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archaic love letters to a deity
you send out a frequency
a low vibration
a hum that only i can feel
you call upon me to answer
your's is a cosmic language
that i pretend not to understand
i weep that i've traveled so far
to be free from your presence
in vice & deed
i pushed your hand from me
in the nebula of my departure
you nixed the portal behind me
in the void i left you
you took a mistress
& broke the suns of my tomorrows
i took the Earth as lover
we communicate through archaic love letters
i will reach my preordained destination
the outcome is still not known
so many vessels crushed
by your tyranny
still i address your court
with love in my heart
& honor that runs through my blue veins
Copyright © 2017 Crimsin. All Rights Reserved
Published 4th Jul 2017
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Anonymous
- Edited 4th Jul 2017 11:23pm
4th Jul 2017 11:16pm
"you took a mistress
& broke the suns of my tomorrows
i took the Earth as lover"
Stunning fucking line crimbear enviable boom baby you got it 🌹🌹🌹🌹
P.s. Your pushing me to write better thank you. A purely Elysian write phenom you are.
& broke the suns of my tomorrows
i took the Earth as lover"
Stunning fucking line crimbear enviable boom baby you got it 🌹🌹🌹🌹
P.s. Your pushing me to write better thank you. A purely Elysian write phenom you are.
thank you dearest poet I'm blushing & am deeply honored by your comment.. love Crim
5th Jul 2017 2:01am
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5th Jul 2017 7:15am
it's tragic that love affairs with deities are often one sided. If only they could know how much....
Excellent ink, my lovely Crim.
Excellent ink, my lovely Crim.
5th Jul 2017 12:37pm
thank you my Dark Lord though I think this deity has love for me still.. I believe it was me who had problems with his tyranny.. I deeply cherish your thoughts.. love Crim
Anonymous
5th Jul 2017 7:52am
Wow ! Nice !
5th Jul 2017 12:38pm
Anonymous
5th Jul 2017 3:46pm
That last stanza is so perfectly you personified. Love and honor through and through. The gentle beauty running through this is exquisite, my lovely Dark Angel.
So much love for you...
So much love for you...
5th Jul 2017 4:06pm
thank you lovely one for seeing the gentle tone as was intended & for seeing beauty in it.. I love you lady.. xo Crim
5th Jul 2017 7:56pm
i'm spending the evening catching up on your poems coz i've been maaaaaajorly missing out...
loved this one, brenda
you took such a delicate touch to your thoughts
& it shows in the word choices & placement,
in the gorgeous, celestial imagery ....
" "
^^^^^^
ohmygoodness levels of ahfreakingmazing!
the sombre & [mayhap] self deprecating tone isn't lost in the metaphors
a really tight write that tugs at the heartstrings
xo
love ya, beautiful one
loved this one, brenda
you took such a delicate touch to your thoughts
& it shows in the word choices & placement,
in the gorgeous, celestial imagery ....
" "
^^^^^^
ohmygoodness levels of ahfreakingmazing!
the sombre & [mayhap] self deprecating tone isn't lost in the metaphors
a really tight write that tugs at the heartstrings
xo
love ya, beautiful one
6th Jul 2017 4:27am
thank you graciously beautiful one in love with your comment & i absolutely cherish your presence on my pages dearest lady.. love you.. Brenda
6th Jul 2017 12:09pm
This has a no filter kind of feel to it, reduction and elevation at the same time ....
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6th Jul 2017 6:22pm
Anonymous
7th Jul 2017 4:55am
My Beautiful Brenda, it is in these perfected final lines that finish the tranquil journey you've taken us on in this write..
"still i address your court
with love in my heart
& honor that runs through my blue veins"
showing such love only embraces yourself and all that you are my love...
I love you deeply, madly
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
"still i address your court
with love in my heart
& honor that runs through my blue veins"
showing such love only embraces yourself and all that you are my love...
I love you deeply, madly
With all my love - Taryn xoxo
9th Jul 2017 3:47am
thank you my love this is me in submission yet at the same time a little rebellious ;) I love passionately.. Brenda
Anonymous
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