was always something
So clever about you
Stroking your ego only boosted mine
selfish love ever lies
narcissistic lust with chaotic ties bind
releasing the...
runs cold the water deeper
Lingers love, but it is outshone
surrender to the loneliness
shivers the doubt to feel you once more
increasing fear it will never be
conniving heart seeking redemption
from my cast-off state
staring into the emptiness of fate
fatal need I need too much
greedy understanding there was always something
So clever about you
Stroking your ego only boosted mine
selfish love ever lies
narcissistic lust with chaotic ties bind
releasing the...
#love
51 reads
0 Comments
crimsin
Unveiling
Unveiling
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 2:11am
1st Apr 2025 2:11am
caress
loneliness of soul I'm missing something
wandering spirit return to me
caress the feeling
sensing you are near
covet the art of forgetting
it hurts too much to remember
listless day give me invitation
to share in celebration with your earth-bound children
remorseful shadow cultivating sorrow within me
draw nearer so I will know the immortal
part me from my brothers and sisters
and let me forget what it is to be human
painful understanding I am terribly different
with thoughts of where will I go
cast...
wandering spirit return to me
caress the feeling
sensing you are near
covet the art of forgetting
it hurts too much to remember
listless day give me invitation
to share in celebration with your earth-bound children
remorseful shadow cultivating sorrow within me
draw nearer so I will know the immortal
part me from my brothers and sisters
and let me forget what it is to be human
painful understanding I am terribly different
with thoughts of where will I go
cast...
#metaphor
#spiritual
54 reads
0 Comments
smackdownraven
Poem Published
1st Apr 2025 00:30am
1st Apr 2025 00:30am
echoes the silence
singing to silence I sigh
forgotten vows and broken promises
echo in my thoughts
once you shine in my mind
then time fades the glow
loneliness and emptiness where you once stood
There will never be another like you
devilish need inside the painful memories
happiness laughing in the rain
sorrow covets and sadness hugs herself
a child I can't console
my broken heart can't mend
in the eternal rift, there will always be a you and me
Big tears roll down my face
as thoughts of your beauty astound me
...
forgotten vows and broken promises
echo in my thoughts
once you shine in my mind
then time fades the glow
loneliness and emptiness where you once stood
There will never be another like you
devilish need inside the painful memories
happiness laughing in the rain
sorrow covets and sadness hugs herself
a child I can't console
my broken heart can't mend
in the eternal rift, there will always be a you and me
Big tears roll down my face
as thoughts of your beauty astound me
...
#love
34 reads
2 Comments
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