Upbeat Inspirational Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Adelphina
Poem Published
1st Sep 2021 3:39am
1st Sep 2021 3:39am
Evolution Revolution
It's a dark night
and I'm hanging in air.
Like an eagle being still
anticipating a kill.
But this monster named fear
has his claws sunk into my back.
I need to break them off
it will turn my spirit black.
It's time to move my wings.
Shred into a flaming phoenix
to melt its claws.
Time to glide around mountains and
light up this onyx black sky.
Time to breath in pure fresh air.
I don't want this feeling to die.
I look ahead and see
flashes of silver lightning waiting for me.
Time to challenge myself again ...
and I'm hanging in air.
Like an eagle being still
anticipating a kill.
But this monster named fear
has his claws sunk into my back.
I need to break them off
it will turn my spirit black.
It's time to move my wings.
Shred into a flaming phoenix
to melt its claws.
Time to glide around mountains and
light up this onyx black sky.
Time to breath in pure fresh air.
I don't want this feeling to die.
I look ahead and see
flashes of silver lightning waiting for me.
Time to challenge myself again ...
#anxiety
#courage
#LifeChangingMoment
632 reads
14 Comments
King_Seraphiel
Joshua Jamal
Joshua Jamal
Poem Published
23rd Jan 2025 4:31pm
23rd Jan 2025 4:31pm
I'm an African American
I'm an African American/
I'm an African American that had a dream/ that I can/ overcome/ the war that has begun from the outside and from within/ being oppressed, ridiculed and rejected/ due to the color of skin/ the only thing that has changed/ is that I'm no longer in visable chains/ and people smile and call me "friend"/however the notion of never being equal will never end/
I'm an African American
I am different in body shape and stature/ even though I'm a victim of being bullied and put on a podium for laughter/ its my culture and body shape that those same...
I'm an African American that had a dream/ that I can/ overcome/ the war that has begun from the outside and from within/ being oppressed, ridiculed and rejected/ due to the color of skin/ the only thing that has changed/ is that I'm no longer in visable chains/ and people smile and call me "friend"/however the notion of never being equal will never end/
I'm an African American
I am different in body shape and stature/ even though I'm a victim of being bullied and put on a podium for laughter/ its my culture and body shape that those same...
#faith
#morality
#spiritual
71 reads
2 Comments
poeticdelight
Hamid
Hamid
Poem Published
23rd Jan 2025 1:49pm
23rd Jan 2025 1:49pm
At The Crossroads Of Life
Waiting For a New Day
Still i am a constant faithful
To the river, forest and mountain
To the route i ever take,
Winding pathways, daily trodden
And where the herds hit the road
When dawn slowly begins to heave
The dew then glistens in the light
Life awakes and stands once again
How can the mundane then understand?
Too long sleeping in the rotten bed
And the bustle-assaulted poor citizen
Feel my words while glued in his den???
Come up now, make your days fine
Make hay while the...
Still i am a constant faithful
To the river, forest and mountain
To the route i ever take,
Winding pathways, daily trodden
And where the herds hit the road
When dawn slowly begins to heave
The dew then glistens in the light
Life awakes and stands once again
How can the mundane then understand?
Too long sleeping in the rotten bed
And the bustle-assaulted poor citizen
Feel my words while glued in his den???
Come up now, make your days fine
Make hay while the...
#courage
#hope
#inspirational
#motivational
#TimeHeals
73 reads
0 Comments
BaldyBrown
Poem Published
23rd Jan 2025 7:37am
23rd Jan 2025 7:37am
One Free Dream Card
Tell me this is not a dream. I’m sorry, yes it is, but do not worry because I have good news,
that life is but a transient dream.
We are all inserted into this dream with one dream-come-true card in our pocket. It is not ours to play. The cosmos will play it for us because it knows better, but when it is played it will be as unassuming and miraculous as the birth of a child.
On the karmic road, this will become a point of maturing, and will be laden with images that you have payed forward into your universe. Mere logic will not be able to logically assemble the...
that life is but a transient dream.
