Sex and Candy

K...think i got everyone? If not..was an oversight...knock on my door and say C'mon jen!

Some don't like me commenting..i do not pretend to be an authority..
I like to do it because some dont get the feed back they deserve...it can be difficult to get reads and reviews if you dont have time to really work this site..

And because taking a minute to write what i think helps me put your pieces in my head..so no one who deserves it is overlooked in placing...

When i say you might tweak this..i am speaking towards my taste.and how i judge..so that you know. And it gives an opportunity to edit..or not.
I am not saying i know everything about poetry...and im right you are wrong.

You will not offend me if you say..i don't care for feedback..

Sorry for the rant..had some hurt feelings and trouble in a recent comp, and want to make that clear...

Sorry for my delay!

Jizz (Part 2)

The boss had a nervous habit
of whistling Beatles melodies
when walking through the stock
room to his office with "Penny Lane"
pulling her away from the embrace
and into a meeting that took her
to the end of her afternoon shift .

I worked until nine when
I saw a note on my time
card with a phone number ,
an X and O , and a smiley face.
I jogged to the pay phone
in the break room and called
in a voice an octave too high.

She seemed surprised to hear
from me so soon but told me
to come by her apartment
for lunch at noon and gave
me lousy directions but I had
a Yonkers street map in my
Dodge Dart's glove compartment .

So wired I didn't sleep well
so I got up at seven and did
a hundred sit-ups , push ups ,
jumping jacks ,and a dozen
laps around my neighborhood .
Mom had made some buttermilk
pancakes which I ate though cold.

My belly was so nervous i must
have spent a good hour making
faces on the porcelain throne.
After drinking half a bottle of
Kaopectate I set out on the road.
No trouble finding her building
but almost an hour early.

I flipped a nickel to decide
whether to come in early
since there was no answer
when I called from a pay phone.
I decided to throw caution to
the wind and rang the buzzer.
The glass door unlocked remotely.

She opened her door wearing
a sweat stained pink tee shirt.  
Her eyes widened as if expecting
somebody else. We sat on a ratty
brown vinyl couch and wrestled
tongues for a few minutes
before she excused herself.

I sat alone for at least ten
minutes which seemed like
an hour before finally getting
up needing to piss anyway
and saw that she was in
the bedroom covered by
an olive green flannel sheet.

"I am quite the hostess
aren't I ," she whispered
revealing a black lace
négligée and my hard on
nearly tore through my zipper
as I crawled into bed with her
beginning to rub the denim bulge .

And I closed my eyes
with my cock leaking cum
like my Dart leaked oil
till she let out a snort
and I realized she was fast
asleep and mumbling
something about inventory.

I didn't have the heart
to wake her so I went
to the bathroom and peed
but before I could wipe
Mister Friendly I heard a car
honking like a gaggle
of angry geese .

A man's voice hollering
from the street,
"Hurry the fuck up.
I only got a half hour
so if you want a ride
you got to get your fat
ass down here right now."

I walked back into
the bed room as
she opened the window,
her pudgy buns shaking
as she shrieked ,
"Calm the fuck down
before you get us evicted."

I didn't need no cue card
to wipe my sticky dick
with my tee shirt and let
the virgin out as she
ransacked her dresser
tossing clothes about while
cursing under her breath.

QUILL!!
I am sooo happy i asked...sucks for, well all three of you...but what a great read!

You have a way with using the explicit...and it not come out  filthy.


I didn't need no cue card
to wipe my sticky dick
with my tee shirt and let
the virgin out as she
raskild her dresser
tossing clothes about while
cursing under her breath.

Love...i enjoy you writing how you speak in this...grammar isn't important if you have grounded tech skills and it is used in the overall devoloement or good of poem or story...
In my opinion...i do feel you should be able too at will, however...you are obviously intelligent and believe you could. That was a big circle to take to.a compliment, but swear it was...lol

Definitely one of the strongest entries...
Thank you!

I am thinking.   Suddenly it sinks in..you are an 18 year old virgin...and you didnt get too, cuz hubby came home!  Biiiig missed opportunity..lol Jeez Jen...

Like..the biggest...great job....

Fireball

Demon red, steal my mind with your sex
and your innocent stare
where inside that white creamy beauty
beats A pulsating passion as bright as your hair
The sweet and spicy drenching clench
of the cinnamon jawbreaker
rolls across my tongue
as I Imagine your flavor

hi Jen Sorry to read you've been unwell dear girl I hope you're better now. The daft ditty was laced with hyperbole. I did see a girl at a party way back then she looked gorgeous and very mature at a distance. When I spoke to her later on her young girl's voice and speech gave her away. She was 14 the little bugger had sneaked out of the house to attend.
Get well soon me dear.

Sex And Candy

Sex and candy now that’s handy
To tell my tale of a bad man randy
Saw a youngster in the park
She raised his lust so evil, dark

Hello little girl he smoothly said
Eye a popping from out his head
I’ve lost my puppy can you help
Call his name and he might yelp

OK she said and sweetly smiled
Oh good girl you pretty child
He’s in the bushes over here
Can you come and help me dear?

Yes sir what’s the puppy’s name
To have him lost would be a shame
His name is Dick and I’ve no doubt
That soon you'll see him popping out

Then he pounced lifting up her skirt
I’ll give you some candy it won’t hurt
His other hand went toward his fly
Suck my candy please don’t cry

As he starts to leer and gloat
She presses a button on her coat
In dash the vigilante gang
Let’s find a tree so you can hang

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I reeeaally like this..

The sweet and spicy drenching clench
of the cinnamon jawbreaker

This was "hot" without being at all trashy..
Imagining the taste..and hearing the jawbreaker roll clicking round your teeth...really picks up mouth movement, and sounds of cunnilingus..

Thanks Awesome...

blocat said:hi Jen Sorry to read you've been unwell dear girl I hope you're better now. The daft ditty was laced with hyperbole. I did see a girl at a party way back then she looked gorgeous and very mature at a distance. When I spoke to her later on her young girl's voice and speech gave her away. She was 14 the little bugger had sneaked out of the house to attend.
Get well soon me dear.

Was just razzin you..loved it. 😝

Oh Tony...lol
You bout gave me a heart attack..lol
Oh god..😝

His name is Dick and I’ve no doubt
That soon ywoul see him popping out

Lol that's a bit of clever there...and i love word play...
And rapists hangin by trees!

The rhyme and humor softened this enough to be able to enjoy it..a lot..

Great entry...thank you!

Wally...
I really enjoy everything i read of yours..
This as well..
Hour glass all calves and ass..
I love a black pencil skirt and sling backs...
I was really with you trying to focus on the questions..seeing you nod in a daze..
And loved you kept the card...lol

Very cool..thanks!

This was so hard...
A superb bunch of entries...

The three were all chosen for different reasons.
Imagination..clever humour....
And theme....

Congrats everyone for great work..
Not a stinker in the bunch...😝

Thanks Jen and I'm deeply honoured to be named Runner up. The standard was very high in this one so what a pleasant surprise. I knocked that piece out at the last minute as a sort of apology for my first daft entry.
Love's yer ter bitz gal.!

Oh! Lol...kitty...loved the first sweetie! Was giving you da bidness...but this one was ...lol

If i objected to something.. You would know for sure lol...

Great stuff doll.

Congrats to all and thanks for runner up!