We are all inserted into this dream with one dream-come-true card in our pocket. It is not ours to play. The cosmos will play it for us because it knows better, but when it is played it will be as unassuming and miraculous as the birth of a child.
On the karmic road, this will become a point of maturing, and will be laden with images that you have payed forward into your universe. Mere logic will not be able to logically assemble the...
#admiration
#hope
#motivational #universe
#motivational #universe
34 reads
0 Comments
Pete_25
Poem Published
22nd Jan 2025 8:11am
22nd Jan 2025 8:11am
Walls
Take your
Judgement
Let it rest
My heart
On sleeve
Represents
Drink my flaws
Here right now
I'll break
These walls
Someway
Somehow
Judgement
Let it rest
My heart
On sleeve
Represents
Drink my flaws
Here right now
I'll break
These walls
Someway
Somehow
#courage
#emotions
#inspirational
#motivational
#strength
84 reads
12 Comments
MySmile
Besma
Besma
Poem Published
21st Jan 2025 3:48pm
21st Jan 2025 3:48pm
Unforgettable
I wonder, myself whom I venerate
The voice of my heart if loud fair enough!
The hive of my life I strive to relate
Aspire to unleash my wonders, seems tough.
To craft a soul of light, creed of the core
The quest for mines of gems never shall end
The harsh thrusts I’ve learned not to deplore
For every stance there shall be a firm stand.
Pearly prints along your path, your voice carve
Sound sounds are seized and unforgettable
Medallions feeding souls to never starve
The bliss is a blessing increasable.
Sowing abiding...
The voice of my heart if loud fair enough!
The hive of my life I strive to relate
Aspire to unleash my wonders, seems tough.
To craft a soul of light, creed of the core
The quest for mines of gems never shall end
The harsh thrusts I’ve learned not to deplore
For every stance there shall be a firm stand.
Pearly prints along your path, your voice carve
Sound sounds are seized and unforgettable
Medallions feeding souls to never starve
The bliss is a blessing increasable.
Sowing abiding...
#admiration
#learning
#sonnet
#spiritual
#strength
45 reads
0 Comments
AmyMMosier
Poem Published
20th Jan 2025 6:21pm
20th Jan 2025 6:21pm
Kentia palms catch a breeze
Kentia palms catch a breeze
And sway gently in their rows;
This verdant sanctuary
Comforts me like the psalms.
I amble slowly between them -
My head tapped by the fronds.
I feel the warmth of the sun;
The fresh air fills my lungs.
A kintsugi pot rests on pebbles -
Beautiful but defiant.
Gold sealed up the fissures -
Reminding me of who I am.
And sway gently in their rows;
This verdant sanctuary
Comforts me like the psalms.
I amble slowly between them -
My head tapped by the fronds.
I feel the warmth of the sun;
The fresh air fills my lungs.
A kintsugi pot rests on pebbles -
Beautiful but defiant.
Gold sealed up the fissures -
Reminding me of who I am.
#hurt
36 reads
0 Comments
fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
20th Jan 2025 2:30pm
20th Jan 2025 2:30pm
Lit Candle
I held a candle lit
For you to follow
You came close in fear of it
Scared to reveal what’s in the shadow
You ran to the light
Blew it out
Diminishing the spark
No one can see who you are
In the dark
You shed lonely tears
Not wanting to be held
Condemning all who want to hold you
Sending them to hell
Striking a match to light the wick
See all the tears shed behind it
The light that is held is an illusion you know
No one can be this good not even the white is...
For you to follow
You came close in fear of it
Scared to reveal what’s in the shadow
You ran to the light
Blew it out
Diminishing the spark
No one can see who you are
In the dark
You shed lonely tears
Not wanting to be held
Condemning all who want to hold you
Sending them to hell
Striking a match to light the wick
See all the tears shed behind it
The light that is held is an illusion you know
No one can be this good not even the white is...
#forgiveness
#kindness
114 reads
12 Comments
Lynxxey
Poem Published
20th Jan 2025 12:05pm
20th Jan 2025 12:05pm
My Favorite Things
Green fields and roses, pillow talk whispers
Colorful sunsets, and little kitten whiskers
When life pits my senses and tears at my seams
I sit and I think of my favorite things
Like, sunlight that lies on the leaves of an oak tree
Or getting so high that you forget to breathe
Fluttering wings and the scent in the breeze
These are a few of my favorite things
Speckled purple patterns, people feeling flattered
A smoke that smells funny, glass and shatter
I never hide from the rain clouds in spring
I sit and I focus on life’s...
Colorful sunsets, and little kitten whiskers
When life pits my senses and tears at my seams
I sit and I think of my favorite things
Like, sunlight that lies on the leaves of an oak tree
Or getting so high that you forget to breathe
Fluttering wings and the scent in the breeze
These are a few of my favorite things
Speckled purple patterns, people feeling flattered
A smoke that smells funny, glass and shatter
I never hide from the rain clouds in spring
I sit and I focus on life’s...
#MentalHealth
#uplifting
54 reads
0 Comments
Pete_25
Poem Published
20th Jan 2025 8:13am
20th Jan 2025 8:13am
In Session
Take a look inside my mind
The devil's got a hold on me
"Take a seat, try and relax
Have a sip of my herbal tea"
There's a place, there's a time
You possess the magic key
"Open up, look at me
Have a sip of my herbal tea"
Clean my mind, cleanse those thoughts
Set those little demons free
"You're discharged, demonic free
Did you like my funny tea?"
The devil's got a hold on me
"Take a seat, try and relax
Have a sip of my herbal tea"
There's a place, there's a time
You possess the magic key
"Open up, look at me
Have a sip of my herbal tea"
Clean my mind, cleanse those thoughts
Set those little demons free
"You're discharged, demonic free
Did you like my funny tea?"
#emotions
#funny
87 reads
8 Comments
MySmile
Besma
Besma
Poem Published
19th Jan 2025 10:13pm
19th Jan 2025 10:13pm
A Throbbing Scent - with adagio
Pale lips of blue perishable breath
Silence without cliches, listening,
Stuck upon a memory that you are
Blossoming in death’s trite without
Critique in my slumber as I sleep
***
Stirred is the mind by a throbbing scent
Soul refilled straying off an end
A warm love unearthed now blooming
So soft the sound of a seed life sipping
Silence just retreated while smiling..
Silence without cliches, listening,
Stuck upon a memory that you are
Blossoming in death’s trite without
Critique in my slumber as I sleep
***
Stirred is the mind by a throbbing scent
Soul refilled straying off an end
A warm love unearthed now blooming
So soft the sound of a seed life sipping
Silence just retreated while smiling..
#collaboration
#rebirth
#spiritual
65 reads
6 Comments
poeticdelight
Hamid
Hamid
Poem Published
19th Jan 2025 3:35pm
19th Jan 2025 3:35pm
Indelible Lines
Oh, how much i long
For the vintage sound of the olden music
The plaintive violin, under the gentle caress
A stroke of a piano-keys, by slender fingers
Of which the joy is not the less..
Oh, what a craving i do have !!!
Golden fields sway like sea-waves
The waltzing dance of the Summer wheat
Ripened under May's heat
The cheerful grasshoppers' sizzling shriek..
With hot chirping, skipping
Wheezing, such a cosy bossom
Where throbbing sentiments live
...
For the vintage sound of the olden music
The plaintive violin, under the gentle caress
A stroke of a piano-keys, by slender fingers
Of which the joy is not the less..
Oh, what a craving i do have !!!
Golden fields sway like sea-waves
The waltzing dance of the Summer wheat
Ripened under May's heat
The cheerful grasshoppers' sizzling shriek..
With hot chirping, skipping
Wheezing, such a cosy bossom
Where throbbing sentiments live
...
#faith
#morality
#philosophical
#rebirth
#spiritual
75 reads
6 Comments
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